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Chloe Zaharko

Advanced Writing in the Disciplines

Professor Enos
A Closer look: Why Medical Journals arent the only Cats Pajamas
In the realm of psychology, methods of communication are plentiful and vary not only in
style, but framework as well. This analysis of a research article from a popular news website on
Parkinsons disease is a written example of what doctors and individuals read every day. The
article entitled, Myth about Parkinsons diseases debunked shares some of the latest research
findings on the disease, conducted at the University of Copenhagen. The greater public, who
enjoy keeping up with current research, often utilize websites such as Science Daily. These
websites and other formative outlets, generally feature informational research based articles, and
can be found online or in print. Employing such resources has paved the way for progressive
scientific news to be published and understood by those unable to read the otherwise thick
technical research. For an article to be effective it must be informative and concisely explain to
the reader a few questions. (1) What is going on in the field? (2) What the study was about? (3)
What the implications are? (4) Why is it important? The text in these types of articles is fairly
simple and easy to understand for people who have little background on the subject. The beauty
of articles that elaborate on current research is that a common ground is created, where experts in
the field of psychology, and others interested are able to stay in the know. Although the intended
usage of the article may vary depending on the reader, the educational origin is the same.
Articles outlining research, intended mainly for public consumption could be relevant for
any number of topics where research operates. Myth about Parkinsons diseases debunked in
particular applies to both the psychology and medical discourse communities. This makes it
exceptionally different from psychological medical journals, due to the fact that a neutral reader

would not comprehend journals vernacular. Psychological medical journals capitalize on dense
information. Very little time is spent introducing topics in a medical journal, likely because their
readers already have a comprehensive understanding. Where as, The defining symptoms of
Parkinson's disease are slow movements, muscular stiffness and shaking, is one of the first
sentences in this article. The inclusion of this information is to break down main concepts and
clarify readers who are not already aware. As these medical and psychological communities
overlap regularly, it makes sense that it is applicable to both. The intended audiences of this text
are, individuals interested in current field research but are unable, or unwilling to read through
thick psychological data themselves.
Although potential readers of this article could be any variety of individuals, it caters to
those involved or interested in psychology, feelings, attitudes, and mindsets etc. An example of
an individual who would read an article like Myth about Parkinsons diseases debunked would
be a science teacher fascinated by psychology who reads through the morning paper everyday to
stay updated. The audience of this article is probably interested in psychology but does not read
in depth research. The main reasoning for this is that, if said individual required the raw data in
its original form; they would have sought it out. Specifically, this article would spark the interest
of somebody with a family member or friend affected by Parkinsons disease. Another example
would be a student who needs to gain a greater understanding of a psychological journal for
class. As medical professionals, psychologists take pride in their work. A psychologists
responsibilities could include working in the lab, seeing patients in an office or clinical setting,
or conducting research. As the nature of their work is time consuming, many psychologists may
also wish to read something more straightforward at the end of a long day, as opposed to a
psychological journal. Thus, reading an article like Myth about Parkinsons diseases debunked,

omits the daunting task of interpreting a medical journal. This document interprets the data and
provides an abridged analysis of the research. The reader of this article expects to be informed of
the latest research with a degree of clarity. As the audience of this article may or may not be a
member of the psychology community, it is this type of work that bridges the psychology
community to the general public.
Myth about Parkinsons diseases debunked and similar articles, are used as a tool to
help the community at large gain an understanding of what research is being done in the field.
The design and organization help the reader to recognize current research by employing an easy
to read style, while getting to the point sans technical jargon. we can now use advanced
computer simulations to challenge the existing [Parkinsons] paradigm and put forward a
different theory about what actually takes place in the brain when the dopamine cells gradually
die (Myth about Parkinson's, n.d.). The overall presentation of this text is extremely
conducive to the goal of the document. These types of articles are laid out in an organized
manner. The title is characteristically bolded with the date, the source of information, and short
summary. Following a page break or other distinction, the article then begins. The meat of the
article could be organized in many ways. In most cases the topic is introduced and the reader is
given some background. Then they say where the research was conducted, a credible source, and
explain why this is important and interesting. For example, The new research findings may pave
the way for earlier diagnosis of Parkinson's disease. Ending statements like the one above are
found in closing paragraphs, and help the reader understand the value of said research.
Depending on the article, subheadings may be used to organize the information into sections by
subcategory. In some cases photographs may be utilized to give the reader a visual of what is
going on and enhance their understanding. One example of this would be brain scans, which are

often used. Overall there are many ways in which the organization and design contribute to the
reader successfully grasping the content of the article.
The persona of educational articles in the psychology field, emanate a professional and
slightly scientific tone. When the elements of documents like this are examined at a sentence
level, it could be said that the tone of the article is formal and technical. Authors of this type of
writing make use of descriptive language. While putting a strong emphasis on the terms and their
explanations at a base level, this writing is very concise. Dopamine is an important
neurotransmitter which affects physical and psychological functions such as motor control,
learning and memory (Myth about Parkinson's, n.d.). This excerpt from the third paragraph of
the article informs or reminds the reader why this neurotransmitter is important, which is crucial
in understanding the meaning of the article. The diction of this passage demonstrates concise and
informative writing. This type of writing is significant as it provides the reader with key
information that they will need to know in order to fully grasp the remainder of the article.
Myth about Parkinsons diseases debunked is a summation of a research study, that
demonstrates the practicality and convenience of scientific articles by creating an easy to read
platform for its readers. The author of this article did a great job conveying the findings of
research faculty of health and medical sciences at the University of Copenhagen. The
information obtained from this article is dually valuable for doctors, and common people.
Although medical professionals in the field and standard individuals may have different uses for
articles like this, the central ideation is not lost. If articles and similar literature in the field were
not utilized, it would be far more difficult for advancements in psychology and medicine to be
made. As seen in this article, this type of writing style encompasses a plethora of remarkable
psychological information and transforms it into a document that can be utilized by more than

just medical professionals. Essentially meaning that although medical journals provide highly
regarded and valuable information, scholarly articles based on empirical research also hold an
integral place in society.

Works Cited
University of Copenhagen The Faculty of Health and Medical Sciences. (2014, September 16).
Myth about Parkinson's disease debunked. ScienceDaily. Retrieved September 16, 2014

Response Letter
Dear Reviewers,
I would like to start out by thanking Professor Enos and Devika Sachdev for taking the
time out to read and review my paper. All of the helpful comments and suggestions were a big
help and were greatly appreciated. Devika suggested that I change my introduction a little bit to
make it sound less disconnected. I did end up changing a lot of my introduction to make it sound
more together and cohesive. I also added in some more information about how the type of article
I used was different from a medical journal, and why this is significant.
In the second and third paragraphs on the second page, a lot of the information I feel that
I have previously explained it in my paper, or that it would not have made a great deal of sense
to add in. I feel like it is great that the author mentions the use of photographs but I feel like
more can be said about that. What types of photographs? Why would they use certain types of
photographs? How are photographs in psychological articles and medical journals different from
other subject areas? I feel that these types of questions are not pertinent to the developing
essay question.
As for the strategies and suggestions from Professor Enos, I feel that they provided some
good feedback. After reading the document, I realized that I needed to make a title, and make my
thesis more established. I also added in some more evidence and explained my examples more.
In addition to this, I also reorganized a few paragraphs to make them flow more freely, and
added in some more analysis of the audience. I generally have trouble organizing papers in a way
that the reader can understand comprehensively, so I tried my best to change it so others wont be
confused. I also recognize that I use commas where I should not have, so I also tried to
reformulate some of the grammar in my sentences to make it proper.
Thank you again!
~Chloe Zaharko