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  • Health and diet – sample IELTS essay
  • Sample IELTS essay – television
  • Unemployment
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  • Sample advertising essay
  • Paragraph coherence: the PEE model
  • A letter of complaint: mobile phone
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  • holiday competition – sample IELTS letter
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Health and diet – sample IELTS essay

This is the latest in my series of sample IELTS essays and is based on a recent IELTS question. It focusses on the common IELTS topic of health and diet which is one of those topics it is sensible to prepare for. You will find a discussion of how to structure the essay, a download and two exercises to help you with vocabulary and coherence.

The question
As ever the first step is to consider the question to correctly identify the task: Recent research shows that the consumption of junk food is a major factor in poor diet and this is detrimental to health. Some people believe that better health education is the answer to this problem but others disagree. What is your opinion? This is a proposal type question where we are asked to give our opinion about whether improving health education would have a positive effect on people eating too much junk food. We need to be sure that we adopt a clear position on this issue. The mistake would be simply to write about junk food and poor diet.

Different approaches to organising the essay
There are three different approaches possible in this type of question. Broadly speaking it is possible to: 1. agree that it is the best answer 2. disagree that it would be effective 3. accept it but say it would only have a limited effect If you think that you may run short of ideas, it is typically easier to take approach 2 or 3 as this gives you the opportunity to write a for/against style essay where discuss why it might not work and then suggest another alternative. If you decide to agree with the proposal, it is typically harder to organise your main body paragraphs.

Ideas and essay structure

In this essay I am going to take approach 3 above and organise my essay in this way. You should note that i am going to focus on giving reasons and examples to support my points which will help my coherence band score (learn how to pee and become coherent): topic paragraph 1 health education is important → it addresses a serious cause of unhealthy eating → explain how health education would help →use an example topic paragraph 2 health education is not enough → there are other social factors that education would not solve → give examples and explain what those factors are topic paragraph 3 suggest alternative solutions to health education → discuss why they work or may not work

The essay
Sample IELTS essay - health and diet (1760) Recent research shows that the consumption of junk food is a major factor in poor diet and this is detrimental to health. Some people believe that better health education is the answer to this problem but others disagree. What is your opinion? A serious concern nowadays is how our eating habits can affect our health. In particular, it has been demonstrated that eating too much junk food can lead to health issues later in life. One sensible suggestion for dealing with this is to improve the level of health education so that we eat better and live longer. One reason why focussing on health education is an appropriate measure is that it addresses one underlying cause of the problem. It is clear that there is a connection between what people know about nutrition and their eating habits. For example, children who have learned in school about the need to have a varied diet with plenty of vitamins tend to eat more healthily. In contrast, people who have not had this education still eat too much junk food and as a result suffer from diabetes and other diseases. Better health education, however, is not a complete answer as it ignores the wider social factors that cause people to eat unhealthily. For instance, many people eat fast food because they have a lifestyle that means they do not have time to sit down to a proper meal. Again, other people might eat burgers and pizzas because they are seen to be cool and they want to impress their peers.

There would not appear to be any simple way to deal with these social factors. A difficulty is that it is very hard for governments to make a difference to the individual choices people make. It might help, however, to ban advertisements for unhealthy foods on television and to require companies to provide proper meal facilities for their employees. My conclusion is that the government certainly ought to introduce measures to improve the level of health education. However, this probably would not be a perfect solution as it would also be necessary to deal with the other social factors that cause unhealthy eating.

Read more: Sample IELTS essay: health and dietDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www.dcielts.com/ielts-essays/health-and-diet/#ixzz2LlXAiZfJ Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives A common concern nowadays is how modern lifestyles can have a negative effect on family life. A particular worry is that parents no longer are able to provide sufficient care and support to their children. My own view is that this is generally true ,but not always so. On the one hand, busy parent`s lifestyles have some adverse effects on children`s upbringing. While traditionally the husband was the breadwinner of the family and the wife stayed at home to take care of her children, this ordinary family role now has completely changed. Nowadays, women go outside to work side by side with men, leaving her children alone or with nannies. As result , parents spend less time with their children, for example,they are no longer eat meals together as used in the past. Also working parents tend to have less opportunity to supervise and watch their children`s behaviour . On the other hand,many hard working families may still find the time to spend with their children. These families put more value on raising children , and it cause them agreat sense of achievement when they bring up their children in a perfect way.For example ,in some low income families, parents are still considerably involved in their children`s life so they know their children`s friends. From my own experience,i grew up in family where both parents are full time worker ,but i barely remember a day where i hadn`t saw one of my parents,and they where always available for us when we need them. In conclusion, although the busy lifestyle has resulted in a situation where families are less close than before,i also believe that there are cases where parents extremely busy but still managed to be involved in their children`s life. It should be the parent duty to balance their working and family life particularly if they decided to have children

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Sample IELTS essay – television
Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society? It is unarguable that television has had a considerable impact and changed the world in which we live. However, there is debate whether that change has been for the better or the worse, when we consider cultural development. While there are certainly strong feelings on both sides of the argument in western Europe, my own view is that television has had a largely positive influence on our society. There are, however, several reasons why it can be argued that television has a negative effect on cultural development. Perhaps the principle argument is the lowbrow nature of many programmes, particularly sitcoms and soap operas. People who watch these programmes do not learn anything, they are simply entertained. The other major argument is that because people watch so much television, they no longer take part in more traditional forms of cultural entertainment. An example here is how traditional dancing and music is becoming much less popular because people are staying at home to watch the television. On the other hand, there are a variety of ways in which cultural development has been assisted by television. Here the major argument is that television has allowed the whole of society access to cultural entertainment. For example, in the nineteenth century only a small proportion of people could go to the ballet or the theatre. However, it is now possible for everyone to enjoy these on television. A second positive effect is that on television we can learn more about other cultures and societies because there are so many interesting documentaries about other countries. My personal conclusion is that television is a largely positive influence. However, it is important that we do not watch it too much and that we watch the right sort of programme. If we watch the wrong sort of programme and watch too much television, we may become couch potatoes.

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Unemployment

Unemployment is one of the most serious problems facing developed nations today. What are the advantages and/or disadvantages of reducing the working week to thirty five hours? It is unquestionable that rising unemployment is one of the most pressing issues in the industrial world. One solution that has been put forward is to cut the working week to a maximum of 35 hours. However, in my view this solution is rather controversial and other solutions need to be found. It is fairly easy to understand the reasons why this proposal has been made. The reasoning is that if workers are not allowed to work for more than 35 hours weekly, then employers will be forced to engage more staff. There would be at least two advantages to this. Not only would unemployment be reduced, but the working conditions of employees on very long shifts would also be significantly improved. For example, a factory employing 300 manual workers doing 10 hours a day might employ 450 workers. There is also, however, a strong argument not to implement this proposal. This argument is based on economic competitiveness. If a company was forced to employ more workers to produce the same amount of goods, then its wage bill would rise and its products might become more expensive and less competitive compared to companies with longer working weeks. In this case, it is possible that the company either might become insolvent or it would have to make some employees redundant. As a result, the intended benefit to the personnel would not happen. In summary, we can see that this is clearly a complex issue as there are significant advantages and disadvantages to the proposal. My own personal view is that it would be better not to introduce the shortened working week because it works only in theory and not in practice.

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The question
Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of this?

Focussing on the topic
This question clearly is about the process of globalisation and whether it is a good or a bad thing. However, you need to be careful not to just write a general globalisation essay. Globalisation is a big idea and can refer to many different things. Here the question asks you to focus on the concepts such as fashion, brands, eating habits and television. This means that you need to

A balanced paragraph structure The main idea here is that when you write your paragraphs. This can work in different ways: 1. I prefer to write about the opinion I disagree with first. also arguments that that the positive effects of this globalisation are more significant. Personally. it is likely that your essay will become confusing to read. It would be a mistake to write only about the disadvantages or advantages because of the way the question is worded. So. Structuring the essay The logical approach here is to write one paragraph about advantages and another about disadvantages. You can only say if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages if you consider both. You may choose to do it the other way around. for example. In this way. The top tip here is to try and make the first sentence of each content paragraph reflect/balance the language of the the previous paragraph. What you want to . for example. 2. The main ideas are: cultural globalisation is a good thing cultural globalisation is a bad thing These ideas obviously balance each other and relate to the main question. All you need to do is find reasons and examples to support those ideas. this should be quite easy. Here. you do not just include “ideas”. The next should begin with a sentence that reflects/balances that sentence so that the reader/examiner can understand how the two paragraphs link together: There are. however. Balance and making your essay coherent Thinking about balance is one excellent way to make your writing more coherent. This makes the argument of your essay much easier to follow and so more coherent. simply write about financial or commercial globalisation. This is the intelligent way of writing “Firstly.refer to these concepts in your essay and not. the main body paragraphs should match: you want to make sure that each paragraph is clearly about one main idea that relates to the question. If you have too many ideas. if you start one paragraph with: There are several reasons to argue that this form of cultural globalisation has had negative consequences for society. 2.” “Secondly”. the structure of your argument and the coherence of your essay is immediately obvious. vocabulary – repeating or reflecting vocabulary 1. Balancing your essay structure the introduction and the conclusion should match: you outline your position in the introduction and the conclusion repeats that position and adds the main ideas you have introduced in the main body paragraphs of the essay. The general idea is that the more balanced your essay is. Consider both sides of the issue You should also note that you need to write about both sides of this issue. essay structure – linking the introduction and the conclusion paragraphs – balancing any ideas with explanations and examples 3. the better it links together.

[more complex explanation]. [balanced by a simple example] 3. a dish that cannot compare to any of the national dishes it has replaced. There are 3 separate ways in which you can do this: 1.com/ielts-essays/cultural-globalisation-sample-ieltsessay/#ixzz2LlZg5jF9 Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives It is undoubtedly the case that the world today has become a global village. For example. such as a curry in India or a hotpot in China. Balancing your vocabulary Another form of balance you want to consider is repeating or reflecting vocabulary in your essay. [Very general statement]. Indeed. Perhaps the most significant of these is how there is now far less diversity than before and that this has also lowered satndards. if people watch films and television programmes produced in the United States. but these are relatively minor. The benefit of this is that you can develop one idea coherently.dcielts. The first point to make is that there are some downsides to this process of cultural globalisation. A top tip here is that you want to start off with a very general point and then become more detailed with each sentence. The most significant of these disadvantages [balances/reflects downsides in the previous sentence]is that it can weaken national culture and traditions. it can make you essay harder to follow. fast food chains such as McDonalds provide us with convenience [change of word form] food that is much better adapted to the pace of modern life. this only affects minor details such as clothing and does not seriously threaten national identity. My view is that this is largely a beneficial process [personal opinion balanced by the opinion in the conclusion]and in this essay I will explain why. repeating words 2. [an example and explanation that balance and develop the main idea of the paragraph that globalisation weakens national culture] . Typically. One of the effects of this is that increasingly people in all corners of the world are exposed to similar services and products and adopt similar habits. however. changing the form of the word 3. Read more: Globalisation essay for IELTSDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. few people nowadays can find the time to sit down [a phrase with the same general meaning]and have a traditional meal in the middle of the day. One such aspect [repeated word] is how the “new” goods and services generally make out lives more convenient and have improved our quality of life.try and do is balance every idea with an explanation and/or an example. For example. There are a number of ways in which this form of globalisation has had negative effects on society. The idea here is that if you keep on changing your words. sometimes they adopt aspects of the lifestyle of the American characters they see on television. This allows the reader/examiner to follow your train of thought. A good example here is how one of the most popular meals in the world is McDonalds’ Happy Meal. using a synonym or similar phrase There are a number of positive aspects to this form of cultural globalisation.

I understand the point of view of people who worry about cultural globalisation because it is a threat to national traditions [summary of first paragraph].the structure is clear] in favour of this process. this is outweighed by its positive impact on international understanding and the fact that it represents progress within a society [summary of second paragraph]. It is a sign of progress [balances/reflects modernity in the previous sentence] in a society that people no longer are restricted to brands and advertisements from their own society but are able to access more international goods.When we turn to the other side of the argument. Getting the essay question right In cities and towns all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. there were unable to drink Coca Cola or wear Nike. The one point to focus on here is to make sure that you answer both halves of the question throughout the essay. products and services. In conclusion. If. This means that you want to identify both halves of the question in your introduction and your conclusion. reflecting/balancing brands in the previous sentence] then that would mean their society [repeated language] was not part of the international community. the better we understand each other and this reduces prejudice against other nations.dcielts. you will find guidance on: • • • • structuring the essay so that you answer the question fully getting ideas for the essay organising your paragraphs choosing the right vocabulary There are also two vocabulary exercises to help you write the essay yourself. However.com/ielts-essays/cultural-globalisation-sample-ieltsessay/#ixzz2LlZqCQiG Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives city traffic This is the next in my series of sample essays for IELTS. Read more: Globalisation essay for IELTSDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. [two famous brands. for example. The first of these is that the more we share habits. As well as a sample essay to download. there are two major points to make [balances the language of the first paragraph . The other point relates tomodernity. Essay structure . What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? This is a “double question” question.

the natural structure is to deal with each question in a content separate paragraph – dealing with the causes and the policies separately. See the structure Ideas for the essay Here are some possible ideas for the essay. however. The idea is to select those ideas that work best for you – meaning those that you can expand with reasons and examples. that your conclusion does summarise your main points. More cars • • • • • • • • • • • • • • cars are more affordable than ever before cars have become a status symbol people need cars to commute to work people do not share car journeys improved road networks make it easier to travel many families now own two cars (both husband and wife work) public transport is inconvenient public transport is unavailable in some areas improve public transport by adding more bus routes give incentives to drivers to share journeys add more cycle routes put tariffs on using roads in peak periods advertising campaigns to highlight negatives of using cars have more pedestrianised areas in towns to prevent cars from entering them Solutions Structuring your paragraphs when you have more than one idea . topic sentences and the conclusion to form the spine of your essay.With this type of essay question with a double question. A top tip is NOT to include ALL your ideas. You should note that I have not used all these ideas in my own essay. It is often quite hard to summarise your position quickly in relation to two question and so it can make sense to just say that you are going to discuss the questions in the introduction as opposed to stating your position to both of them. Just reading those should be enough to tell the reader what it is about. A key tip here is to make sure that you use the introduction. You do want to make sure.

So in this example it is clear that I have three things to say about why traffic has increased in cities. You can also look at the structure of my second topic paragraph where I also use more than one reason. A successful example of this is the congestion charge scheme in London which has certainly reduced the level of traffic in inner-city areas. you probably want to choose a “listing paragraph” structure. one option has to be to improve the reliability of public transport to encourage people to take the bus or the train rather than get in the car. however. See the academic language Topic vocabulary You also want. Here the vocabulary you want falls into these areas: • transport . not least because many bus and train services have been reduced because of the difficulty in funding them. However.You may want to notice how “also” is a natural linking word. Vocabulary Academic vocabulary Almost certainly the most useful vocab to focus on in IELTS essays comes from the academic word list. I start by saying that there is more than one point I wish to make. The way to do this is simply to start your paragraph by saying that it will include a number of related points. especially during peak periods. The pattern is much the same though. If this appears “too simple” for you. This way it is clear to the examiner what you are saying. These are words that can be used in ANY essay and the idea is that IELTS essays should be formal in language. The first step is to understand why traffic has increased in towns and cities. A second reason is that public transport has become increasingly unreliable in recent years. One is that cars have become more affordable for the average consumer and they are no longer a luxury item. It would also be possible to discourage people from driving to work by introducing special tariffs for using the roads. The third reason is that society has in general become more mobile and this means more people are prepared to commute to work by car than they were before. to use a good range of topic vocabulary. Broadly speaking. but something that most families expect to own. there are three main reasons for this. There is almost certainly no one solution to this problem given the complexity of its causes.When you have a number of different ideas to include in one paragraph.

In this form of essay.city traffic |Dominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. Why do some people believe this? What is your opinion? This is a double question.com/ielts-essays/sample-ielts-essay-city-traffic/#ixzz2Lla5lKPG Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Looking at the question Newspapers and books are outdated. intro: modern technology partly to blame 2. books: problem that they are not instant gratification . Essay structure There are different ways to structure this essay. The way I have chosen is to write one paragraph about newspapers and one about books and then use a slightly longer conclusion than usual for my own views. 1. make sure you answer both halves of the question by giving your own opinion and explaining why other people believe this. Whatever else you do.dcielts. newspapers: problem that they are yesterday’s news 3. one natural technique is to use the conclusion in this way.• • • • cities problem/solution cause general academic language See the topic vocabulary Test your vocabulary Here are two exercises to help you write the essay: • • academic vocabulary general vocabulary Download the essay city traffic (3609) More related lessons • • More sample essay lessons: lessons with sample essays and advice on how to write the essay More help with writing essays: more general lessons on how to write essays with a focus on writing the different parts of the essay. planning essays and developing the skills of coherence and cohesion Read more: Sample IELTS essay .

It is perhaps less obvious why books are said to be out of fashion. • • • • • • people take this view are said to be My own view is become redundant out of date out of fashion The essay Newspapers and books are outdated. A possible consequence of this is that traditional media such as books and newspapers are not just less popular but are considered by some to be outdated. There is a great range to choose from here. There is less effort involved in enjoying a 3D movie or playing a computer game than in turning the pages of a book. I disagree with this point of view. . Here are some options for you for “opinion” and “outdated”. If you use Google or another search engine or simply switch on the television. Why do some people believe this? What is your opinion? As we move into the twenty. Some of the topic vocabulary I use in this essay is: • great novels • • • • • • use Google or another search engine switch on the television the latest news bulletin read for pleasure enjoying a 3D movie in turning the pages of a book Outdated and opinion vocabulary If at all possible you do not want to repeat the vocabulary from the question too much. The principal reason why some people take this view is fairly clear in the case of newspapers. The vocabulary Topic vocabulary You need vocabulary to talk about books and newspapers and other media. is out of date the moment it is published because it contains yesterday’s news.first century an increasing number of people are relying on new forms of technology. One possibility is that fewer people choose to read for pleasure nowadays because they prefer the instant gratification and thrills of modern technology. you can instantly get the latest news bulletin. conclusion: books and newspapers are not redundant but may need to change in the modern world Another option would be to use one topic paragraph for “advantages” of books and newspapers and one for their “disadvantages”. A newspaper. by contrast.4. It is generally much easier and quicker to discover what is happening in the world from the internet or the television than from a newspaper. Personally.

dcielts.My own view and conclusion is that books and newspapers will never go completely out of fashion or become redundant. The open question The first question is an open question: “What will it be used for in the future?”. Thinking about the question We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer technology. just a few are: . improve the coherence of the essay and improve your vocabulary. you will also a lesson with advice on how to answer the question. this is the harder question as you need to think yourself of 2/3 areas in which computers will be used in the future. We can already see this happening with the arrival of the audiobook and the various free newspaper internet sites. (292 words) Read more: Sample IELTS essay – Newspapers and books |Dominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. very important that you answer both halves of the question or you will be penalised heavily for Task Response. If you read on. The reason for this is that they serve basic human needs. This is quite common in IELTS essays and it very. There are a number of possibilities here. books and newspapers may need to change to meet the new demands of twenty-first century consumers. In a way. However.com/ielts-essays/sample-ielts-essay-newspapers-andbooks/#ixzz2LlahTtEm Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives computer technology and the future The latest in my series of sample IELTS essays to download. crime detection and even to fly planes. It is used in business. I believe that people will always want to read about the news and escape into the imaginary worlds of great novels. What will it be used for in future? Is this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits? A double question The first point to note about the question is that there are in fact 2 questions.

perhaps contrasting what happens now.• • • • education communication transport personal robots You do not need to be very imaginative. The closed question The second question is a “Yes/No” question. rather than just listing different areas in which it will be used in and also explaining why it may or may not be dangerous. The first is to make sure you explain your ideas . Structuring the essay There are 2 main possible structures for this essay. There are no prizes for originality.The second idea is to try and link your paragraphs together. The trick to answering this question is to give a reason why for your answer. Be sure to try and vary your future language. Making your answer coherent I have two suggestions to make the essay coherent. be sure to write a complete paragraph for your conclusion. • • See my lesson on futures to get some ideas for grammar See my lesson on technology vocabulary for words Read and download the essay . If you take this second approach. One way to do this is to refer to the same ideas about how computer technology when you write about the possible dangers. Grammar and vocabulary This question asks you to write about the future. You should also see that it is quite possible to answer it with a “Slightly” answer by saying that there are equal benefits and dangers to computer technology. it is not enough just to avoid mistakes. It is important to use different structures to get a good band score. This means explaining how the technology will be used in the future. or the examiner may think you have not answered the question fully.You also want to try and avoid using the word “computer” all the time and try and find some varied vocab. Note that you must directly provide an answer to the question. The other is to write 2 topic paragraphs about how computers will be used in the future and then use the conclusion paragraph to answer the second question. I’d suggest you pick 2 areas and briefly explain how they might be used in the future. One is to write a topic paragraph about each question and a separate conclusion.

but that this may not be entirely positive. there are also a number of potential dangers. Part of the way I achieve this is by matching my introduction and conclusion. transforming fields such as education and business when video-conferencing platforms become more stable.computer technology and the future |Dominic Cole's IELTS . Download sample essay computer technology and the future (3405) Read more: Sample IELTS essay . (273 words) Varying vocabulary influence/affect/control are 3 similar words. It is highly likely that in the future there will be comparatively few aspects of our lives that will not be influenced by computer technology. Perhaps the most serious of these would be that if people rely on computers too much for communication. it is clear to see that we have become more and more dependent on computers and information technology. rather than just repeating the same word. This technology now reaches into almost every area of our lives and it is easy to predict that this phenomenon is only going to grow. Matching the introduction and conclusion The essay is extremely coherent. they could in fact begin to communicate less well. See how I vary my vocabulary. For example. they might speak less and less often to one another and simply look at a screen. This is because I do not always use “is” and “will”. As we move into the twenty-first century. My conclusion is that the growth of computer technology is inevitable. My personal belief is that this presents a variety of dangers. Just one area in which it is possible to foresee dangers is communication. It might even affect romance with more people forming relationships online. The probability is that it will control more and more forms of communication. Being academic This essay is quite academic in tone.Here is my sample essay with notes. if every member of a family had their own computer screen and smart phone. Rather I choose to lots of modal verbs such as would. While there may be benefits to this technological revolution. we need to think carefully how we use them. might and may. and if we are going to ensure that computers do not become a negative influence. This is an easy trick to learn and will certainly help your essay writing. This would be serious because our ability to communicate is an essential part of our humanity.

dcielts. It makes sense to talk about the influence of advertising before discussing protection measures. Step 1 – getting ideas to write the essay – ask yourself questions . You will find some useful vocabulary with exercises in this lesson. So. as well as the essay to download. I talk you through a process of getting ideas for essays like this. This is partly because you need some quite specialised vocabulary. It is absolutely essential that you answer both parts of the question. one of the more challenging topics in IELTS.and Beyond http://www.com/ielts-essays/computers-the-future/#ixzz2Llb17BvQ Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Sample advertising essay This is the next in my series of model essays for IELTS. So. Reading the essay question and getting the structure right Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. One logical way to do this is use a main body paragraph for each part of the question. my essay uses this structure: Introduction: identify theme of essay and outline your position Main body 1: answer to what extent advertising does influence us Main body 2: answer what measures we can take to protect consumers Conclusion: return to main theme of essay and underline your position The benefit of this structure is that it is simple (and simple tends to be good in exam circumstances) and coherent in that it follows a logical progression. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them? This is one of those double questions types. and the conclusion reflects the introduction and so tops and tails the essay. It is on the theme of advertising. but also because it may be a topic you haven’t considered before.

The trick is to look at the words in the question and ask yourself some WH questions (who/where/what/why/when etc). Can the government regulate advertising? If they cant’t who can? The consumers themselves? Some other body? Step 2 – 0rganising the ideas – making your paragraphs coherent Another common problem is that candidates have enough ideas to write an essay. the place to get these ideas is in the question itself. but they don’t organise them well. The main ideas are simple ideas – normally found in the question Yes. your writing will almost certainly become incoherent – and that’s bad for your band score. That gives you your start. but you can also ask yourself who should take those measures. Very often. Your big (or main) ideas are simple. Are all these the same? Do some need more protection than others? competing companies: Ask yourself what does this mean? It’s about the free market and competition. it is likely to become confused. So.One problem many candidates have is finding ideas for essays. for example: numbers of advertisements: Ask yourself what different types of advertising do you know? TV commercials/bilboards/leaflets and flyers/promotions/logos and slogans/product placement/sponsorship Are all these the same? Is one type more dangerous than others? consumers: Ask yourself what different types of consumer are there? high street shoppers/online shoppers/impulse buyers/regular customers/children/adults. Is it possible to regulate the free market? influenced: Ask yourself how we are influenced by advertising? Is it the same in all cases? Which is the most dangerous form of advertising? measures: You can ask yourself what measures need to be taken. If you try and include all your ideas. “I agree with this proposal” or “This opinion is partly right and partly wrong”. So each paragraph begins with a simple sentence like: . that’s right – just one main idea per para. Here is how to avoid that problem: Each paragraph is about one main idea only Yes. This means that you need to select what ideas you use – if you try and use all your ideas in a 250 word essay. then it often works to try and think of differences. this is right too. They are things like.

This works best in more complex paragraphs like the one above. Rather I come back to the main idea: The volume of this advertising means that we. ranging from television commercials to simple flyers that we cannot escape it. Step 3 – paragraphs are like essays: it can better to repeat/rephrase an idea than to give a new idea The next point to note is that one possible paragraph structure is to repeat/rephrase your main idea rather than give a new one. Others ideas are supporting ideas that explain or give examples The key here is to see that we just need a couple of explanations of the one big idea. tend to be profoundly influenced by it and buy without thinking. Looking at the “ideas” from step I. This means it does influence us. very probably you will see a product placed in the film by some advertising agency. If. The volume of this advertising means that we. At the end of the paragraph.Or It is not easy to decide how to regulate advertising. . as consumers. I don’t try and say something different. All you have to do now is explain why and how. as consumers. I then use a mixture of reasons and examples to explain this idea. This means that controlling advertising is complex. All you have to do now is explain why that is so and what can be done. if you watch the latest blockbuster movie. you will see the logos of the tournamentsponsors. for example.The first point to make is that advertising does make us spend money we do not need to. There are nowadays so many different ways companies promote their products and services. Likewise. The main idea is: The first point to make is that advertising does make us spend money we do not need to. you watch a football match on television. the most dangerous type of adverts are those that we see all the time and don’t think about examples: tv commercials/flyers/sponsorship/product placement So the final paragraph looks like this: The first point to make is that advertising does make us spend money we do not need to. I chose these for my first paragraph: explanation. tend to be profoundly influenced by it and buy without thinking.

governments ought to restrict advertisements for harmful products such as alcohol and tobacco. as consumers. to control other forms of advertising. this can be dangerous as it encourages us to spend without thinking and young people. however. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them? In today’s material world. we are inundated with various forms of advertising. It is not easy to decide how to regulate advertising. ensure that young people are protected from too much exposure to advertising. I/MY . In this essay. so why would you in a paragraph? Read more: Model essay for IELTS: advertisingDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. My conclusion is that while we cannot escape advertising or its effects in the modern world. for example. Likewise. second person and third person pronouns. if you watch the latest blockbuster movie. You wouldn’t add a new idea in the conclusion of your essay. or simply turning the television off.dcielts. need some protection from it. (266 words) notes My introduction and conclusion are both quite short: 2 sentences and 1 sentence. ranging from television commercials to simple flyers that we cannot escape it. The benefit of this approach is that it allows me more words for the main body of the essay – perhaps the most important part. There are different ways of writing introductions and conclusions. you watch a football match on television. Clearly. It is really just using the introduction – main body – conclusion structure of an essay for a paragraph. very probably you will see a product placed in the film by some advertising agency. If. Parents should. This means we need to use our commonsense when we go to the shops. children should be encouraged not to pay too much attention to it. you will see the logos of the tournament sponsors. In my view. it is conventional to try and not use personal pronouns unless you need to.This should be a familiar idea to you. tend to be profoundly influenced by it and buy without thinking. They do not have the power. and ask ourselves whether we really need to make that purchase. The volume of this advertising means that we.com/ielts-essays/advertising-essay/#ixzz2LlbHxhHO Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. If you are writing an academic essay. The first point to make is that advertising does make us spend money we do not need to. There are nowadays so many different ways companies promote their products and services. however. I use first person. This can mean simply explaining that it is not in fact necessary to buy the newest Xbox. in particular.

which are something you may have heard before. you are going to need these pronouns if you use examples. Read more: Model essay for IELTS: advertisingDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. in my essays I avoid using “you”. This may not be exciting. This is one academic convention and it is perfectly acceptable in IELTS. as you prepare your writing. In fact. It is better to use a pronoun rather than repeat the noun. you do need to think about it. but it is practical in that it will help not just to improve your score. Why? It is up to 25% of your score: it is as important to your final score as both grammar and vocabulary. We I use “we” and “ourselves” to talk more impersonally about people/consumers. So. He/They In my view. My best advice: try to find another solution if you can. Here I use them in my introduction and conclusion to show the examiner what my personal point of view is. It is fairly informal and avoided in academic writing.com/ielts-essays/advertising-essay/#ixzz2LlbSZNRD Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Paragraph coherence: the PEE model Coherence is crucial to IELTS writing. but at least I am going to do it using pretty colours! Paragraph coherence . however. You Normally. Some/many teachers will tell you that it is wrong to use “you” in academic essays because it is more spoken and not written language. You should try and use “I”/”my” as little as possible. I am going to be boring about boring topic sentences. perfectly acceptable. In IELTS. What I want to do in this post is to show one relatively simple way to achieve it. In truth. you can get away with this provided you use enough more formal/written language elsewhere – this is one way IELTS is not exactly like academic writing.If the question asks you for your opinion. you are probably going to need to use first person pronouns in order to answer the question. but also make the writing process easier.dcielts.

The mistake is to write very short paragraphs or paragraphs which contain unrelated points.One form of coherence is coherence within a paragraph. Firstly. it impresses the examiner. If you don’t believe me. Learn how to write by thinking about reading. In this post I am going to suggest a possible model to help you do this by teaching you to PEE – something everyone should be able to do quite naturally. Paragraph coherence – expanding the topic – think speaking You can also learn to write by thinking about speaking. your writing will become coherent.” This is telling you that coherence is important. In the speaking exam. If you do support what you say with evidence and examples. but it is a good model to folllow in the context of an exam essay for two reasons. In the writing the same applies: it is important to expand on the topic to show you have sufficient vocabulary and grammar to say what you want. one of the goals is not to give very brief answers. A model – Learn how to P-E-E One way to expand your topic sentences is to make the point (P) explain it (E) give an example (E) How it works This is not the only way to be coherent. however. one very familiar task is to identify the main topic of a paragraph by selecting the correct heading from a list. Understanding paragraph coherence – topic sentences – think reading In the IELTS reading exam. knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Your goal in the writing paper is to ensure that each of your paragraphs contains a similar topic sentence. To achieve this you need to learn how to structure a paragraph with a topic sentence and to develop that sentence through the appropriate use of explanations and examples. It may help. but to give extended answers. you should note that the question almost invariably contains these words: “You should use your own ideas. It also makes the writing easier as . first to think about how this works in the reading and speaking papers. One way to complete that task is to identify one sentence that gives the main point of the paragraph – this is the topic sentence.

but again it is practical.com/ielts-writing/paragraph-coherence-1/#ixzz2Llc6jjAG Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives . Some examples Read through these three paragraphs taken from different IELTS essays and note how they all have a similar structure: • Point • Explanation • Example This is a pattern you can follow in most essays to give coherence to your writing by expanding on one point. when in past they would have had to buy stamps and go to the post office which was much harder and more expensive. For now. they no longer take part in more traditional forms of cultural entertainment. There are several reasons why it can be argued that television has a negative effect on cultural development. There will be times when you do not use examples for instance. there are positive economic benefits in preserving old buildings. They say this because in the past it was sometimes impossible to call people in other countries on the telephone. however. This may seem limiting. People who watch these programmes do not learn anything. I have a suggestion. An illustration here is Egypt once again. Part of this argument is that countries and nations need to preserve old buildings in order to preserve their heritage. to this cultural argument.most paragraphs can follow the same pattern and planning becomes much easier as you already know the shape of each paragraph before you start writing. In addition. but now it is relatively simple to use a program such as Skype to talk to them for free or to send an email. for it is really little more than 5 paragraphs and if you can write one paragraph. The other major argument is that because people watch so much television.dcielts. There are those who argue that the internet has had an extremely positive influence on communication. the exam essay becomes easy. A good example here are the students who go to study abroad and are able to send messages home with no difficulty. A strong argument can of course be made from the opposite position. don’t practise writing essays: go back to the paragraph. Read more: Paragraph coherence in IELTS writingDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. it isn’t a rule. they are simply entertained. A suggestion If any of this is new to you. Once you can write a good paragraph. An example here is how traditional dancing and music is becoming much less popular because people are staying at home to watch the television.com/ielts-writing/paragraph-coherence-1/#ixzz2LlcOKGGh Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Read more: Paragraph coherence in IELTS writingDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. I will add that this just a model guideline.dcielts. you can write 5. Perhaps the principle argument is the lowbrow nature of many programmes. a country which depends on tourism for much of its national income simply because visitors pay to come from other countries to visit its ancient sites. particularly sitcoms and soap operas.

3. This letter is really just a letter of complaint and that means you need to use some good complaining language. When it was delivered.as that will tell you whether you need to use more formal or less formal language. . You must remember that it is not enough to say what the problem is. Reading the question You have just bought a new mobile phone from a website on the internet. but you must also say who you are and what you want to happen next. You should see here that you are writing to someone you don’t know and that it is quite a business-y letter – that means you need some more formal language. In the letter: • • • introduce yourself explain the situation state what action you want to be taken 1.A letter of complaint: mobile phone This is the next in my series of model IELTS letters. Write a letter to the website. Think about what the main reason of the letter is – it’s a letter of complaint Most IELTS letters have a function: explaining/apologising etc. I give you a quick lesson on how to read the question. the phone was faulty. plan your vocabulary and structure your answer. This one is a letter of complaint and before showing you the model letter. 2. Answer all parts of the question The first point to see is that this question asks you to write about 3 different points. Think about who you are writing to It is always important to think about who you are writing to.

If you do not do this. The standard language in a more formal letter like this is: . IELTS letters are quite easy to organise as you just need to follow the 3 different points the question asks you to write about and use a paragraph for each one of them. you might use too simple vocabulary or repeat words too much.4. you make sure that you get a good Task Response score by answering the question fully. Structuring the letter Generally. Here are the words I found: mobile phone: handset/text/camera phone/smart phone/message/screen website/internet: online/connect bought: purchase/customer/shop/store/product/service/cost/price faulty: not work/malfunction/break/unreliable Complaining language Letters of complaint are quite common and it is sensible to prepare some language to help you write them. so it makes sense to think about what words you need – the clue is always in the question. Here are some simple variations: I am writing to complain I must complain I would like to complain My complaint is I am unhappy with I am dissatisfied with Unfortunately. Think about what vocabulary you need Vocabulary is 25% of your score. My suggestion is that you should brainstorm some language before you start writing. If you do this. Two points to remember ( and these are good for life and not just IELTS): The introduction You should say clearly what the purpose of the letter is. this should also give you ideas for writing.

the verb needs to be in an -ing form (eg “I look forward to hearing form you”). neither of these functions work properly. For these reasons. I am writing to you to complain about the mobile I bought from your online store on 23 November.I am writing to [complain] The conclusion You should say what you expect to happen next. Yours faithfully Read more: IELTS letter of complaint .dcielts. Again. the telephone does not have the advertised complete social network support. Unfortunately. My reasons for choosing this model was that you advertised it on your website as having the new Swype texting system and complete social network support. When I try to write a text message. there is standard language here: I look forward to Note that if you use this phrase with a verb following it. I look forward to your immediate response. Read the letter Dear Sirs. this time I am dissatisfied with the service you have provided.com/ielts-letters/a-letter-of-complaint-mobile-phone/#ixzz2LlexNDeo Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives a work placement . This will normally involve asking the other person to contact you in some way. the system either crashes or switches into Chinese and does not recognise the words. the Samsung Android SA23.a faulty mobile phoneDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. The mobile telephone I ordered was the latest smart phone. I would ask you either to refund the purchase price in full or send me a replacement handset. as I am unable to upload photographs to Twitter and Facebook. Unfortunately. I have been a loyal customer of yours for the last 4 years and have successfully made many purchases over the years. Likewise. however.

Be clear in the first sentences of each paragraph This part is really exactly the same as in an essay. you will see how I have “topped and tailed “my letter by saying thank you once at the beginning and once at the end. Understanding the question When you read this question you should note how it asks you to include three separate points. A sensible approach is to underline the key ideas in the question before you start writing – to remind yourself to include them. This is normal practice. The way you do this though is slightly different from an essay in that your paragraphs may well be much shorter. getting the tone right and writing notes on the language used in my letter. Topping and tailing – how you start and how you end One special thing about letter paragraphs is how you start and end the letter. This is because people tend to read letters quickly and want to know what is being said immediately. In my sample letter.This is the next in my series of sample IELTS letters. you should make the main point clear in your first sentence. how to write in paragraphs in a letter. you will find advice on addressing all the parts of the question. Here we have what is really a thank you letter. you will be heavily penalised. when you start your paragraph..Write a letter to the head of department thanking him . If you don’t include all these points in your letter. All you have to do is to decide what the main function of the letter is and start and finish the letter by saying that. You should: • • • thank head of department explain how this has helped you say what your future plans are Writing in paragraphs Letters should use paragraphs. You have worked for a company for a short time during your college course. You should also aim to write a paragraph about each point so that it is clear that you have addressed the whole task. Here I have used: . so the pattern is: I am writing to thank you… Thank you once again for…. In this lesson. The key idea is to let the reader know exactly what you are writing about by setting your ideas out as clearly as possible.

This one needs to be quite formal as it is a business letter and is written to someone in a position of responsibility that you probably don’t know that well. You also want to try to make the letter quite friendly. (explanation of how the work placement helped from the question) and As for the future. As for the future. although the extent you do this may depend on the culture you live in. Opportunity is the better word here as there is no luck involved. One tip here is to include personal pronouns I and you and add personal details to make it more friendly. I very much enjoyed the experience of being part of a team involved in designing solutions to everyday problems.It was a most rewarding experience and I certainly learnt much during my time in the engineering department. it would be ideal if I could come at work at Innovations and Cybernetics should a position be available. While I had a fairly good theoretical knowledge of design and production from my studies at Melville Polytechnic. You may also note that the words job and opportunity frequently go together. Language notes opportunity and chance: these are two very similar words. I am now convinced that I would like to pursue a career in this field when I graduate. Thank you once again for this work placement and I hope to keep in contact with you in the future. It was a most rewarding experience and I certainly learnt much during my time in the engineering department. . Indeed. I believe I now understand the practicalities of these processes much better. This means you want to get the simple formal things right by using “I would like” and not “I want”. The sample letter I am writing to thank you for the opportunity you gave me to work at Innovations and Cybernetics Inc this summer. This is not least due to the daily feedback sessions with John Perkins which were extremely helpful in showing me the best way to tackle design problems in a work environment. (what my future plans are from the question) Getting the tone right – formal but friendly Before you start writing you want to think about the tome of your letter. I am now convinced that I would like to pursue a career in this field when I graduate.

That means you need to think about range of vocabulary and grammar. but to learn which words it goes with. practicalities: you may know the word practical. fairly good and extremely helpful: note the word pattern of adverb/adjective – this is something we use a lot in english when we qualify ideas. You don’t need to use all of these. Range of grammar In this letter.a work placement -Dominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www.dcielts. Letters are marked in exactly the same way as other pieces of writing. it would be ideal if: this is a neat (and more formal) way of saying Read more: IELTS letter . as the temptation can be to write something slightly too simple. The focus here is mostly on range of grammar and vocabulary. pursue a career in: this is a useful (and slightly more formal) phrase for work as. It helps to concentrate on this in letters. but it should give you an idea of what can be done: . you should note how it helps to not just learn the word career. These adverbs (including most above) are useful variations of very. especially if you are aiming for a higher band score.a most rewarding experience: you may have learnt that experience is an uncountable word (not used with a/n). Here are a few. We can use an experience when we are talking about about a particular time. but can you use all of its forms including practicalities? It really does help to learn all the forms of a word. You should also note rewarding here which is an extremely useful word to describe jobs you like . Again. but that is not always correct. I make a conscious effort to use some different grammatical constructions.com/ielts-letters/ielts-letter-a-work-placement/#ixzz2LlfJgaXY Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives an apology This is the next in my series of sample letters for IELTS.

What you need to do is think about the general situation of the letter and then you may be able to extend the range of the tenses you use beyond the simple past – sticking to just one tense is the trap. it also allows you to write about other times too. I am writing to apologise = a standard letter opening phrase I am normally a quiet person = a simple present (talk about yourself) it was my 30th birthday party = a simple past She had invited around 20 of my friends = a past perfect (what had happened before) how much noise would be made = a modal form (think about unreal situations) please accept my apologies = a polite imperative I do respect = an emphatic simple present (good for when you expressing your feelings) I have since personally apologised = a present perfect (for present this situation will not be repeated = a future form (good for the final part of the letter when you talk about what you expect to happen next) Other structures There is of course much more to grammar than tenses. Three to note in particular are who were all very understanding = a relative clause (good for adding detail) to ask if they wanted to come round = an indirect question structure (often useful in letters when people have said something) this situation will not be repeated = a passive (sometimes you do not want/need to say who did the action in a letter – this is not a “formal construction”) Range of vocabulary – idioms and more formal variations in semi-formal letters . so you will also find I vary my structures a bit too.Tenses and verbs – think about the situation This letter is mostly about the past. However.

see the grammar and idiomatic variations You are staying in rented accommodation. You could also take a more formal approach. Several neighbours have complained about the noise to your landlord. The reason for the excessive noise was that it was my 30th birthday party and my girlfriend threw a surprise party for me. because I am normally a quiet person and I do respect the privacy of my neighbours. say how you will remedy the situation Dear Mr Jones I am writing to apologise for the incident last week when some of my neighbours complained to you. I am most embarrassed about this.Another point to note about this letter is its range of vocabulary. explain the situation 3. In this case. but it is possible/probable that you have a personal relationship with that person. The letter is “semiformal” in that it is being written to someone in a formal capacity. apologise for the disturbance 2. In your letter: 1. threw a surprise party = organised a surprise birthday party celebrate the big day = celebrate the occasion after I had got over the shock = after I had recovered from the shock I did knock on the door of my immediate neighbours to ask= I did invite my immediate neighbours to turn the music down = to play the music less loudly come round = join the party I did not think of = I did not consider Read the letter . Both can work in this situation. She had invited around 20 of my friends to help me celebrate the big day and perhaps she did not realise how much noise would be . You recently held a party to celebrate your birthday. Write a letter to your landlord. The one advantage of idioms (and phrasal verbs) is that they allow you to show off your range that little bit more. you are able to use some more idiomatic vocabulary.

I would also explain that after I had got over the shock. Unfortunately. I did knock on the door of my immediate neighbours to ask if they wanted to come round and offering to turn the music down after 11 o’clock. I would also explain that after I had recovered from the shock.made by the travelling disco she had hired. who were all very understanding. I did knock on the door of my immediate neighbours to ask if they wanted to join the party and offering to play the music less loudly after 11 o’clock. Once again. I did not think of inviting the other residents of the block. She had invited around 20 of my friends to help me celebrate the occasion and perhaps she did not realise how much noise would be made by the travelling disco she had hired. Unfortunately.dcielts. Once again. The reason for the excessive noise was that it was my 30th birthday party and my girlfriend organised a surprise party for me. Yours sincerely Read more: IELTS letter: an apology |Dominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. I have since personally apologised to my neighbours. I have since personally apologised to my neighbours. because I am normally a quiet person and I do respect the privacy of my neighbours. Yours sincerely Read the letter – see some less idiomatic variations Dear Mr Jones I am writing to apologise for the incident last week when some of my neighbours complained to you. please accept my apologies and rest assured that this situation will not be repeated. who were all very understanding. I did not consider inviting the other residents of the block.com/ielts-letters/ielts-letter-an-apology/#ixzz2LlfXbGuP Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives More formal letter Dear Mr Jones . I am most embarrassed about this. please accept my apologies and rest assured that this situation will not be repeated.

I am most embarrassed about this. She had invited around 20 of my friends to help me celebrate the big day and perhaps she did not realise how much noise would be made by the travelling disco she had hired. I have since personally apologised to my neighbours. The reason for the excessive noise was that it was my 30th birthday party and my girlfriend organised a surprise party for me. I did not consider inviting the other residents of the block. I would also explain that after I had recovered from the shock.I am writing to apologise for the incident last week when some of my neighbours complained to you. who were all very understanding. She had invited around 20 of my friends to help me celebrate the occasion and perhaps she did not realise how much noise would be made by the travelling disco she had hired. I would also explain that after I had got over the shock. Yours sincerely Dear Mr Jones I am writing to apologise for the incident last week when some of my neighbours complained to you. I am most embarrassed about this. I did invite my immediate neighbours to join the party and offering to play the music less loudly after 11 o’clock. because I am normally a quiet person and I do respect the privacy of my neighbours. because I am normally a quiet person and I do respect the privacy of my neighbours. I did knock on the door of my immediate neighbours to ask if they wanted to come round and offering to turn the music down after 11 o’clock. The reason for the excessive noise was that it was my 30th birthday party and my girlfriend threw a surprise party for me. who were all very understanding. I did not think of inviting the other residents of the block. Yours sincerely More informal letter Dear Mr Jones I am writing to apologise for the incident last week when some of my neighbours complained to you. I have since personally apologised to my neighbours. Once again. Once again. please accept my apologies and rest assured that this will not happen again. because I am normally a quiet person and I do respect the privacy of my neighbours. I am most embarrassed about this. Unfortunately. The reason for the excessive noise was that it was my 30th birthday party and my girlfriend threw a . Unfortunately. please accept my apologies and rest assured that this situation will not be repeated.

Unfortunately. Once again. In this lesson. Once again. who were all very understanding.surprise party for me. She had invited around 20 of my friends to help me celebrate the big day and perhaps she did not realise how much noise would be made by the travelling disco she had hired. I did not consider inviting the other residents of the block. I did invite my immediate neighbours to join the party and offering to play the music less loudly after 11 o’clock. I would also explain that after I had recovered from the shock. I am most embarrassed about this. Yours sincerely Dear Mr Jones I am writing to apologise for the incident last week when some of my neighbours complained to you. I have since personally apologised to my neighbours. please accept my apologies and rest assured that this situation will not be repeated. I talk you through 6 different ways to write informally and then show you an informal letter and analyse the informal language in it. Yours sincerely holiday competition – sample IELTS letter This is the next in my series of sample IELTS letters for general training IELTS. I focus on how to write a letter using informal language. . I have since personally apologised to my neighbours. Unfortunately. I would also explain that after I had got over the shock. I did not think of inviting the other residents of the block. The reason for the excessive noise was that it was my 30th birthday party and my girlfriendorganised a surprise party for me. who were all very understanding. I did knock on the door of my immediate neighbours to ask if they wanted to come round and offering to turn the music down after 11 o’clock. because I am normally a quiet person and I do respect the privacy of my neighbours. She had invited around 20 of my friends to help me celebrate theoccasion and perhaps she did not realise how much noise would be made by the travelling disco she had hired. please accept my apologies and rest assured that this will not happen again.

you should never use short forms. it is generally best to be as personal as possible: It seems like a sensible idea = I think it’s a good idea One thing to do would be = You should try . state what kind of vacation it is. Making the letter more informal Here are some tips on how to make your letters more informal. you should: • • • tell him/her about the competition you won. explain why you would like him/her to go on holiday with you You should understand from this question that you need to make the letter informal as you are writing to a friend and that the key vocabulary you need relates to holidays. Write a letter to ask them to go on holiday with you.The question You won a competition and received a vacation for two as a prize. we normally avoid using first and second person pronouns and tend to use more impersonal language. but you can (and perhaps should) in this type of letter. The general idea is that your more informal writing should look a little like speech: Short forms In more formal academic writing. So I have = I’ve I am = I’m I will = I’ll It is/It has = It’s Pronouns – being personal In more formal/academic writing. In the letter. In more informal letters.

you should avoid very short sentences. you can use some very short sentences – often this works best with direct questions. when we are writing more formally. Here are some phrasal verbs you could use: visit = drop by or come round investigate = look into manage = get by meet/find = come across Vocabulary choice In more formal/academic writing. Be a little careful with this. These words are either very simple general use words or imprecise words: get = more formally “become” or “receive” or “obtain” great = “excellent” really = “extremely” thing = object/activity sort of = “type of” . however.Sentence length and direct questions In more formal/academic writing. however. quite possible to use some idioms and phrasal verbs in less formal letters. we avoid using idioms and phrasal verbs as they are more typical of spoken language. there are some words we normally avoid using. You also need to include longer and more complex sentences as well to show that you variety of grammar. but which you can use in this less formal type of writing. In this type of writing. It is. Here are some possibilities for you to consider: How about it? What do you think? Idioms and phrasal verbs Normally.

you do not need to be so polite. Guess what? I’ve won a holiday for two people in a competition. my prize is a holiday and it is a cruise around the Mediterranean for a fortnight. you need to be careful that it is appropriately polite. It sounds as if it should be great fun. I’d love it if you could come with me. All I had to do to win the competition was write a slogan for a local travel agency. As I said.com/ielts-letters/a-holiday-competition-sample-ieltsletter/#ixzz2LlhImrdk Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Dear Pablo. so just drop me a line if you are free. Typically. when we are polite we use more indirect language. All the best Angela Read more: IELTS letters . however. I do hope that you can come with me.dcielts. I really hope that you are available sometime this summer. as it sounds just your cup of tea and you could always act as an interpreter for me when we get to Spain! I need to book the cruise quite soon. So for example: I would like = I want I would be grateful if you could come = Please come The model letter Dear Pablo. but with friends we are much more direct and can even use imperative forms. My winning submission was “Fly LTC and see the world”.holiday competitionDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www.Direct language and politeness If you are writing a more formal letter. . I’ve got some really exciting news to share with you. The ship is the latest luxury liner and has all sorts of entertainment facilities including a swimming pool. a cinema complex and onboard tennis courts. When you are writing to a friend.

more formally “a wide variety of” be great fun = more formally “very entertaining/enjoyable” I really hope = we almost never use “really” in more formal writing I’d love it = more formally ” I would very much appreciate it if you could” your cup of tea = an idiom meaning “what you enjoy most’ you could always act as an interpreter for me when we get to Spain! = note the exclamation mark which makes this more informal so just drop me a line = another idiom. My winning submission was “Fly LTC and see the world”. I’d love it if you could come with me. This one is a more formal letter as you are writing to someone in authority – the director of your school. As well as giving you a model answer. choose the right vocabulary and make the letter more formal.I’ve got some really exciting news to share with you. as it sounds just your cup of tea and you could always act as an interpreter for me when we get to Spain! I need to book the cruise quite soon. this would be “Please let me know if” Read more: IELTS letters . The ship is the latest luxury liner and has all sorts of entertainment facilities including a swimming pool. in a more formal letter. I really hope that you are available sometime this summer. I do hope that you can come with me. Guess what? I’ve won a holiday for two people in a competition.dcielts. I also give you some advice on how to structure the letter.com/ielts-letters/a-holiday-competition-sample-ieltsletter/#ixzz2LlhVXEnf Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Changing your course – a more formal letter This is the next in my series of IELTS letters. It sounds as if it should be great fun. my prize is a holiday and it is a cruise around the Mediterranean for a fortnight.holiday competitionDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. a cinema complex and onboard tennis courts. so just drop me a line if you are free. All the best Angela Notes I’ve got = I have really = extemely Guess what! = a very short sentence you shouldn’t use in more formal writing I’ve = short form of I have all sorts of = very imprecise language. As I said. . All I had to do to win the competition was write a slogan for a local travel agency.

In this question. In this case: paragraph 1: you need to change course (why you are writing) paragraph 2: try to persuade your college director to let you change course by giving reasons why you want to change course paragraph 3: ask to set up a meeting to discuss the problem (what you want to happen next) Topic vocabulary . This means that: • • your language should be more formal you need to be reasonably polite (it isn’t sensible to be rude about your current course) Structuring your letter It is important that you remember to use paragraphs in your letter. The normal structure is that you start any letter by saying why you are writing and you finish it by saying what you expect to happen next. You should include details about: • • • what course are you doing now why you are not satisfied with that course what course would you like to change to The focus of the letter While you must write about each topic in the question. I would suggest that you should focus on the reasons why you are not satisfied with your current course.Understanding the letter question You are not happy with the course you are doing at college and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the college director requesting to change your course. this does not mean that you need to write the same amount about each topic. but that person is in authority. Think about who you are writing to This is a semi-formal letter as you are writing to someone you know.

Yours sincerely Khaled Abdullah Formal/politeness language Take a look at the language I have highlighted in blue and then read my notes below. I am currently studying on a general English programme and I would like to enrol on an academic IELTS course instead. This being the case. My circumstances are that I require a band 7. The principle reason why I would like to change my course is that I do not believe the general English course is relevant to me because it is intended for students who wish to improve their social English. but this is an urgent priority for me. If it would help. The principle reason why I would like to change my course is that I do not believe the general English course is relevant to me because it is intended for students who wish to improve their social English. My circumstances are that I require a band 7. I am currently studying on a general English programme and I would like to enrol on an academic IELTS course instead. I would be delighted to discuss this with you in person. you should be happy as you should have lots of words to use.0 in order to be accepted on the masters programme at Aston University. I believe that it is essential that I get tuition in academic writing and IELTS skills. Dear Mr Jones I am writing to ask whether it is possible to change my course. It is also good advice to write about what you know about and so I have chosen to make my model letter about studying IELTS. A lot of this language you can borrow for your own letters. Take a look at some of the “education” language I used. I will lose my place on the course and will need to return to my country. I will lose my place on the course and will need to .If you get a question like this about education. Unless I obtain this score by the beginning of the next academic year. Unless I obtain this score by the beginning of the next academic year. Dear Mr Jones I am writing to ask whether it is possible to change my course. I understand that it may be difficult to change my course mid-semester.0 in order to be accepted on the masters programme at Aston University.

I understand that it may be difficult . If it would help. I would be delighted to discuss this with you in person .Another word that you should be careful about using in more formal/polite letters is “must”.Note how in this letter I do not use short forms like “don’t”. but this is an urgent priority for me. Here in a less formal letter I might write “If I don’t get this score” I believe that it is essential .This is a more formal way of saying “To get on” Unless I obtain this score .dcielts. It is probably the case that the course director may not want to change your course. in order to be accepted .this is a standard formula you can use to start most more formal letters: it shows why you are writing I would like to .return to my country. One way to persuade him/her is to say you know that it is a big favour you’re asking.this is a nice phrase you can borrow and use in other formal letters.com/ielts-letters/changing-your-course-a-more-formalletter/#ixzz2Llhiq54S Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives International food – a more informal IELTS letter . It can be a very strong word in English and used wrongly quite rude. This is normal in more formal letters. I understand that it may be difficult to change my course mid-semester.this is a “politeness” phrase”. Here I use “it is essential” instead. Yours sincerely Khaled Abdullah Notes I am writing to .This is a more formal way of saying “I want to do this because” I do not believe . If it would help. This being the case. I believe that it is essential that I get tuition in academic writing and IELTS skills. Be very careful about using “I want” in English as it can be too direct/rude in more formal writing The principle reason why I would like to . I would be delighted to discuss this with you in person.One tip here is to think about the person you are writing to.One word you should try and avoid using too much in more formal writing is “get”. Read more: IELTS letters: change your courseDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www.

what you need to remember is that you only need a few “cooking” words to write the letter – just enough to show that you can write/speak about food in abnormal way. In this lesson. There is no need to give a detailed recipe – IELTS isn’t like that. So I have decided to provide you with a few models to give you an idea of what to expect in GT IELTS. The question Your friend is an expert in international food and is going to publish a book soon. However.Writing a less formal letter can be quite difficult for the simple reason that very few people write informal letters nowadays. so you also need to think about some “book” words such as: .dinner-course-delicacy -cuisine-cooking delicious-tasty-spicy-sour-sweet-savoury recipe-ingredients boil -fry-roast-grill It would be a mistake to forget that you rare writing to a friend who is going to publish a book. dish – meal – lunch. I focus mainly on the topic vocabulary you need and some aspects of less formal writing. The vocabulary This is potentially a nasty question if you’re a non-cooking male like me. No technical language is required. In your letter you should • • • describe a special dish from your country explain what season people prefer to eat it in say why your friend should include this dish in his book You should understand from this question that you need to write a more informal letter as you are writing to a friend. Write a letter to him describing a special dish from your country. Al you need is a selection of these basic cooking words with some food words: 6/7 topic words is plenty.

although I suppose it’s really a winter meal to be eaten in front of a good log fire. I understand from Bill that you’re writing a book on international cuisine. While I suppose the beef is simple enough. [closing] The sample letter Dear Joe It seems like ages since I’ve heard from you.com/ielts-letters/international-food-a-more-informal-ieltsletter/#ixzz2LlhtYXTC Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives . Can I suggest you include a recipe for roast beef and Yorkshire pudding in the UK chapter? It really is the ultimate British dish as it’s not just the meal we traditionally have for Sunday lunch. This does not need to relate 100% to the letter. George Read more: Sample IELTS letter . Examples of the type of phrases you can consider using are: It was great to hear from you again. I hope you don’t get too stressed by the book and that it gets published on time. [opening] I really look forward to meeting up with you soon and don’t forget to give my love to your family.International foodDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. I hope you’ll remember your old friend and send me a copy. It’s so traditional we eat it all year round. Hope to hear from you soon. the Yorkshire pudding is quite something and a real local delicacy and your book wouldn’t be complete without it. then it is normal to open and close your letter with something social. but it’s what most people think of when they think of British cooking. Anyway. When it does come out.dcielts. you just need to show that you are writing to a friend.book – publish – author – chapter/section Being informal – top and tail your letter with news If you’re writing a more informal letter to a friend.

While I suppose the beef is simple enough. the Yorkshire pudding is quite something and a real local delicacy and your book wouldn’t be complete without it.International foodDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. I hope you don’t get too stressed by the book and that it gets published on time. Can I suggest you include a recipe for roast beef and Yorkshire pudding in the UK chapter? It really is the ultimate British dish as it’s not just the meal we traditionally have for Sunday lunch. Anyway. When it does come out. I hope you’ll remember your old friend and send me a copy. Dear Joe It seems like ages since I’ve heard from you. although I suppose it’s really a winter meal to be eaten in front of a good log fire. the Yorkshire pudding is quite something and a real local delicacy and your book wouldn’t be complete without it.hile I am no chef.com/ielts-letters/international-food-a-more-informal-ieltsletter/#ixzz2LlhzMtbX Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Dear Joe It seems like ages since I’ve heard from you. Anyway. you should see that I have used plenty of simple food vocab. Hope to hear from you soon. When it does come out. This is precisely the right sort of language for a lette roy this sort – you really don’t need technical food words. I hope you don’t get too stressed by the book and that it gets published on time. It’s so traditional we eat it all year round.dcielts. but it’s what most people think of when they think of British cooking. I understand from Bill that you’re writing a book on international cuisine. I understand from Bill that you’re writing a book on international cuisine. George Notes It seems like ages since I’ve heard from you: this is a phrase you can repeat from letter to letter Can I suggest you include: this is a semi-polite request that is perfect for a letter of this type it’s not just: you should note I use short form “it’s” all the way throughout the letter I suppose: in a more formal letter you would use something like “In my opinion” . although I suppose it’s really a winter meal to be eaten in front of a good log fire. While I suppose the beef is simple enough. It’s so traditional we eat it all year round. I hope you’ll remember your old friend and send me a copy. but it’s what most people think of when they think of British cooking. Hope to hear from you soon. Can I suggest you include a recipe for roast beef and Yorkshire pudding in the UK chapter? It really is the ultimate British dish as it’s not just the meal we traditionally have for Sunday lunch. George Read more: Sample IELTS letter .

com/ielts-letters/international-food-a-more-informal-ieltsletter/#ixzz2Lli5iCNE Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Listening to directions on a map – compass points This is another listening practice lesson based on a map.is quite something: an excellent idiom that takes this letter up to Band 9 level. then you can reasonably expect that the listening will use points of the compass (North. It means it is something “very special” Anyway.International foodDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. In this case. East and West) in the description. When it does come out: “come out” is a phrasal verb meaning “be published”.dcielts. South. I hope you don’t get too stressed by the book : more Band 9 language. This “Anyway” is excellent letter vocab and you use it just like this to finish off a point and change the subject. the three landmarks are: • • • the lake the river the golf course You may also look for other details that may help you find your way. You should be ready for slightly more advanced compass point phrases such as: . Here you see • • • various labelled buildings roads some trees Reading the map -seeing the compass If you see a compass on the map. You should also note how I use the circumstances of the letter (the book) to make my final paragraph. In it I briefly talk you through problems when you get a map with a compass point and the directions you are given do not follow a path. If you do know any phrasal verbs (verbs in 2 words) they are ideal for informal letters. Read more: Sample IELTS letter . Forewarned is forearmed. Reading the map – looking for landmarks This first time you see a map you should look for major landnarks as these will very likely be used in the description of the map. One suggestion is to identify landmarks and the other is to be ready to listen out for directions such as “to the North”.

Read the questions Listen to the recording and match the letters A.“to the north of” “slightly west of” “n the south west” It is also quite possible if you see a compass that the directions you are given will not be given in the form of a tour – where you need to trace a route – rather the directions will move from one part of the map to another.F marked on the map to these items: .

I think we should keep some of the same facilities – we just need to relocate them a little. This means that you need to listen carefully.• • • • • • A B C D E F Suggested new site for the swimming pool Suggested site for the information office Suggested new site for the cafe Suggested site for the tennis courts Suggested new site for the picnic area Suggested new site for the gift shop Note: you will see that some of these places are already marked on the map.com/ielts-listening/listening-to-directions-on-a-map-compasspoints/#ixzz2LlifxphN Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Answers A Suggested new site for the gift shop B Suggested site for the information office C Suggested site for the tennis courts D Suggested new site for the picnic area E Suggested new site for the swimming pool F Suggested new site for the cafe Transcript So Bryan I’ve had a look at your proposed plan for the park and I think we may need to make some alterations – I’m not convinced that the lay out is quite right. That’s fine.compass points |Dominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www.dcielts. First of all. I do think though that it makes sense to move the gift shop to plot next . I see you have the car park to the west of the site a little way from the main entrance to the north. The “key word” in the question is not so much “swimming pool” as “new” Listen See the answers and read the transcript Read more: Listening to directions on a map . Let me talk you through how I would change things around.

This one looks at a question relating to the cinema. but I would move it a little to the north and west further away from the river (E). Can I also suggest some more facilities? Firstly. I’m not a sure a swimming pool is enough and the golf course is really off site. What else? Ah yes. I analyse the question for you. The picnic area.compass points |Dominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. It’s currently a little bit in the middle of nowhere.dcielts. Tennis is a growing sport and I’d say a perfect spot for some tennis courts would be to the south east of the site on the bank of the river (C)` Read more: Listening to directions on a map . how about an information office? My feeling is that this probably is best sited fairly near the main entrance – people will then to know what they can find when they enter the park. Thinking about the question In recent years.com/ielts-listening/listening-to-directions-on-a-map-compasspoints/#ixzz2LliXNOmt Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives Cinema – sample IELTS essay This is the next in my series of model IELTS essays. Wouldn’t it be better placed next to the trees where the swimming pool currently is (D)? It would be much more scenic if it people could picnic among the trees. people watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this? Should the government give financial support to local cinema to produce local films? . There may be problems with having the swimming pool right next to the river – I can foresee all sorts of health and safety issues there. That way everyone should be able to find it. That way all the paying customers will see the shop – as it is I think many may just not see it down that road on the east side. show you a possible structure to answer the essay and give you some vocabulary help and ideas for the essay.to the main entrance – opposite where the café is now and just before the lake (A). Next up. It makes sense to keep it in the same neighbourhood. I also think that we should place the cafe next to the new site for the swimming pool right at the end of the path (F) – it would make a good place for people to sit and relax after a long walk. My idea is that we put it in the centre of the park more or less opposite the lake (B). Also most parks nowadays aren’t complete with some sports facilities.

The first part of the question is perhaps the harder half as it asks you to give reasons why “international films’ have become so popular. Explain why/not. It is important here that you try and explain the reason for your answer. If you believe governments should provide support you can argue: • • • • international films threaten local culture they offer less choice to the viewer it’s the duty of governments to protect national industries local films are higher quality than mass-produced Indian/US films If you want to argue that the government should not intervene. Some possible ideas for you are: • • • • • • a new global culture the internet age desire to see big budget films the power of Hollywood/Bollywood the influence of American TV the spread of English as a world language The second part of the question is a “Yes/No/Maybe” question. (This is a chance to use an “If clause” which is good for your grammar) . you can say: • • • there is still a place for local films on tv and in smaller cinemas the new global culture is positive people choose what they want to watch – it’s not the job of the government to interfere Structure the essay The logical approach here is to deal with the two questions in the question in separate paragraphs.This is a tricky double question. It is very important that you answer both halves of this question because if you don’t you will be penalised for bad Task Response. So a possible structure might look like: Intro Note both parts of the task and show whether you believe the government should provide assistance Para 1 Explain the reason why international cinema is more popular nowadays. (This is maybe a complex paragraph to write with the reasoning) Para 2 Say whether the government should provide financial assistance.

I have written 2 paragraphs on why international films have become more .Conclusion Summarise the main idea in para 1 about why international cinema is popular and the main idea in para 2 about what the government should do. “cause and effect” and possibly “globalisation”. Here are a few ideas for you: Finance • • • • • provide financial support/support financially/financial backing/back financially subsidise/give subsidies to bankroll give a tax incentive budget Globalisation • • • the global village global culture the internet age Film and cinema • • • • • • • • produce a film film studio blockbuster art house film special effects the audience the cinema-going public film buffs A sample essay Note that this model essay is slightly long at 317 words and it is 5 rather than 4 paragraphs. the main area of vocabulary for this essay is the cinema but you should also think about words and phrases for “finance”. Thinking vocabulary Clearly.

the main reasons for the expansion of international films are a new globalised world culture caused by the internet and the financial power of a few film studios in Hollywood and Bollywood. The two great centres of world cinema. Perhaps the principal reason for the popularity of foreign made films is the globalisation of culture in the internet age. In this essay. they expect to see films that reflect that international culture and for them a Hollywood blockbuster is much “cooler” than a serious film in their own language.popular to help you with language and ideas. In the past. In conclusion. Now in the era of Youtube. young people grow up with easy access to an international culture and so when they go to the cinema.dcielts. It may be sensible in the exam to concentrate on a 4 paragraph structure as I suggest above. Bollywood and Hollywood. In recent years.sample IELTS essay |Dominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www. this would not only help preserve national culture. I will discuss why this is the case and why I believe national governments ought to support home grown cinema financially. In contrast. locally produced films often have much smaller budgets are sometimes therefore less attractive to the mass market. but would also create more choice for the public as global films offer little variety. people watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this? Should the government give financial support to local cinema to produce local films? It is unquestionably the case that there is a growing trend for people to watch foreign films in preference to films made in their home country.com/ielts-essays/cinema-sample-ielts-essay/#ixzz2Llo1wYUp Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives . Read more: Cinema . We would have more choice if the governments subsidised local films. I believe that this globalisation of culture is not entirely positive and governments should take action to promote local films. children growing up only had access to the culture and traditions of their own country and so preferred to watch films about their own land. If countries had their own film industries which could compete with the international studios. A second reason why internationally produced films tend to dominate the domestic market is financial. have studios with budgets of billions of dollars which can make films with exciting special effects and high production values. Personally.

I have chosen to use a “for and against” type structure and say that it is partly but not completely true. Many people believe that this is due to modern lifestyles because parents spend more and more time at work and have less time to supervise their children. It does help to use a variety of different words and structures. I also give you some help with the language of cause and effect and impersonal essay vocabulary language. You can find some variations in my lesson on cause and effect vocabulary. then you could have 2/3 content paragraphs explaining your arguments. The language of cause and effect To essay this essay. See the cause and effect language Impersonal language If you are trying to make your essays more academic. To what extent do you believe this is true? This is an essay question that can be dealt with in a variety of ways. This is some of the most important language you can learn for IELTS essays. See the impersonal vocabulary The essay to download . If you decide the answer is “completely yes” or “completely no”. The question and essay structure In many countries there has been an increase in social problems involving teenagers in recent years.Teenagers – sample IELTS essay This is the next in my series of sample IELTS essays. you need to discuss cause and effect. it is also a good idea to try and use some impersonal language to give opinions. You are probably ring to use this language at the beginning of your sentences to help structure your writing. You can find some examples of this in my lesson on impersonal essay vocabulary. The benefit of this is that you normally had more to say. In addition to the essay to download. This one is on the theme of the family and social problems caused by teenagers.

You then summarise your view about which side you .:-)Scientists are still uncertain about the exact causeof global warming. The best time to use this approach is when you yourself can see merit in both sides of the argument – it is not the case that this approach is restricted to “Discussion” essays: it is quite possible to use it in “Argument” essays.com/blog/sample-ielts-essay-teenagers/#ixzz2LloEgkJg Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives There are several reasonswhy this has become an increasingly serious problem.Teenagers .:-)A better standard of teaching at primary school level has resultedin a major drop in illiteracy. This should be clear at all stages of the essay. you simply have to express clear opinions.To do this.:-)Becauseof the amount of fossil fuel we use. Essay structure and coherence One key to writing a balanced essay is to make sure that the structure is coherent.:-)The high salaries available in more advanced economies has causedmany people to choose to work abroad for a few years. A common problem is that one part of the essay does not fit into the main structure. This is one form of essay you should be prepared to write. One way of doing this is to look at both sides of the argument and consider their merits in turn – this is a balanced essay.:-)Building more roads has ledto more congestion not less. you need to consider: • • • • planning the whole essay before you start writing linking the different parts of the essay together writing the essay as part of a process – go back and read what have just written before you write the next bit concentrating on the intro/topic sentences and the conclusion The basic approach The basic approach is quite simple: in each topic paragraph you consider a different/opposing point of view. This means that all the parts of the essay should fit together as a whole. The idea is to make sure that anyone reading the essay understands that it is looking at both sides of the issue.:-) Writing balanced essays This lesson talks you through an approach to writing balanced essays in IELTS.sample IELTS essay (6256) Read more: Teenagers .dcielts.:-)The rate of unemployment has fallen in some countries thanksto an increase in demand in the labour market.:-)The rate of unemployment has risen in some sectors of the economy dueto the negative effects of globalisation. pollution will always be a problem. It is certainly not the case that you have to express strong opinions in essays.:-)Pollution will always be a problem becausewe use too much fossil fuel.sample IELTS essay |Dominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www.

While this is an interesting proposal and has some merit. it is almost certainly the best advice not to try and discuss the two points of view at the same time in one paragraph. my own view is that it would infringe their rights.prefer in the conclusion. In this form of essay. This means examiner/reader should understand from the introduction your position and how essay will be structured. In this essay. There are grounds to argue that it would benefit society and young people themselves if teenagers were made to do unpaid work in the community. you should see the difference between these two approaches. While there are grounds to argue that it would benefit society and young people themselves if teenagers were made to do unpaid work in the community. In an exam essay. I shall examine the merits of both sides of the argument and state my own opinion. I believe it is better because it is simply clearer. Main body In the main body. Neutral approach In this approach. Introduction The goal here is to state clearly that the essay is going to take a balanced position and/or look at both sides of the issue. it can equally be argued that this would be an infringement of their rights. Balanced approach This is the approach I generally prefer as you clearly identify your position on one side of the argument or the other. If you do this it is quite likely that the “argument” becomes confused and your main goal is clarity. you merely state that both sides have merit and say you will look at both sides of the case. (the balanced approach) and/or say you will look at both sides (the more neutral approach) In the two example below. there are two ideas to focus on: 1. This allows you to find a natural link between your final content paragraph and the conclusion – they should be saying almost the same thing. In practice this means that in the intro you should try to: • • • • identify both sides of the argument show that there is merit on both sides identify which side you favour. the paragraphs should balance each other . it is conventional to look at the side you disagree with first.

there is also the real danger that young people would be exploited in the workplace. including the teenage years. then many public services would improve. A second argument is that teenagers would mature as individuals if they went out to work. In the example below. This is because it is important to maintain a constant position throughout the essay -something that can often go wrong with balanced essays. The main philosophy behind this movement is that childhood. It is certainly true that there is a shortage of labour in many parts of the public sector and if young people worked. For example. not work. Despite these arguments.2. If. there has been a global movement to stop the practice of child labour. it would be quite possible for teenagers to do part-time jobs in the health such as working as hospital porters. One argument in favour of making teenagers to do voluntary work in the community is that it would benefit society. particularly if they did not earn a salary. The examiner/reader should immediately understand how the paragraph fits into the structure of the essay. they were given real life tasks to do. they would learn important life skills such as responsibility. many teenagers have little sense of social responsibility and spend much of their free time plying basketball or computer games. A second tip is that in the process of writing the content paragraphs of . Again. Currently. however. Linking back to the introduction A second skill is to make sure that your topic paragraphs refer back to the position in the introduction. especially if it was in the voluntary sector. This means that you should really have a clear idea of your whole essay before you write the introduction. it should be easy to see (even without the highlighting) how the following paragraphs balance each other and reflect each others’ language. teamwork and leadership. should be a time for education and growth. there is an equally strong case to be made that it would be morally wrong to force teenagers to go out to work. This would have the effect of ensuring patients got better care and would allow trained professionals to concentrate on more skilled tasks – something that would benefit society as a whole. A simple way of doing this is to use similar introductory language in each paragraph. This can be explained by the fact that in recent years. a simple to achieve this is to make sure that the language and ideas of the first\topic sentences is reflected in the introduction. the paragraphs should link back to position in the introduction Balancing your paragraphs The key to making sure your paragraphs balance each other is to use your topic/first sentences reflect each other. It would not just send the wrong message out if teenagers were made to do voluntary work. These skills would almost certainly benefit them in their later careers.

If you look at the examples below. You may also consider referring back to some of the details of your argument to emphasise that you are able to support your case with reasons and examples. I shall examine the merits of both sides of the argument. Again. In this essay. For example. I shall examine the merits of both sides of the argument One argument in favour of making teenagers to do voluntary work in the community is that it would benefit society. . there is an equally strong case to be made that it would be morally wrong to force teenagers to go out to work. it would be quite possible for teenagers to do part-time jobs in the health such as working as hospital porters. This would have the effect of ensuring patients got better care and would allow trained professionals to concentrate on more skilled tasks – something that would benefit society as a whole. it can equally be argued that this would be an infringement of their rights. A second argument is that teenagers would mature as individuals if they went out to work. then many public services would improve. it greatly helps if you remember to go back and re-read the essay before you write the conclusion. it can equally be argued that this would be an infringement of their rights. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this proposal? While there are grounds to argue that it would benefit society and young people themselves if teenagers were made to do unpaid work in the community. One argument in favour of making teenagers to do voluntary work in the community is that it would benefit society. particularly if they did not earn a salary The conclusion The same ideas apply to the conclusion: the language and ideas of the intro and the first/topic sentences should be reflected here too.your essay you should refer back to the introduction to borrow language and ideas from there. you should see how the first sentence of each paragraph links clearly back to the introduction. While there are grounds to argue that it would benefit society and young people themselves if teenagers were made to do unpaid work in the community. Do that and the the essay should be coherent. In this essay. Some people think that teenagers should do unpaid work to help society because this will help them to be better individuals and also improve the society as a whole. especially if it was in the voluntary sector. Despite these arguments. It is certainly true that there is a shortage of labour in many parts of the public sector and if young people worked.

Despite these arguments. there is also the real danger that young people would be exploited in the workplace. many teenagers have little sense of social responsibility and spend much of their free time plying basketball or computer games. The main philosophy behind this movement is thatchildhood. Currently. especially if it was in the voluntary sector. It would not just send the wrong message out if teenagers were made to do voluntary work. This is reinforced by belief in the principle that childhood is a time for education and fear of the danger of exploitation. I believe that while there are real merits on both sides of the argument. particularly if they did not earn a salary. These skills would almost certainly benefit them in their later careers. including the teenage years. should be a time for education and growth. teamwork and leadership. there is an equally strong case to be made that it would be morally wrong to force teenagers to go out to work. the moral case againstforcing young people to work slightly outweighs any benefit to society or to teenagers as individuals. there has been a global movement to stop the practice of child labour.an introductionDominic Cole's IELTS and Beyond http://www.dcielts. If. however. Read more: Balanced essays for IELTS . not work. In conclusion.A second argument is that teenagers would mature as individuals if they went out to work. This can be explained by the fact that in recent years.com/ielts-essays/writing-balanced-essays/#ixzz2Lm0JvRxq Under Creative Commons License: Attribution Non-Commercial No Derivatives . they were given real life tasks to do. they would learn important life skills such as responsibility.

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