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Revised Defense Essay

Revised Defense Essay

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Joshua ChandlerMr. BorreroEnglish 1101October 2, 2012Defense EssayInstead of going with the original plan of a speech I decided to work with the genre of music. From the time I was a child to now, music has been a huge portion of my life whether itbe willingly or by choice. I feel like music is one of the best ways of expression for an individual
 
,and throughout my life it has had
 
its
significance with my literacy experience. The purpose of 
 
this paper is to correlate the genre of music with my past and current literacy.
 
I
don’
t quite remember this but as a baby my dad would sing gospel songs to me everynight before I went to sleep to help me go to sleep. During the ages from 2-3 years old, everySunday I would wake up, and the first thing I would hear in the morning would either by my dadsinging or the sounds of Christian music being played throughout our loud speakers.
 
I honestlylooked forward to this every Sunday because I loved hearing my dad sing because it was alwayssomething nice to wake up to. The sound and vibrato of his voice never ceased to put me ingood spirits to start off my day. No matter what, music surrounded me at an early age.As a grew a little older I decided to follow in the footsteps of my father so I began tosing as well. Prior to each of my Dad
s sermons, he would ask me to perform my notorious songselection which became very repetitive overtime. At first I was expressing true emotion when Isang but having to do it every week became too much of a routine and I lost my passion forthing I loved to do so much. When I attended Living Word Christian Academy as an elementary
 
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school student my passion fired right back up again when I joined the school choir. At first I
was very shy and didn’t really sing to my
full potential, but my choir director brought it out of me by making me the lead singer after 2 months. This was and honor and a privilege
 
in which Iwas determined not to let him, my fellow choir mates, or myself down. We would travel allover the suburbs of Chicago singing for various churches, banquets, fest, you know name it.Singing and baseball was all I knew at this point and I was very content with it to say the least.
Even when I played sports and I couldn’t get away from music.
 
At the start of the baseball season our team would generate chants to distract the other
 
team or support another teammate as he went up to bat. Majority of the time I would be thecomposer of these chants because everyone thought I had the best rhythm of the team. Overthe years my teammates and I made up chants from songs we had previously heard on theradio to just things that had to do with our everyday lives. Either way
 
, music and rhythm never
left my side. Eventually singing wasn’t enough and I wanted to expand my musical talent
s so I joined the band. Surprisingly I picked up on playing the trombone very fast and I was able to
play a solo in our school’s first ever band recital.
 
Not only was I proud, but my family and
 
friends were as well
. My parents decided that school wasn’t enough for me to express my
musical interests so they would take me around to nursing homes so I could sing to the elderly.Seeing the smiles on their faces and just knowing that my singing could brighten up their day alittle is a feeling that was indescribable to this very day. At that moment I knew that musiccould be used for so much than what I had previously known . At this moment in my life I wouldwake up and go to sleep thinking about music and little did I know things were about to changedrastically for my music and I.
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My choir director informed my parents and I that the director of a recording group bythe name of the Soul of Children wanted me to sing for them in the upcoming month. This wasnews I would had never dreamed of receiving but my dream came up short when my parents
told me I wouldn’t be able to join because we we’re moving to North Carolina over the
summer. I can remember the feeling I had in my stomach that day and it was one of 
disappointment, nervousness, and anger. I couldn’t believe my parents would take something
so special away from me just to move to a state we knew nothing about.
 
Around this time I
 
would listen to songs that reminded me of Chicago and the great experiences I had with mycommunity, friends, and family. Music became a form of release and closure for the all theanimosity I had for the upcoming situation I was about enter.
 
When I moved to North Carolina I had nothing in common with the other children
 
because singing wasn’t the “cool” thing to do at my new middle school
. I decided in order to
 
make friends I should continue instead of making progress within my music. Before I hadmoved to North Carolina I had put baseball on the back burner so my skills definite
ly weren’t
what they used to be, so I came up short on making the team. This was a very disappointingtime in my life and the only thing I could resort to was music.
 
Every day I would go home andlock myself in my room and just si
ng until I couldn’t sing anymore because it was the only formof release that made me happy at the time. Eventually I didn’t care what my peers thought and
I joined the school choir once again. My choir mates made me feel welcome and secure, whichthis was the first time I had experienced this since I had moved to North Carolina. Music helpedme open up to new things and people
 
, which has become very significant to my literacy.
 
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