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The
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Mike Hurley
From:
Stephanie Kaplan
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Friday, July
09,
2004
6:37
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FW: The Book
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—Original
Message—
From:
Slade
Gorton
Sent:
Friday,
July
09,
2004
6:21
PM
To:
Front Office
Subject:
The
Book
Chapter
1,
page
57,
note
91:
???
Page 57, note 94: perhaps it is in this note that we should recognize the
1974
attempted suicidehijacking
I
mentioned
(I
think
to
Chris) about which
I was
asked
on a
local
NPR
interview last week; also note that
there are
several redundant
"94"s in the
body
of
note
94.Page
62, note
141:
the first sentence of the note is identical to a sentence in the text on page 25 onesentence before note
141.
Page
63, note
147:
no content.
Page
33,
second paragraph:
"As a
consequence":
I
don't believe that
theinadequate
notices
to
NORAD
were
a
consequence
of
improvisation,
in
fact, they might have been worse
if
protocol
had
prevailed.
A
better lead-
in
would
be
"
In the
event".Chapter 2, pages1-8,require significant changes if Chapter
11
is modified to
include
the materials I
read
on Wednesday. At the least, the dismissive adjectives I criticized must go and you should consider thegeneral tone
of
these pages.Page 3, line
15:
1924,
not
1922.
Page
10,
line
16:
"Sudan
in".
Page 14,
line 27: "Afghanistan"
Page 16,
line 24: should the term be Islamic or Islamist?Page
16,
Last paragraph, line 3: strike
"the",
insert "its".Chapter
3,
page
4,
line
12:
strike "ceded", insert" granted".Page
21,
second full paragraph,
first
sentence: namethethree cultures
(again?).
Page 34,
first
paragraph under
3.7:
he founders created a strong executive, notoriously absent under
the
Articles
of
Confederation
but,
of
course, limited those powers.Page 35, third paragraph, last
line:
strike
"where
1
,
insert "in which".
Next
tolast
line:
strike "all", insert "many".
7/9/2004
 
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Book Page
2
of 2
Page 36, second paragraph, line 5: "for"; spell out
SSCI.
Fourth paragraph, last
line:
strike "the",
add an s.
Page
37,
first full paragraph, line
4:
strike "had", insert "undertook".Page38. Add adescriptionof thesystematicbuttotally secret oversight performedbySenator Stevensand Inouye as per my report to Chris yesterday.More later.Slade
7/9/2004
 
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