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Peer Edit Comments

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Published by: Mitchell J Stokes on Dec 05, 2012
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The comments that I made using the comment option for my peer edit did not show up on the Scribduploader, so I am uploading a document that contains them.Is this a citation? MLA Citations should be (Authors Last Name Page #) I would combine these sentences, and then use the rest of the second sentence as its own part Makes it seem like the U.N. is a country You might have to cite this How much of the above is paraphrased? I think you should consider analyzing the data and explainingwhat it means You need a page # Consider reconfiguring this sentence, it took me a few reads to understand Also think about transitioning into your next paragraph topic I think this should be your first sentence, you generally don't want to start a paragraph with a citation Explain the importance of this citation Reword, maybe - “Haiti's history has been marked by a continuous strain of dictators” Is this a direct quote? If so, needs to be in quotations, and with a page # Also, explain how they did this, or why its important Back to back citations are not recommended This might need a citation, usually statistics and facts that aren't popular knowledge, are cited This would make a great transition sentence, (at the end of the previous paragraph) because it looks back while also looking forward Again, I wouldn't start with a citation, you need something to set up the paragraph's main purpose I would move this sentence up in the paragraph, that way there is some sort of analysis of it afterwards Calling the UN a government? Try and find a citation that supports this claim, then analyze it Citation to support this? Why? Or How? I would just elaborate on that I am pretty sure that Block Quotes should be directly quoted, otherwise it would be paraphrased andthe format is unnecessary

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