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Klaudia Karbowiak

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This is my first try ever on poems^^ constructive criticism please!!! I was inspired lately by two extremaly good poets on scribd :)- that's why I wrote these :)

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11/09/2009
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frankmaryr

frankmaryr

I think your poems are a great and you should writing. frankmaryr

11/13/2009
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lpbacan

lpbacan

and re-wrote some of my poemas dozens of times till be satisfied. Meu advice is that there is no bad poem, because under it there alwayis is a good ideia. The problem is to show it is it’s last and definitive form.

11/12/2009
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Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak: Thank you very kindly for this :) It's exactly what I needed :) I'll not give up :) 6 days ago

lpbacan

lpbacan

it is simple a light. “End of Good” and “The star”, in may point of view, show some qualities because they left behind tha personal/confessional language and go higher. The diferences between the first two and the last ones is the languagem, the aproach. The two first are personal and the last two are universal in their themes. If you like we may go on talking about them. Don’t give up. I wrote a

11/12/2009
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lpbacan

lpbacan

Klaudia, Congratulations for choosing to be a poet. It is a hard road but is the road you choose by yourself. That means a lot of readind and working hard. I liked your poems. As you asked for constructive criticism I’ll dare to write you sometinghs. “I wish” seems to be a diary confession and it is very simple instead having a good theme. “Him” has the same confessional tone and at the same way

11/12/2009
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Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak

now this is in the hotlist too O_o WOW!!!!!!!!!!! I'm in paradise :D I'm sorry Eziosomnus but I can't understand your comment... I'll try to translate it later on though :) xoxoxo

11/12/2009
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Ellisz

Ellisz: Hehe,, you see?? You're an amazing writer!! ^^ 6 days ago

Eziosomnus

Eziosomnus

ahora que me atrevi a leer la explicaci303263n me gustan mas! :)

11/11/2009
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Eziosomnus

Eziosomnus

(I hope you understand my spanish or my poor english) No sabes como me encantan las poes303255as de ese tipo, pueso que yo tambi303251n escribo de esa forma, con un sue303261o de pasi303263n en mente inspirando el pensamento y robando nuestro aliento... En, me encant303263.

11/11/2009
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Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak

Elisz: I would tell you If I could ;)

11/11/2009
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Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak: This poem at first meant to be just a random thing that came into my mind.... it meant to be from a little child's p.o.v. But NOW as I was reading through it a couple of times I realised that I subconciously wrote a poem that describes this: People sometimes go through hard times and others remind them of the reality: the star can't talk and she doesn't like it she also doesn't like floating in th 11/11/2009

Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak: continution: she also doesn't like floating in the air it really upsets her and the kid from the poem just reminded her of her cruel reality; the tear was so fair because the star had a beautiful heart just like the people that go through hard times: people that are upset make me realise how much I have and therefore I become more sensul and loving... this is complicated- that's why I didn't want 11/11/2009

Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak: to tell you about it^^ I bet you're confused now :P 11/11/2009

Ellisz

Ellisz: Nope, I like the explanation :) 6 days ago

Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak

"The star" is my favourite... I'm just really happy for writting it :P Perhaps you don't realise but it acctually has a futher meaning :) Thanks for your comments :)^^ XD

11/11/2009
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Ellisz

Ellisz: Aw... Now I will keep wondering what further meaning it could have... :) 11/11/2009

Ellisz

Ellisz

Ohh I love the new one ^^

11/11/2009
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schauzer

schauzer

Enjoying, enjoying, keep writing!

11/11/2009
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nir37

nir37

wonderful language of sharing bright love ; your poetry is walking in hope..congratulations, very mature for a starter!

11/11/2009
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Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak: thank you ^^ It's so nice to hear :) I seriously never thought that these poems will be liked... I quite often don't believe in my self but I see that perhaps I should :) Thank you once more 11/11/2009

Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak uploaded a new revision for this document (#2)

11/11/2009
Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak uploaded a new revision for this document (#1)

11/11/2009
Klaudia Karbowiak

Klaudia Karbowiak

thank you guys :D I feel like writing more poems :P

11/11/2009
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Ellisz

Ellisz: Please!! You're a wonderful writer!! <3 11/11/2009

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