Cory

Dennis Mr. Borrero English 1102 8 April 2012 Pitch Dear Executive Board, My name is Cory Dennis and I am the creator of the film A Day to Remember. I

decided to make a movie about World War 2 and D-Day because I wanted to give the audience a sense of what soldiers had to go through during the war times; as well as the hard times all Americans were facing after the Great Depression in the 1930s, especially for middle and lower class families. I have always been fascinated with the 1930s and 1940s between the war and all the economic ups and downs America was going through. I also feel a strong sense of pride in my country when I see how they managed to prosper after such a devastating time period that impacted so many lives. The purpose for me writing this paper was to inform my audience and to
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entertain my audience. I believe that all throughout my paper I state facts and describe historical events like the Great Depression and the Agricultural Adjustment Act. I also go into detail about D-Day and how soldiers experience the war. I want to

make sure the historical events and the action pact battle keeps the audience interested and makes sure they cant stop watching the movie. Another reason I chose to make this movie during this particular time was because it hits home with me. I have heard stories about my great grandparents and how after the Great Depression they didnt trust the banks ever again. After they lost all of their money to the banks they wouldnt use a bank anymore; instead they would hide their money in the house. When they passed away my family remembers having to be very careful and very thorough while cleaning out the house because money was hidden everywhere. After hearing this story I could better relate to how many families must have felt towards banks after the Great Depression. The reason I made the primary focus the war is because my grandfather joined the war; and the reason was to pay his way through college at Indiana University. I want to get a better sense of what him as well as so many others like him went through.
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World War 2 is one of the most influential wars of modern history. I have created a script for a movie idea I think would be huge. The movie is titled A Day to remember. It is a movie based on the experiences two friends had during World War 2. The movie will begin with President Franklin D. Roosevelt giving his Pearl Harbor Address. In this address FDR discusses that the United States was deliberately attacked by Japan. He then talks about how Japan has made an offensive move on our territory; and concludes his speech stating that the United States will triumph and that we have confidence in our armed forces. This will give the audience a sense of patriotism. This will catch the audience and keep them on the edge of their seats right away. I will also address multiple social issues during this time such as
Cory Dennis 4/26/12 6:16 PM Comment [5]: I went into more detail about what all was said in his address to give the executive board a better sense of what they will see.

the Great Depression during the 1930s; which was when the stock market crashed and the banks failed. They tried to give the peoples money back but didnt have enough for everyone. I also address how the film impacted the decision of FDR to join the war as well as the main character Robert to enlist in the military. FDR saw an opportunity to create American jobs after the Great Depression impacted so many lives. Joining the war allowed for Americans to produce guns and other essential resources for the war. America also produced weaponry for Russia, which brought in a lot of revenue domestically. I then show background information on two child hood friends Robert Booker and James Emerson. They were born and raised in Bloomington Indiana where they have lived all 18 years of their lives. Robert and his family are a lower middle class family, that are farmers, and James and his mother are a low class family that does what they can to get by. Robert Booker is a smart kid who has never excelled athletically or academically. His father, Bobby Booker, who was in the army when he was younger; has never been proud of Robert for anything. James on the other hand was an All-state basketball player, All-state baseball player, and scholar athlete at their high school; Bloomington High School in 1941. Robert and James hang out together everyday after school, and one day James tells Robert he is joining the army in order to pay his way through college. Robert was skeptical at first, but then decides this is his opportunity to get employed and make his father proud. After all the talks at dinner between Robert and his father he realized how hard it is to get a job in the economic times.

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Coming out of the 1930s where the Great Depression impacted all of America, jobs were scarce and Georges father was a first hand example of how scarcity in the job force during these times can impact a family greatly. Georges father was a tenant farmer that became financially crippled after FDRs AAA (Agricultural Adjustment Act). This act was a plan to give incentives to farmers to cut back on production (University of Virginia). The motive behind this was, if farmers dont produce as many crops the price of these crops can increase. The plan was very effective but the large farms prospered while the smaller tenant farmers crumbled. These tenant farmers only harvested the food so they saw no money, the landowners saw the profit. Georges family had to adapt to the situation they were in after the AAA passed. It really opened Georges eyes and impacted his decision to join the military. George and James both enlist and leave for basic training after they graduate. They get shipped to the same training camp in Fort Meade Maryland. The soldiers were stationed here for a month to complete basic training. Troops that make it through and are sent to Istres Air Base in France where they are stationed for several months; from April 3rd, 1944 to June 6th, 1944. They make friends with the other 6 privates in their company: Alan Smith, Jack Keating, Thomas Allen, Oscar Ramos, Pablo Alva, and Nicholas Dease and spend most of their time together. On June 1st the General tells the troops that they will be going to battle the very next day so get their supplies ready. The next day the weather is poor so they move the date back until the 6th of June 1944 (History). Over the next few days soldiers emotions are up and down; nerves are all over the place. Robert tells James that he

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is nervous and he has a bad feeling about the upcoming battle. James reassures him that he is prepared for it, thats what basic training was for, and that he would stay with him to watch his back. Robert then reveals that the only reason he joined the army was to make his dad proud if him. James then tells him that his father will be proud of him, and is proud to say his only son is serving his country. Its 5:30am on the morning of June 6th 1944. The soldiers all pile on to boats and ship off towards the beaches of Normandy France (Hall). When they arrive they are immediately welcomed with a rain of gunfire. The soldiers hop off the boats and begin to have a standoff. Robert and James are immediately separated and stay separated for the entire battle. Early August the allied powers had successfully captured the beaches of Normandy (Hall). James began to look for Robert but he was nowhere to be found. James starts to panic and asks medics if they have seen him; none of them have. After 3 days of searching James finds his friend dead, lying in the sand with 10-12 bullet holes in him. He begins to cry and the soldiers all get shipped back to base at Istres Air Base. They remain there until the war is over. When James returns home he goes to Roberts house to talk to Bobby (Roberts father). He tells him it is his fault that Robert is dead and talks about how he promised he would stay with him and watch his back. Bobby tells James it isnt his fault and if he would have gone looking for Robert he most likely wouldnt have made it out alive either. James then tells Bobby the reasoning behind Robert joining the military and Bobby begins to cry. They hold a funeral for Robert in their hometown where hundreds of people attend to say their goodbyes.
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My target audience will be males between the age of 18 and 50. I believe this group of individuals will be interested in seeing my movie because it is a war film and this group of viewers will be more entitled to go watch my film because it is gory but at the same time gives historical information to the watchers. The cast I have playing my main characters will be a big reason behind my target audience. Tom Hardy will play my main character Robert, and my 2nd main character James will be played by Shia LaBeouf. It is also a film about issues that were happening and the hard times America was going through during the 1930s and 1940s and during the time of D-Day and WW2. The target audience will not be social economically targeted strictly because I believe no matter what class you are people enjoy movies and this is a movie for adults in America. I believe this movie will be a box office smash that has potential to break records. Between the cast, the historical background information on the Great Depression and an economic plan FDR implemented; the Agricultural Adjustment Act, there is great potential for box office sales. My film is Band of Brothers meets Saving Private Ryan with more education on the economic status during the time period they are in and not just the main focus of my film the soldiers the entire time; as well as more seat gripping nail biting excitement and fighting. I understand that my competitors offer first hand interviews with real soldiers as well as tactics but what really separates my film from competitors is; my film addresses social issues; a new perspective for viewers and movie critics. My film is also like nothing anyone has seen before because of the way it transitions from scene to scene. It goes from FDR giving his Pearl Harbor

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address to the dinner table at Georges house to flashing back to when Georges father became unemployed during the Great Depression and how these memories impact Georges decision to join the military. Its a new perspective that I have yet to see in a film and I know it will be a huge hit in the film industry after my movie. Work Cited Hall, Anthony. "DDay 60 Commemorations - Countdown to D-Day." D-Day Museum & Overlord Embroidery. Grange Books, 2003. Web. 22 Feb. 2012. <http://www.ddaymuseum.co.uk/countdown.htm>. 1944, Late August. "D-Day %u2014 History.com Articles, Video, Pictures and Facts." History Channel. History. History.com %u2014 History Made Every Day %u2014 American & World History. History.com. Web. 13 Feb. 2012. <http://www.history.com/topics/d-day>. university of Virginia, . "Miller Center: University of Virginia." American president a reference resource. University of Virginia, 2011. Web. 13 Apr 2012. <http://millercenter.org/president/fdroosevelt/essays/biography/4>.
Cory Dennis 4/26/12 4:37 PM Comment [25]: I should have used more sources and found some sources that arent just online.