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Robert I Chatman IIIScreenwriting 60BGoldmanStory Beats & Logline – Facial Fatality
Mike’s sister, Diane, drowns during a tragic bukake porn shoot. He murders the involved actors andposes their bodies to spell out his sister’s name. Inspector Goldman does his best to protect hisbrother from Mikes Wrath.
Ordinary World
The City is corrupt. The police are total assholes and borderline demonically possessed. They clearly goout of their way to harass lay people and raid businesses to extort money from them.Mikes wife, Aden, is a 19-year-old aspiring porn actor. She drinks too much and was impregnated by herpimp before she left Zimbabwe. Unfortunately, mail order brides do not have a return policy.Mike is a witty introvert, but is overwhelmed with anxiety and grief when his sister drowns and has tocope with feelings he has never had before.
Opening Image
Mike works in a porn shop as the cleanup boy, where he is reserved, quiet, and walked all over. Hewears a suit and tie to work every day, washes up the jack off stalls in full bio-warfare gear.
Opening Hook 
Diane Dies; Mike is notified by one of the police after a destructive raid on his porn shop.
Inciting Incident/Catalyst 
Inspector young spills the beans about the relation between Officer Goldman and his sister’s death.
Big Debate
The police are freaking insane, but mike keeps his head afloat, he is forced to cope with abuse andneglect. We see officer goldman is taking an active role in helping his brother and company out inprotection, including arming them with weapons. A couple of the actors are ex military.
Mini Crisis
Mike’s sister has never really felt appreciated in the business. Mike is now struggling with the idea of how to make sure that people never forget her again, even at the cost of his own life.
Point of No Return / End of Act 1
Mike dawns OJ Simpson gloves and breaks into a secondary actor’s house. Clearly reluctant andextremely careful, Mike wears his bio warfare suit from work into the house to keep himself from
 
leaving behind evidence of his having been there. He kills the actor and hangs him up in bondage in theshape of a D.
Fun & Games / Popcorn Moments
Mike has killed the first of the 5 actors, and celebrates. Drinking, boozing, and jokes are abundant, buthe does not neglect his duties at the porn shop.Mike Enters the second actors house and does equally well, maiming and even removes the head,hanging it a full foot above the hogtied body, making a lower case i.
B Story Begins
The cops raid the porn shop again. Officer Goldman roughs up Mike again. A second officer, Young,steps in and introduces himself as the lead supervisor of this beat, and helps Mike cool down and savesOfficer Goldman’s fists from too much bruising.
Testing
Mike gets ballsy after the previous two murders and decides to set his sights on the Director. On the wayinto the guys apartment there is a knife fight and Mike slips, dragging a long cut down his suit, leaving itcompletely useless. He quickly gets out of his bio-warfare suit and tries to chase down Director Goldmanbut Goldman gets away.
Sequence to Midpoint / One-Hour Turning Point 
Now without the bio-warfare suit Mike has to run the gauntlet of murder, actually having to get exposedto the actors blood and guts.Mike enters the third apartment and had to chase this guy down an escalader. Mike finally kills the man,but he has a lot of trouble getting his legs and arms to stay in place when he is tying him up. In theprocess he fumbles a lot, leaves hair and finger prints on some porno’s at the guys house.Mike picks up his wife from school and the police immediately pull him over. The police arrest Mike andthrow him into jail. While there mike makes a couple friends and finds that the bed is actually morecomfortable than his one at home.Mike’s wife posts bail, and on the way out to the car he decides that he needs to take care of the fourthguy immediately.
Bad Guys close in / Hero’s Melting
Mike kicks in this guys door, and is nearly killed by a shotgun blast. There are screams from down thestreet, and someone calls the police. Mike quickly folds the guy into an N and hoists him up on the roof,still alive. The police arrive and Mike kicks the N guy off the roof and runs out the back door with thefuzz in hot pursuit, hurdling fences and cars.Officer Goldman tackles Mike, they fight, and Mike shoots Goldman in the thigh, seven times, and getsaway.
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