town in Texas when his mom, who is a teller at a local bank, loses her job when the bank goesunder.The story has multiple twists and has potential to be a great feature film. The moviemakes accurate points about the Great Recession and although it is not a historical film it caneducate the viewer about the devastation of the Great Recession. At the same time it is a catchyfamily film that keeps the viewer attached. This movie truly shows the creativity anddetermination that I put into the outline, development, and creation of this movie.
Eric,You have certainly thought through yourconcept, and I am positive that it would be a
hit with this crowd. As you look to revise, I’d
like you to work on combining the historicalcontent with the plot, since you do not givemuch of each as they relate to each other. Youtend to stay away from specifics of the plot,also. Work to show your reader exactly whatyour vision is. Keep in mind that you haveworked for an entire semester on this project.There is quite a bit to say.Also, you may want to consider a differentstructure for your paper. You seem to includethe marketing ideas in the middle, when youtalk about the plot on either end of it.Continue to work on your transitions andtightening your sentences, as well.
I’m looking forward to seeing what you’ll
revise in the portfolio!-Ms. C