Conor Chambers Ms. Caruso English 1102 March 20, 2013 CAP Letter Memo: This letter is written to deans of different universities to try to get them to side with my cause of banning food eating competitions on their campuses. Hopefully the introduction will grab the reader’s attention and want them to continue reading until the end. As the letter is being read, the reader should try to make connections, for example if they have experienced a time where they partook in a food eating competition and they felt sick afterwards. In addition, before reading this, they should understand how dangerous food eating competitions can be, as proven with deaths caused by them. Article responded to: Protesting Nathan's Hot Dog Eating Contest URL: http://www.psychologytoday.com/blog/comfort-cravings/201007/protesting-nathans-hotdog-eating-contest Dear Sir or Madam, A 23 year old Taiwan student died participating in a steamed-bun eating contest (partysugar). Jennifer Strange participated in a water drinking contest and died from water intoxication (Saltzman). Both of these examples are food eating competitions that have led to horrible deaths. I beg you not to allow food competitions at your university to protect the lives of your students. They are dangerous, and I fear that if you allow food eating competitions at your campus, your student participants would overeat and possibly die. At the least, this would promote and increase obesity. With your help we can lower the popularity of food eating contests and save lives.
Comment [AM3]: an Comment [AM2]: Is there any other people who have died from overeating? Comment [AM1]: Start on the next page
Chen was participating in his school’s annual food eating competition. The 23 year old Taiwan student started choking while eating a steamed bun. Little did he know that the food eating contest he was apart of would be the last thing he ever did. This death could have been prevented if his school outlawed food eating competitions (Wang). Is a Nintendo Wii so amazing that one should risk their life to obtain one? Jennifer Strange took this risk on a radio station and entered a water drinking/ urine holding contest called “Hold Your Wee for a Wii”. Unfortunately, she lost the contest, but even more unfortunate she died the next day from haven drink too much water. This fatal process is known as water intoxication. Competitive eaters train by drinking large quantities of water, and each time this occurs there is a chance that water intoxication could happen. Without food eating competitions, no one would have to drink large amounts of water and threaten their lives just to win a Wii (Saltzman). Although food eating competitor deaths are rare, they can happen, especially if you’re a nonprofessional trying dumb new things in school. I remember a few years ago my sister and I were having a food eating competition in Cici’s Pizza. The competition was to see who could eat the most pizza. I won, but we both felt like losers after gorging our stomachs with pizza. Outside, right before getting into the car and going home, my sister vomited all of her supper out due to the sickness she felt from eating too much. Luckily she survived and everything was fine, unlike Chen choking and vomiting to death. Major League Eating has been trying to get competitive eating into the Olympics. Thankfully they have continually been denied, but if it were to get accepted, then students might aspire to become a competitive eater in the Olympics (Albers). A few students might make it to become professional competitive eaters, but most of the student participants would risk their
Comment [AM5]: Nice incorporation of a personal experience, although I feel that this sentence is a bit redundant, you stated several times so far about Chen dying. Comment [AM4]: try and combine these two sentences, the first is choppy
lives shoveling food down their throats in hopes of expanding their bellies. In the case that the students don’t die and their stomachs don’t burst, they will most likely become obese and have unhealthy eating habits for the rest of their lives. We as schools, we as a nation, and we as individuals need to protect the lives of students and make sure food eating competitions will not take place in schools. Please fight against the idea of food eating competitions being approved as an Olympic sport, and please restrict schools from having any type of food eating competitions whether big or small. With your help, lives will be saved and obesity won’t rise.
Comment [AM6]: Interesting. They join because they want to have enlarged bellies? Explain this concept.
Comment [AM7]: Is there any proof of this? I knew a guy that participates in many hotdog competitions and he is way below obesity.
Comment [AM8]: How could this be accomplished? What steps would be necessary to achieve? Comment [AM9]: Strong sentence, but if you are writing to the dean I would not think he would care about the Olympics. Stay focused on your objective of getting food competitions banned from schools. Comment [AM10]: Not sure about this one, everyday Americans are finding new ways of how to be fatter and lazier than ever before. Comment [AM11]: Fixed that for you
Sincerely yours, Conor Chambers
Albers, Susan, Psy.D. "Protesting Nathan's Hot Dog Eating Contest." Confort Cravings. Psychology Today, 3 July 2010. 12 March 2013. <http://www.psychologytoday.com/blog/comfort-cravings/201007/protesting-nathanshot-dog-eating-contest>. partysugar. “Student Dies in Eating Competition.” Popsugar. 27 October 2008. 19 March 2013. <http://www.yumsugar.com/Student-Dies-Eating-Competition-2426275>. Saltzman, Sammy Rose. “Jennifer Strange's Family Awarded $16.5 Million in "Wee for Wii" Contest Death.” CBS News. 30 October 2009. 19 March 2013. <http://www.cbsnews.com/8301-504083_162-5460584-504083.html>. Wang, Flora. "Student dies during steamed bun eating contest at university." Taipei Times. 24 October 2008. 19 March 2013. <http://www.taipeitimes.com/News/taiwan/archives/2008/10/24/2003426758>.
More Research The purpose of this paper is to inform my peers, teacher, and the universities about the dangers behind food eating competitions. Also, it is to try to limit the amount of activity of food eating competitions taking place at universities. To fulfill the purpose of this paper, I’ll need to research the dead Taiwan student, Jennifer Strange, food eating competitions, the likeness that something going wrong while partaking in a food eating competition, death caused by eating or drinking too much, and possibly more. My first source came as a protest against the Nathan’s Hot Dog Eating Contest. For my intended audience, their interest is in food competitions; rather they approve or disapprove of them in schools. Hopefully they will gravitate toward my arguments against having food eating competitions in school. In order to captivate the audience, I need to open up their eyes and inform them of tragedies coming from food competitions. Also I need to keep them interested in my paper by staying on topic, and making the paper flow smoothly. For the unintended audience members, rather they agree with me or not, hopefully they can at least see where I’m coming from in the letter. Maybe it might change the minds of a few, and entertain them enough to want to read the whole thing. I have looked at examples for this topic, and I plan to use a few in my paper. I guess I need to know what colleges will read and won’t read. There could be a chance some colleges would assume my letter is junk mail and not even take the time to read it. For the better good and health of their students, I’d like to think that most colleges would take the time to read a short letter.