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ClarenceNishihara,chairpersonof
transportation.

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Problemswithupcomingtransportation
projectsandfutureproblemsthatmay
happen

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ClarenceNishihara

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ClarenceNishiharaaboutthefutureproblemsthatmayhappenattheharboraboutthestrikeandwith
theJonesAct.Alsoabouttryingtoavoidanytroublesontheroadduringtherailroadproject.

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1)ITWAS10YEARSAGOANDIWASNTINOFFICE10YEARSAGOSOIWASMORE
LIKEPEOPLELIKEYOURSELVES.WHOWONDEREDHEY,WHERESTHETOILET
PAPER,WHERESTHEGOODSANDALLTHATSTUFF.SOUMMYGUESSISTHAT
THEGOVERNMENTWILLNOTSTEPINONALABORDISPUTE,ITSALABOR
DISPUTE.SOMORETHANLIKELYALLTHEGOVERNORCANDOISENCOURAGE
THEPARTIESTOMEETANDSETTLEWHATEVERTHECOUNTRIESDISPUTEIS.BUT
ALOTOFTIMESBECAUSEITSATTHEDOCSITINCLUDESNOTONLYUNIONS
HERE,INCLUDESTHEUNIONSONTHEWESTCOASTANDSOMETIMESTHE
DECISIONSAREMADENOTHERE,BUTMADEONTHEWESTCOAST.SOUNTIL
THEYSETTLETHOSETHINGSWELLBEALLHAVETOSUDERTHROUGH.SO
THATSALWAYSTHECONCERNIFTHEREISADOCKSTRIKE.

2)YOUKNOWWEREUNDERTHEJONESACTFOROURSHIPPING.ANDITWAS

SUPPOSEDLYTOPROTECTOURDOMESTICSHIPPINGINDUSTRYBUTYOU
KNOWWEGOTALOTOFCARGOTHATCOMESFROMOVERSEASANDTHEYARE
NOTOBLIGATEDBYTHEJONESACT.SOMEOFTHECREWSHIPSTHATCOME
AREFOREIGNORFOREIGNFLAGSHIPS.THEYRELISTEDWITHANOTHER
COUNTRY,INSOMECASESITMIGHTBEWITHANOTHERCOUNTRY,INSOME
CASESITMIGHTBEWITHANOTHERCOUNTRYYOUMIGHTNEVERHEARDOF
YOUKNOW.ANDSOTHEJONESACTWILLNOTALLOWTHEMTODOITUNLESS
THEYWEREAUSCARRIERANDITWASKINDOFPROTECTIVETHATTHEUSUH
SHIPPINGINDUSTRY.BUTTHEREHASBEENSOMECONCERNSTHATTHEJONES
ACTMAYBEHURTINGUS,ESPECIALLYSINCEWEREANISLANDSTATEAND
MAYBEIFWEDIDNTHAVEIT,ITCOULDMAKESOMETHINGSEASIERFORUSTO
GETSHIPPERSWHOWANTTOWORKINHAWAIIANDSHIPPINGTHINGSTOUS.
SORIGHTNOWTHEREISSEVERALBILLS.ITHINKONEOFTHEMTALKSABOUT
THEJONESACT,IDONTKNOWEXACTLYTHEBILLNUMBERBUTONECALLS
FORITSABOLISHMENTOFTHEJONESACT.LIKEASFARASITRELATESTO
HAWAII.BUTIMNOTSUREALLTHEDETAILSOFITBECAUSEWHENTHEBILL,
WHENITDOESCOMEOUT*COUGH*EXCUSEME.ANDITGETSDEBATEDINTHE
LEGISLATURETHENITGETSMOREDETAILSABOUTWHATDOESITMEAN,WHEN
THEPROS,WHATTHECONSAREABOUT.ANDITHINKITSPROBABLYTHEPLACE
WHEREWHETHER
YOUNOTSOSUREIFITSAGOODTHINGORBADTHINGISTO
FOLLOWTHEHEARINGSTHATGOONABOUTTHATBILL.

3)
WELLUMTHESTATEISWORKINGWITHHEARTTHE____AUTHORITYRAPID(?)
TRANSIT,THERAIL.THEYREWORKINGTOGETHERWITHTHEMANDLOOKINGAT
SOMEOFTHEPROJECTSSOTHATTHEY(?)CREATETHEMINIMUMOF...OF
INTERRUPTIONSONTHEFREEWAYSANDTHEROADWAYS.BUTEVENWITHALL
OFTHETHAT,WHENYOUHAVETODOTHESETHINGSWHEREYOUHAVETO
DRILLINTOTHEGROUNDANDYOUHAVETOPUTUPSTRUCTURESOVERTHE
FREEWAY.THEREISNOWAYYOUCANMEDICATETHATORANYTHINGYOUCAN
DOTOSETTHEHOURSOFWHENTHEYCANDOTHEWORK.THATSWHYSOME
WORKSSTARTAT7ATNIGHTGOESONTILL5INTHEMORNINGTOAVOIDRUSH
HOUR.BUTFORTHOSEOFUSWHOHAVETOTRAVELTHEROADINTHATTIME,
THEREISNOTMUCHWECANDOABOUTITANDNOTMUCHTHESTATECANDO
ABOUTITBECAUSETHEYNEEDTOGETTHEWORKDONE.THESOONERTHE
WORKSGETSDONE,THESOONERITMOVESAWAYFROMWHATEVERISCAUSING
THEPROBLEM.SO,UNTILTHENITHINKWEJUSTHAVETOLIVEWITHITBECAUSE
IFYOUMAKETHEMWORKLESSHOURSTOCREATELESSOFAPROBLEMTHEN
THEWORKWILLGOEVENLONGER.SOTHEFASTERYOUGETTHROUGHTHE
BETTER

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Formerviceprincipal,memberofeducationand
consumerprotection,vicechairforgovernment
operationsandchairfortransportation.Representing
statesdistrict18,herewehaveClarenceNishihara.

ITWAS10YEARSAGOANDIWASNTINOFFICE

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10YEARSAGOSOIWASMORELIKEPEOPLE
LIKEYOURSELVES.WHOWONDEREDHEY,
WHERESTHETOILETPAPER,WHERESTHE
GOODSANDALLTHATSTUFF.SOUMMYGUESS
ISTHATTHEGOVERNMENTWILLNOTSTEPIN
ONALABORDISPUTE,ITSALABORDISPUTE.SO
MORETHANLIKELYALLTHEGOVERNORCAN
DOISENCOURAGETHEPARTIESTOMEETAND
SETTLEWHATEVERTHECOUNTRIESDISPUTEIS.
BUTALOTOFTIMESBECAUSEITSATTHEDOCS
ITINCLUDESNOTONLYUNIONSHERE,
INCLUDESTHEUNIONSONTHEWESTCOAST
ANDSOMETIMESTHEDECISIONSAREMADE
NOTHERE,BUTMADEONTHEWESTCOAST.SO
UNTILTHEYSETTLETHOSETHINGSWELLBE
ALLHAVETOSUDERTHROUGH.SOTHATS
ALWAYSTHECONCERNIFTHEREISADOCK
STRIKE.
YOUKNOWWEREUNDERTHEJONESACTFOR
OURSHIPPING.ANDITWASSUPPOSEDLYTO
PROTECTOURDOMESTICSHIPPINGINDUSTRY
BUTYOUKNOWWEGOTALOTOFCARGOTHAT
COMESFROMOVERSEASANDTHEYARENOT
OBLIGATEDBYTHEJONESACT.SOMEOFTHE
CREWSHIPSTHATCOMEAREFOREIGNOR
FOREIGNFLAGSHIPS.THEYRELISTEDWITH
ANOTHERCOUNTRY,INSOMECASESITMIGHT
BEWITHANOTHERCOUNTRY,INSOMECASES
ITMIGHTBEWITHANOTHERCOUNTRYYOU
MIGHTNEVERHEARDOFYOUKNOW.ANDSO
THEJONESACTWILLNOTALLOWTHEMTODO
ITUNLESSTHEYWEREAUSCARRIERANDIT
WASKINDOFPROTECTIVETHATTHEUSUH
SHIPPINGINDUSTRY.BUTTHEREHASBEEN
SOMECONCERNSTHATTHEJONESACTMAY
BEHURTINGUS,ESPECIALLYSINCEWEREAN
ISLANDSTATEANDMAYBEIFWEDIDNTHAVE
IT,ITCOULDMAKESOMETHINGSEASIERFOR
USTOGETSHIPPERSWHOWANTTOWORKIN
HAWAIIANDSHIPPINGTHINGSTOUS.SORIGHT
NOWTHEREISSEVERALBILLS.ITHINKONEOF
THEMTALKSABOUTTHEJONESACT,IDONT
KNOWEXACTLYTHEBILLNUMBERBUTONE
CALLSFORITSABOLISHMENTOFTHEJONES
ACT.LIKEASFARASITRELATESTOHAWAII.BUT
IMNOTSUREALLTHEDETAILSOFITBECAUSE
WHENTHEBILL,WHENITDOESCOMEOUT
*COUGH*EXCUSEME.ANDITGETSDEBATEDIN
THELEGISLATURETHENITGETSMOREDETAILS
ABOUTWHATDOESITMEAN,WHENTHE
PROS,WHATTHECONSAREABOUT.ANDI
THINKITSPROBABLYTHEPLACEWHERE

WHETHER
YOUNOTSOSUREIFITSAGOOD
THINGORBADTHINGISTOFOLLOWTHE
HEARINGSTHATGOONABOUTTHATBILL.

Withthejonesact,andthatitmaybehurtingus,it
couldusshiptosomethingthathappenedlongtime
beforeClarenceNishiharacameinoffice.Thingsare
stilluncertainwiththejonesact.

WELLUMTHESTATEISWORKINGWITHHEART
THE____AUTHORITYRAPID(?)TRANSIT,THE
RAIL.THEYREWORKINGTOGETHERWITHTHEM
ANDLOOKINGATSOMEOFTHEPROJECTSSO
THATTHEY(?)CREATETHEMINIMUMOF...OF
INTERRUPTIONSONTHEFREEWAYSANDTHE
ROADWAYS.BUTEVENWITHALLOFTHETHAT,
WHENYOUHAVETODOTHESETHINGSWHERE
YOUHAVETODRILLINTOTHEGROUNDAND
YOUHAVETOPUTUPSTRUCTURESOVERTHE
FREEWAY.THEREISNOWAYYOUCAN
MEDICATETHATORANYTHINGYOUCANDOTO
SETTHEHOURSOFWHENTHEYCANDOTHE
WORK.THATSWHYSOMEWORKSSTARTAT7
ATNIGHTGOESONTILL5INTHEMORNINGTO
AVOIDRUSHHOUR.BUTFORTHOSEOFUSWHO
HAVETOTRAVELTHEROADINTHATTIME,
THEREISNOTMUCHWECANDOABOUTITAND
NOTMUCHTHESTATECANDOABOUTIT
BECAUSETHEYNEEDTOGETTHEWORKDONE.
THESOONERTHEWORKSGETSDONE,THE
SOONERITMOVESAWAYFROMWHATEVERIS
CAUSINGTHEPROBLEM.SO,UNTILTHENITHINK
WEJUSTHAVETOLIVEWITHITBECAUSEIFYOU
MAKETHEMWORKLESSHOURSTOCREATE
LESSOFAPROBLEMTHENTHEWORKWILLGO
EVENLONGER.SOTHEFASTERYOUGET
THROUGHTHEBETTER

Withthenewrailproject,creatingrushhourforus,isa
problem.Thereisnothingthatwecando.Eventhough
itsblockingourroadtosomewhere,wejusthaveto
dealwithit,evenwithourharbor.Theroadmightbe
bumpyforus,butitwouldcomeoutsmoothinthe
future.ImJamieTumanengfromWaipahu
IntermediateforCapitolCommentary?wiskids
productionreporting.