The following is a key to my shorthand comments on your essay.
What is your thesis statement? Thesis statement is either unclear or non-existent.
Topic Sentence is either unclear or non-existent or it does not adequatelyor logically relate to your thesis statement.
Introduce this quote or textual passage. Provide a lead-in to the quote by providing the situation in the novel and/or saying who is speaking, towhom, and in what situation.
Discuss this quote or passage before moving on. Make sure to explain itssignificance and/or what it is that you want the reader to understand or
in this passage.
What is the connection between this thought, idea, textual passage, quote,etc. and your thesis statement? How does this thought, idea, etc. supportyour thesis statement? Make sure to explain the relevance of this thought,idea, etc. to your overall argument (thesis).
What is the page # on which this quote/ passage/ paraphrase appears?
This quote or passage is formatted incorrectly (it does not conform to theMLA guidelines.)
Word choice is incorrect or ambiguous
What are you trying to say here? Your meaning is unclear either becauseof incorrect word usage, grammatically incorrect sentence structure, or some other problem at the sentence level.
Good point, nicely phrased, logical idea, good connection, etc.
Logical connection? How are these two sentences or ideas logicallyconnected? How does this sentence (or idea) logically follow the previousone?
Comma Splice. Two independent clauses have been fused together with acomma, which is grammatically incorrect.