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THE WIFE MURDERER
by DevonPitlor, MA Econ.I. Why Jasmine Cadieux neededpancake makeup.
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asmine Cadieux was a more thanbeautiful model and earned a goodliving from this, but either she or somephotographic assistant would alwaysneed to apply make-up to a couple of ugly scars on her forehead and on theslashed upturn of tortured skin at thebase of her neck. When she was not infront of a camera, Jasmine nevercovered these scars, and, as ChrisVarlow, Jasmine's new love interest,soon learned, she made sure that these
 
imperfections were always visible andbeckoned people in her own charmingunspoken way to ask where they camefrom. She seemed to like her scars.Jasmine was always candid andnonchalant. It had even scared Chris alittle at first--the degree to whichJasmine seemed, with the self-assurance gifted to all pretty women,to care very little what people did ordid not know about her. Chris feltthat, despite the glowing radiance of her beauty, she ought to reserve a littlemore mystery to her person. Jasminenever did, but that did not diminishher magic enough to relieve Chris of his obsession. And now his obsessionwith the working fashion model wasreal. It haunted him daily. He wassmitten.
 
II. Where the scars came fromOn their second date, which was awalk along the waterfront down byCoral Point Bay, Jasmine was bare-shouldered and made sure the ripped-up side of her neck was facing Chrisuntil, at length, he entwined his fingersinto hers and asked about thescars...all of them."Damien used to beat me," she saidfacing Chris with open, glowing andhonest eyes. "He was an ex-cop andliked to hit women." She pointed tothe marks on her forehead and said"broom handle." She pointed to theugly ripple on her neck and said"twisted chain."Chris then heard a very brief but
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MaryAnnaX

Big shock at the end! Could not see it coming. No spoilers. Great!

reply10 / 11 / 2009
Carson89

very creative twist in plot

reply09 / 12 / 2009
Nartan89

Writers group read aloud and discussed. Very well liked. We are doing study of your stories. This is excellent.

reply08 / 17 / 2009
Devon_Pitlor

Thanks, Cate. Readers like you make all the difference. I plan to read your recent material. Devon

reply08 / 06 / 2009
Cateleimer

Love it...totally gripping; knew there was s twist coming but didn't guess what it was until I saw the window sill

reply08 / 06 / 2009
Devon_Pitlor

I'm lucky to have BOTH you and Heidi as readers and critics. Your comment coincides with what I intended as an author. You seem to be the perfect reader. Thanks for reading, commenting and liking. Devon

reply08 / 03 / 2009
Searcher420

Hi Devon, Back to your stories. This may be the last one. I'll have to look. But I will use the message svc and write you as you have asked. Once again, I read what Heidi said. The strong female character aspect is in a lot of your stories. I like it too. I am a guy, as I'm sure you know. Very original ending. Everything about Jasmine seemed ditzy until one could see what she was up to. Chris really comes off as weak, especially with the peeing and all. I liked this story a lot. You have a real skill. Not a boring minute in your tales!

reply07 / 31 / 2009
Devon_Pitlor

Thanks, Heidi!! Thanks for all the comments. It looks like you have reached the last one for now. I also, albeit a male, like strong female characters, and I intended Jasmine to be one. Only one person was upset with this on you know where because Damien was an ex-cop, and this person obviously liked cops. Glad you couldn't guess the ending of this one. You are sharp when it comes to seeing what is to come, so I finally kept you in suspense until the end. Well, more stories coming I hope. Been running a little dry lately. Can't thank you enough for commenting.

reply02 / 23 / 2009
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