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1
Original
Nowadays, the life span of consumer electronics products is
decreasing due change of customers consuming
configuration. Therefore, continuing to improvements of the
existing products is indispensable, including shortcoming
improvement, insertion of new technology and improvement
to manufacturing process, in order to improve the
competitiveness of products and lengthen products life span.
Revised
Consumer electronics products have an increasingly shorter
life time given fluctuating changes in consumer preferences,
necessitating continuous improvements in areas such as
abating current limitations, incorporating advanced
manufacturing technologies to increase market
competitiveness and lengthening product lifetime.
2
Original
Once the products have demand of the modification, causing
the spare parts will change, lead to the fact the subsequent
spare part is purchased and relevant production cost,
products quality and reliability of products are influenced.
Revised
Consumer demand for modification of products involves
changing spare parts more frequently, subsequently
impacting purchases, production costs, as well as product
quality and reliability.
3
Original
The traditional part supplier selection method is only
focused on the cost fact, although the relevant cost of
the products after causing the modification have
apparent reducing, quality and reliability of the products
make customers unable to accept.
Revised
The conventional part supplier selection method focuses
only on the cost factor despite apparently decreasing
modified product costs, leading to unacceptably lower
product quality and reliability.
4
Original
The products after the modification are unable to
form enough competitiveness on the cost,
quality, reliability and the manufacturing
company will be unable to survive.
Revised
The market for modified products lacks
competitiveness in terms of costs, quality, and
reliability, ultimately threatening the corporate
survival of manufacturers.
5
Original
Having higher levels of DDP (Due Date Performance) is a primary
objective for those companies involved in multi-project environments.
Despite of numerous academic research papers on improving DDP
have bee published and business also employs numerous
improvement approaches developed by industrial practitioners
including Lean, Six Sigma, product data management system (PDM),
and theory of constraints, low level of DDP is still a major issue in a
multi-project environment.
Revised
Companies involved in a multi-project environment highly prioritize
achieving high levels of due date performance (DDP). Despite
numerous attempts to enhance DDP and numerous improvement
approaches developed by industrial practitioners, e.g., Lean, Six
Sigma, product data management system (PDM), and theory of
constraints, a multi-project environment highly prioritizes a low level
of DDP.
6
Original
Blame excessive uncertainty for achieving difficult high
due date performance (DDP) in management multi-
projects by most of project managers and engineers.
Manage difficulty in multi-projects to achieve high DDP,
ninety percent of reasons been surveyed can be
summarized as excessive uncertainty.
Revised
Most project managers and engineers cite excessive
uncertainty as an obstacle to achieving a high due date
performance (DDP) in management of multi-projects.
With respect to managing multi-projects to achieve a
high DDP, excessive uncertainty accounts for 90% of all
related difficulties.
7
Original
Although reduce fuel energy changed to electricity
energy sources to reduce the ecological damage to the
environment has become a world trend, but the use of
electric power in Taiwan is far behind the Kyoto Protocol
specification, or some advanced countries in Europe and
the United States.
Revised
Despite global efforts to reduce the transformation of fuel
energy into electricity-based energy sources in order to
reduce ecological damage, electric power use in Taiwan
lags behind that in the Kyoto Protocol, as well as in
advanced European countries and the United States.
8
Original
The inability to know in advance product expiring to prepare
for early treatment. But for the prevention of correction for
more than the original predetermined criteria to increase the
safety factor and the number of spare parts, which makes
surplus of product quality and spares parts inventory raised,
that causes manufacturing costs increased.
Revised
The inability to determine in advance product expiration
makes it impossible to devise an original predetermined
criterion in order to increase the number of safety factors and
spare parts, subsequently increasing the surplus of product
quality and spares parts inventory and ultimately raising
manufacturing costs.
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