Question 2 You are advised to spend about 50 minutes on this task.

A persons success is determined by the number of As obtained in examinations. Do you agree? Discuss. You should write at least 350 words. [60 marks] 1 Over these past few years, the education is structured in a manner that a students academic performance is assessed using a grade system, which is ranged from A as the highest rank to the lowest rank of G. The grade hierarchy system is given to students to measure how well they can understand and master the context of a subject. However, most students, parents and teachers strongly believe that getting as many As as possible would make a person become successful. The question arises, can getting lots of As mould a successful person? (Insert stand and thesis statement here: In my opinion, Let us analyse this issue in terms of ____________, __________ and ____________. ) There is no law or legislation implemented for a person to be successful only if he or she had glorious results in examinations. A person can also be successful by unleashing novelties. There are uncountable students that excelled in their examinations, with straight As grasped in their hand, firmly; also there are also students who failed in their examinations, really terribly. But the so-called failures have high potential of creativity, yet to be unveiled; and the remarkable creative ideas make them to be one in a million. For instance, Bill Gates, one of the most successful software designers in the histories. He had a famous quote, I failed in some subjects in exam, but my friend passed in all. Now he is an engineer in Microsoft and I am the owner of Microsoft. The momentum of this quote is very strong and firm it is definitely a silly mistake to say that a person will be led to star way boulevard even if they are excellent scorers in the examinations. 3 In a similar manner, a person can be successful if they had passion in what they do. Due to various pressures, mostly from parents and peers, students had a mindset that they must score as many As as possible to make them successful in their life. They had a mindset that they must be lawyers, professors, doctors and so on to make them successful in their life. So to approach these careers, they are to garner as many As as they can. But that could be untrue. As an illustration, Shimmy, who is a famous dancer, was used to be a lawyer graduate. People may argue that perhaps she could not find a law-related job after she graduated. But the fact is, being a lawyer, is her fathers dream, not hers! Her dream is that she could dance and could exhibit her dance to the world. Her passion is on the stage, not on the court. She is determined that she would not be a successful lawyer, and she was right! So what about all those As? 4 On top of that, the number of As obtained is definitely not a ruler to measure whether a person is successful or not. Thanks to the education system, students are molt into reading and exam machines to get As. Sad but true, a large percentage of As scorers are late bloomers. They chunk in a lot of information from the textbooks or reference books at the eleventh hour, and regurgitate all the information when it comes to examination. But does that make them a successful learner? Human memory power has limitations. So the As obtained by the student may not be genuine. They fit to be known as exam machines rather than successful youngsters. 5 In a nutshell, it is definitely not a good idea to determine whether a person is successful based on the number of As garnered in examinations. There are more crucial aspects as it does not portray ones attitude in studies. 40

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(594 words) Written by Kent Pee

Overall assessment from me: Band 4 lower. Language is slightly above average (band 4 with some minor slips that hampers understanding, but still evidences of poor structure and syntax) while organization and task fulfillment is a little weak as you dont follow a good format (mid band 3)

Good try. Can I blog it? :P