can't we stop the clock's hands from advancing? I love this. So evocative. I can see the party, hear the children. Feel the awkwardness. Can't we all just spin around...one more time? Wonderful, Jotter!!
ah! I especially love the lines ...'those laughs where you throw your head back- all for a birthday?'... sigh! the pure happiness that we had along with our innocence... now even when we do enjoy such a party, a hundred other thoughts crowd our mind...
excellent, jot, I beleive the wisdom of six is accepting the moment and not creating a story for the moment - "the joy of jumping to music / we never heard before / in a house of relatives all smiles / and surprised hugs" - time can stop for us too, if we are willing to be still and listen.
I love this. You capture "my six" very well. They do live in the moment, even if that moment is bad. But the joys of staying up late, ah, now that was a joy. I like the rhythm and pacing of this. The sweet words and joyous mood. I don't understand the "And right?" in the last line. Perhaps bridge the two other phrases in there? Nice work, as always, Jotter!