Comment on Dinner
Posted on March 25, 2008

I like where you are going with this. I'd say keep going with it. I think that the message of acceptance is important. One thing to look at is capturing the struggle Tim is in. Instead of having him retell us the story maybe he could bring up how he couldn't pay to go to the hospital. This could lead to Joanne finding out about the money. Also, make sure to give your characters a distinct voice (way in which they use words). As I said, I like it and am excited to see what it could turn into. Keep creating!

Comment on Gang Awareness Guide
Posted on December 13, 2007

General warning signs: Admits membership...

Comment on Fatty Liver: How To Take Care Of Your Liver
Posted on December 11, 2007

any more information about how one drink could scar the liver?

Comment on Descent
Posted on November 24, 2007

I like your story. Thank you for not pulling a deus ex machina on the ending. Also glad to see another fan of creative commons.