Lesson 11: Rewrites

Duration of lesson: 60 minutes
Lesson objective: Plan, draft and publish imaginative, informative and persuasive texts,
choosing and experimenting with text structures, language features, images and digital
resources appropriate to purpose and audience(ACELY1714)
Classroom organisation: Individual work
Resources: pencil, paper, computers. Lesson adapted from http://www.project-text.eu/steps-
to-write-a-short-story/ , punctuation website activity/game, retrieved from scootle via
http://www.bbc.co.uk/bitesize/ks2/english/spelling_grammar/punctuation/play/, back up
paper punctuation activity: punctuation worksheet 4, retrieve from
Learning experiences:
1. At the start of the lesson explain to students that they’ll have the opportunity to test their
punctuation skills via a website game. This activity will assist you to weed out any
incorrect punctuation habits. It will also add to the cohesiveness of your stories and help
you to achieve a better mark on the criteria.
2. Direct students to type in the web address: game
http://www.bbc.co.uk/bitesize/ks2/english/spelling_grammar/punctuation/play/ and follow
the instruction.
 Read sentence
 Choose the correct punctuation that is missing from the sentence
 Then using the mouse, move the hose left or right to the spot where you think the
punctuation is supposed to be
 Then press the left mouse button to shoot the punctuation mark out of the hose and
onto the sentence
3. Once students have completed the computer punctuation activity explain that if they have
finished their rough draft they can start on their rewrites.
4. This is where you read over what you have written as if it is not work and fix any mistakes
you see.
5. Once done have at least 2 other people read your story and make marks where they find
grammatical mistakes
6. Remind them of the other features that help to tell the story and paint a picture in the
reader’s mind e.g. photos- using their photos saved onto a USB brought from home
7. Model how to insert photos, adjusting size, use spell check, change the font etc. in a word
document, to help students with the finishing touches.
8. Encourage students to bring in a USB that has photos of them/events so that they can insert
these images into their stories to accompany their text as they type them up.
9. Notify students that this will be another element that they’ll be marked, so make sure you
put in an effort and be creative with the styling of your images, just as Lincoln Hall did in
Alive in the death zone.
8. Have students move their I.D higher up the Mt Everest