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His Allur  n 
 
 g Slumber 
By Skyle S
 
Jayne 
©2010 Skyler Shanice Jayne 
 
 
 
His Alluring Slumber 
~ Skyler S Jayne
I sat at the edge of the deck on our huge boat. A boat I hired
 just 
for tonight. The wind blew through my hair, the calm waves of the ocean slowly lulling me to sleep.But I couldn’t sleep, not yet anyway. I have to focus on my mission of 
finally 
meeting her.I felt a pair of warm arms around my waist. “You need to get some sleep babe” shesaid.“I can’t babe, I won’t rest till I finally meet her” I said and yawned for probably thefiftieth time.“It 
kills 
me to see you this way, Tim. You’re wearing yourself out” she said andkissed my cheek.“But Sandy, we’ll reach any minute” I said, “I can’t sleep now”.“The captain said that we’ll reach in one hour. Go to sleep. I’ll wake you up 15minutes before we reach” she said.“You promise?” I asked her.“I promise, babe” she said and we went downstairs and walked towards the beds.She tucked me in and went out.
 
 
~30 minutes later~I woke up and went back on top. I saw Sandy on the bench sleeping. I sat next toher and let her head rest on my lap. I stroked her soft black hair.“I love you, Tim,” she mumbled. I smiled and kissed her forehead.“I love you too, Sandra” I whispered.Suddenly, she woke up and looked at me sleepily. “Did I wake you up?” I asked.“No you didn’t” she smiled, “You should go to sleep”.“I’ll only sleep once I finally meet my birthmother” I said.“When you do meet her, the two of you will be talking forever. You won’t get timeto sleep then” she said and smiled, “Besides, you’re sexier when you sleep”.“Is that why you love me?” I asked her.“It is one of many reasons why love you. Plus, when you wake up, your hazel eyesand juicy lips make you even more seducing” she said and sweetly kissed me.“You’re forgiven” I grinned. I loved it when she kissed me.Then suddenly, I heard a very loud siren. “What happened?” I asked.“Don’t worry. That’s just to tell the port that we’re gonna reach” she said.“So we pack our stuff?” I asked. She nodded. We got off the boat with our bags and looked around for my birthmother. A guy approached us.
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duponthumanite

Wow. Enjoyed reading about the "story behind the story". Probably the only revision I would suggest are more commas. Those waves are sleep-making!

reply08 / 29 / 2010
Skye Jayne

Thank you so much! I'll work on it when I can :D

08 / 29 / 2010
Kate175

now that's what i call talent!it's very good!

reply08 / 28 / 2010
Klaudia Karbowiak

waiiiiit is this finished? not that it changes anything if it is or isn't... the story is still beautiful :) :3 <3 muchos gracias for posting this (I've spelled the Spanish words wrong didn't I? :/ )

reply08 / 15 / 2010
Klaudia Karbowiak

loool pffft.... maybe.... well just think about it.... hamsters= cute, puppies= cute, kittens= cute baby animals over all= cute!!! :) so yeah lil/ short n cute just go together :P n yw ^_^

08 / 17 / 2010
Skye Jayne

haha implyin sumthin? thankyou :)

08 / 16 / 2010
Klaudia Karbowiak

well it's cute ^_^ short n cute :P It's funny how does two always go together (O...O) xD

08 / 15 / 2010
Skye Jayne

Yeah it's finished :) De nada :D (I probably spelt it wrong too lol)

08 / 15 / 2010
Vishaka_Chakrapani

this was so amazing! i mean it's a short scene but very well placed!

reply08 / 15 / 2010
duponthumanite

The genre is romance, the audience is young adult and the style is chick-lit. Enjoying Tim and Sandra. And Gerald and the narrator. Taylor Swift now writes about adults who "pay the bills". Great twist to have the man sleeping, instead of the woman!

reply08 / 13 / 2010
Skye Jayne

Thank you :) And no .. no bad outcome :)

08 / 14 / 2010
duponthumanite

Well, now, that I think about it, actually NOT. Don't want to spoil the ending, but does it lead to a "negative outcome"?

08 / 13 / 2010
MollyMouse

It's a five-star and you know it ;) Love it, as always.

reply08 / 13 / 2010
CanWePretend

this is rerally good! i really like your font! How did you get it to be like that?? there's going to be more, right?? :D

reply08 / 13 / 2010
Skye Jayne

I uploaded it as a PDF so that the fonts from the word would stay. Thanks but it's just a short story :) Nothing more is gonna happen but I'm glad you liked it :)

08 / 13 / 2010
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