>> fractured moon, a haunting nightmare, a brokenfamily, a burning horse>> painting. I like where you begin the novel, at theend with William >> as an old man in an institution as well as the paceof the>> narrative—it sucks you in from the start. I likethe characters—they>> are all a bit strange in their own ways and I likethe gothic>> atmosphere you create throughout thechapters.
seems to be a>> recurring theme and time marker. This being said Ihave a few>> questions/comments that could make the noveltighter, more readable>> and believable.>>>> 1. I’m not sure how I feel about it always being“Halloween” in this>> novel. I think it works in the beginning but nearthe middle and at>> the end it seems a bit contrived. Yes, everythingchanges for>> William’s world when his father Edgar disappears onHalloween and he>> also gets beat up in subsequent Halloween nights.Maybe think about>> exploring other days and events in the life ofWilliam and his father.>> Ones that they share from the past. Even morelighthearted and happy>> ones to contrast with the dark, moody “Halloween”ones. Also, if you>> include additional scenes it will add more varietyand diversity to>> the narrative. Make it more “well-rounded”?>>