Bobby "the Beaut"

thank you for the comment, it was the first script i've written so i really at the start was new to it, i don't think i'll end up editing it cause its done and over but i will write other fan scripts like right now im working on a Deadpool one thank you for commenting and please do so again

Square Peg

I've read a couple of pages and plan to read more, but this needs to be edited. Remember that a script is a representation of what the audience sees. You are giving thoughts and background in the action that will not come out visually eg. "Goku exactly 17 364 days old" unless that's in a title card we are not going to know. And this, " Gohan Son, the ex-student of the world renowned Master Mutent Roshi, one of the only two students to be taught under him, Roshi himself studied under the wing of Master Mutaito." isn't pertinent or necessary. Not to end on a downer, congrats on a full draft.

Bobby "the Beaut"

please leave a comment as you view it would be appreciated