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uliatrus
WINikki scribbled: In your first paragraph in Introduction you are missing a word in the sentance at the end. I definitly like the presentation layout of requirments in table forms and the logo of the college at the bottom of each. It's clear, easy to read and compare. The conclusion is also very clear and reader friendly, I like that you put each college individually and labeled them well. The report is a little short and basic I feel that even though there are no comoparisons online the information could easily be found and put side to side. I would like to see maybe a little more positive influencial factors about each college themself. Since college is much more than just coursework and study, highlight somehting about the location or other amenities that there wouuld be with each college. Just my thought.
04/19/2009
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uliatrus
WINikki scribbled: Since your report is not posted yet,I am commenting here. The proposal looks good. There are spelling and grammatical errors though. Also rather than such a limited range of general topics try to go inside and think what your sister will really like and what will fit here in terms of some smaller points, so other than strong academics she can have a happy social life or good living area.
04/14/2009
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stolt077112
WINikki scribbled: I noticed you did not post your report draft yet so i'll make my comment on here. As far as your proposal you do not mention who you are going to interview or how you expect to obtain information and research only that you intend to. Otherwise, it is clear what your report will be on.
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Proposal

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Evaluation of Membership Recruitment for Officers, Faculty / Graphic Design Student Association Graphi

04/14/2009
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Nwahl_FeasibilityHousingReport

from WINikki in School Work, Homework

Comment on the overall coherent structure of the report and reader usability, I still need to add in interview information and conclusion.

04/10/2009
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uliatrus

uliatrus scribbled: Your report is coherent. I followed it quite well. It's reader friendly, too. I'd recommend bolding new words the reader may not be familiar with so they pay more attention to them when they read t... 04/18/2009

stolt077112

stolt077112 scribbled: Overall very informative. I also agree that you need to go through and add some sections, letter of transmittal, background methodology, and recommendations. Some design things: I'm assuming the... 04/20/2009

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NWahl_InterviewQs_FeasibilityStudy

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Interview 1-In Person- April 5 Jamie Mathwig Realtor Lakes Area Realty Jmathwig1@comcast.net I chose

03/30/2009
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uliatrus
WINikki scribbled: excellent use of the transition words. Is the first paragraph part of the statement? I feel the second statement is concise and contains all information needed. Good start.
03/06/2009
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uliatrus
WINikki scribbled: I think you chose a topic that you are motivated about researching. SO excellent choice. Good luck on it all.
03/05/2009
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stolt077112
WINikki scribbled: This sounds like a good study topic. You will have lots of information to gather and finding a result will be very effective for the group.
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StephStoltz Feasibility Questionnaire

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Feasibility Study Project  Questionnaire / 1. What is the purpose of th e project?  What question  do yo

03/05/2009
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NWahl APT Feasibility Questionnaire

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Feasibility Study Project  Questionnaire / 1. What is the purpose of th e project?  What question  do yo

03/05/2009
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NWahl_ProblemStatement

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Problem statement There are a lot of apartments for rent but it is difficult to determine which one

03/05/2009
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uliatrus

uliatrus scribbled: Good start!! The only thing I would recommend would be to expand a little bit about how being owerwhelmed with choices is affecting Emily. Is it taking a long time for her to find an apartment? Is ... 03/08/2009

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uliatrus
WINikki scribbled: excellent and efficient use of pictures. I thought from the look of the program you were using a MAC but I see its Vista operating. It looks much different from mine and navigations are different. I guess overall its a bit lengthy for a simple build. It took me a while to read and look and understand, and as a user, I may be tempted to skip the instructions.
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Instructions Assignment

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Constructing a Suburban House / Ioulia Trouskova / WRIT 3562W: Technical and Professional Writing / 2 / T

02/17/2009
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stolt077112
WINikki scribbled: Very neatly presented, good use of pictures. Every step is very well explained and thorough. Makes me feel like my instructions are so plain. However, with a college age audience, realistically I think everyone is familiar with downloads so I don't think you need to explain that step in such detail.
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s Stephanieinstructions

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Constructing a Backyard Swimming Pool / Stephanie Stoltz / WRIT 3562W: Technical & Professional Writin

02/17/2009
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NWahl_Lego Instructions

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Bulls-eye Target / Build a virtual Lego model / Nicole Wahl / Screen clipping taken: 2/15/2009, 9:40 PM /

02/17/2009
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uliatrus

uliatrus scribbled: Nicole-- You have a good introduction—you indicate the procedure to be explained and also provide an overview of contents (materials needed, etc). I especially liked the part where you explained a... 02/18/2009

stolt077112

stolt077112 scribbled: Overall you seemed to have a very simplistic, to the point approach to your instructions. I found the information on what are legos and the Lego brick interesting, however, not really certain... 02/20/2009

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stolt077112
WINikki scribbled: good into P. At the end of the first P in your letter, maybe you could say something different than 'while i was explaing what was wrong; perhaps , while I was explaining that the digital photo machine was not working. Also, before then, do you think photo services would sound better than using "facilities". Third paragraph I think you mean associates, but put associated. Last paragraph, consider instead of : never had problems" to putting, liked the quality an so have returned, or something more positive and powerful. Overall, good. Met consise, to the point, and attracting readers attention.
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Complaint Letter

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Professional Writing 3562W Stephanie Stoltz Complaint Letter Paragraph / My complaint letter will be

02/05/2009
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tardy004
WINikki scribbled: Robin, your contact info and name should be at the top of the letter. You also need to have a salutation such as Dear... I think you letter could be more concise and still effective if you took out some of the detail of your exact computer problem and go with that you've seen geek squad and still have problems.
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Complaint Letter

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I am writing because my HP Pavilion computer has not been a reliable and wellfunctioning machine. My

01/31/2009
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