Multi-paragraph Review

Review for December 3, 2013

Introductions
Hook (introduces topic) background Information (teaching the reader) Thesis Statement
Precise Claim (Topic + Verb + Opinion) Evidence List (Subtopic A, Subtopic B, & Subtopic C)

Grammar, Spelling, Punctuation

Whats Wrong with this Introduction?

Due to the U.S. Government Shutdown, many Federal workers are not being paid in the non-existence of the Federal Budget. The Federal government taxes, commonly known as the fiscal Federal budget, must be passed for the fiscal year of Oct. 1 (2013)- Sep. 30 (2014). The U.S. Government Shutdown are having workers losing out on their pay because of the fiscal federal budget that includes the ACA, House of Representatives, and the Senate.

How do we fix this?

In the article Teen Binge Drinking , the real American is having problems with drinking and doing drugs. Teens nowadays like to do it. They do it because some of their parents is okay with it.

Grammar?
Why did the U.S Government shutdown in October 2013? Theyre several reasons why the U.S Government shutdown in October 2013. One reason was because the congress won't pass the fiscal federal budget.Second reason is because both republican controlled and democrat controlled had disagreements on the budget. And the last reason is because the HRs stalling.

Oh! And about your Empower3000...

I received a 100% on my empower due to the fact that I understood what I was reading and I read questions carefully. What I dont understand is why we have to explain our percentages that we got on each empower, like how much can I say about one percentage for 28 empowers?!

Oh! And about your Empower3000...

1. Tracking your scores (Reading level goal: 1380) 2. Name of the author and title of the article 3. Summary of questions you missed
a. What was the question and why did you answer incorrectly b. If none were missed, what reading strategies did you use to get them correct.

4. What can you do better in the future. (meta)

Body Paragraphs
Topic Sentence Big Idea (Subtopic) Tell me more (supporting facts) Tell me more (Details from source)

Fix this...
The warning signs of teen binge drinking are demographics.Such as what gender,what race, and their education.also what plays a role in teen drinking is their lifestyles.

Conclusions
1. Synthesize the Thesis Statement
a. Thesis: Binge drinking is a problem among teens because of a lack of emotional stability, availability of alcohol, and a lack of adult guidance. b. Synthesized: Immature teens, easy access to alcohol, and absent parents caused a teen binge drinking to become a problem.

2. So What? Whats next?