Justin K: Technique-- Can we keep it from changing tempos? Also, emphasize the learning curve you went thru w/ Live. It's a PRO app!
where are the violins? I can't hear them? POINT OF VIEW: This connection is weak. You talk about where hip hop is going-- have you thought about taking an acapella rap from someone who's going in the "right" (or "wrong"?) way and mashing it up with your beat? Maybe showing them how to walk your way? Take a look at Kutiman
http://thru-you.com/ to see what he does with mashing people up! Also, check out the mash up of Nelly with AC/DC at
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LGyv0D... to see how old can reinvigorate new (and lame). Another idea here:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ier78E...
You are very close to your definition of art (which is great, BTW), but even you say that it needs lyrics!!! I think it could stand to be more original, too. Less Aerosmith, more Kwok.
Throw around some Live-specific language to explain what you're doing. It doesn't sound that hard in your paper, even though I know it was! You also don't mention all the early mornings and late afternoons you spent working on it!
