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Excellent paragraphs from 6J, 2009 (EWA 4)
Name:_____ ___________________
Class: 6J
1.
He tried to open the lock, but in vain

He crept stealthily to the electronic lock. He tried keying in the code but it was all in vain. After the third try, the alarm gave a ear-piercing scream but no one was in the fortress to hear it. (Ephraim)

As the suspicious man walked to the locked door, the security guard caught a
glimpse of his shadow. He hid behind a pillar and observed. The man crept
about suspiciously, like a predator waiting for its prey. He fumbled with the bunch
of keys in his hands, trying every one on the lock. The guard\u2019s eyes widened and
he pounced on the man. The man\u2019s mission to save his friend from jail has
failed. (Shaun Lau)

The lock rattled and creaked nosily as he tried to unlock it. The security alarm
screamed but no one was close enough to hear it. His face was red and he was
huffing and puffing as he tried to unlock the door. (Alice)

Trying to open the lock with a sharp object, the thief had sweat dripping down his
face. He had a frown on his face as he muttered and grumble to himself.
He took out a key from his pocket and placed the key in the lock, twisting and
turning it each time with a slightly greater force. However, the lock could not be
unlocked. (Jixiang)

The gate was shaking wildly. A frustrated burglar was trying to open the lock, but to no avail. The man was sweating profusely and his hands were shaking. The alarm sounded all of a sudden and the burglar ran away swiftly. (Gabriel)

2.
I saw the man.

As I was walking on a marrow lane, I saw a man with glasses. He had a carrot- shaped face. His eyes could not be seen as his long hair covered his features. He was dressed in a suit and holding a briefcase. He smiled at me. I suspected that he was the murderer. (Gabriel)

My eagle eye spotted him and I was shocked. I quickly grabbed the phone and dialed 999 for help. I described him as a man with leathery skin and greasy hair. (Xavier)

I saw the man who had oily pork marked face, leathery skin and greasy and long hair. He was staring at me for a very long time. If looks could kill, I would have withered there and then. (Jedidiah)

The man looked around. He was expressionless. He was wearing a black coat
with white stripes on it. My brother and I were wore the exact same coat, only of1
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