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Eric Swepston
Prof. Julia Intawiwat
ENG 112-38
Date: 4-29-15
Extended Inquiry Complied Steps
Steps 1 - 8
Step #1: Choose a Subject
Possible Topics:
1. Extreme trips/adventures
2. Extreme rights of passage
3. Going to/through college
4. Becoming an astronaut
Extreme trips/adventures:

What is the motivation for taking these trips?

Why do some people look down on trips like these?

Is there a spiritual aspect?

Is there just an adrenaline rush?

Is it to test yourself? i.e. your limits

Could it be all three?

Step #2: Proposal

1. What do you know about your subject already?

I already know a fair bit about this topic, as I participate in these trips. I have gone
on quite a few trips and have almost died a few times.

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2. Why did you choose this subject over others? Why does it interest you?

I choose this subject because I already know a fair bit about it, and it is a personal

3. Write ten questions you want to find answers to. At least half of those can be fact-based.
The rest must be substantive.

1. Where can you go on these trips?

2. Why do people go on these trips?

3. What planning do these trips require, such as permits and equipment.

4. Is there a spiritual aspect to these trips?

5. Do these trips provide an escape from every day life?

6. What are the risks/hazards of these trips?

7. Why are some people afraid to take risks?

8. Are men more likely to participate in these types of activities than women?

9. When is the best time to go on these trips, i.e. are these trips influenced by the

10. Are there any benefits to these trips?

4. From that list, choose one or two of the substantive questions that interest you most.
These will be your primary inquiry questions as you begin your research.

2. Why do people go on these trips?

6. What are the risks/hazards of these trips?

5. List, where do you think you will find answers you seek? Possibilities are articles from
popular journals or web sites, scholarly research or studies, government documents,
individuals who might be good subjects for interview. What questions might be difficult
to find answers for?

I can look on adventuring/extreme sports web sites. I can also look on psychology
sites. I might look at the library or interview some people who have done these trips.

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6. If the results of your initial research are so numerous you need to narrow your subject,
what will you narrow it to?

I would focus on one type of trip or sport, like mountain climbing.

7. If your preliminary research turns up very little information, in what way will you
broaden your subject to open up more research findings?

I will include other slightly less extreme activities such as running.

Step #3: Research

1. Sources and why they are valid:
This source is one about gender differences in risk taking. This article will be
useful as a compare and contrast source. I believe that it is a valid source, though
slightly old. It is written by three separate people, two from the University of
California at San Diego, and the other person is unaffiliated
This one is also about risk taking, but more about the probable outcomes. It is
slightly less creditable, it is only written by one person. The person has a Medical
Degree and was the director at the University of Chicago.
This article is about extreme sports, why people participate in them, and who
partakes in them. This article was written by someone who participates in these
activities, but has cited and referenced a few articles.

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These are some of the articles that I will use in the paper; I may decide to not use
some of these later. I might use more articles later if I find one that I like and is
creditable. Some of the content will come from my personal experience and of others.

2. Library database
I tried to use the library database, but I did not find anything of use to me. There
were not many articles on this subject. However, I will not discount this as a source of
creditable information for later.
3. Individual/Interview Questions
This is where a large part of my information will come from, as this is a readily
available source. I know quite a few people that participate in these trips and take
extreme risks. I myself also partake in risky and/or dangerous trips. I will ask question
such as: why do they take these trips? Is there a spiritual aspect? Is it maybe an escape
from everyday life? What are the benefits? What are the drawbacks, i.e. dangers, cost,
I will need to be careful because these will be people personal opinions. Some of
the information will be from my personal experiences. Once again, I will need to exercise
caution as these are my own views and are not necessarily hard facts

Step #4: Annotated Bibliography

Andrico, Jason C., Personal Interview, September 2013.
Jason Andrico is a personal friend. He is currently attending York Tech in Fort Mill,
SC. He has gone on many 'high adventure' trips and regularly participates in extreme

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sports, such as downhill mountain biking. He has not written any books, he is simply a
college student.
He spoke about a lot of different topics. One of these topics is how he and some of his
have gotten severely hurt. This is relevant to my paper as it shows that not all risk 'pay
off'. This is a weaker source, but still a valid one; I could potentially make him say
anything I want.
This interview is creditable because he actually partakes in extreme risk taking on a
regular basis. This shows the worse side of risk taking and what it could lead to.
Judgment and Decision Making, Vol. 1, No. 1, July 2006, Pp. 48. "Gender Differences in Risk
Assessment: Why Do Women Take Fewer Risks than Men?" Judgment and Decision
Making, Vol. 1, No. 1, July 2006, Pp. 4863 Gender Differences in Risk Assessment:
Why Do Women Take Fewer Risks than Men? (2006): n. pag. Web.
Christine Harris is a professor at the University of California at San Diego. She has
multiple publications and teaches a wide verity of classes. Michael Jenkins is also a
professor at UNSC. He also teaches at a law school in California. Dale Glasser owns a
consulting firm and works with people taking risks. The purpose of this article is to
explore the differences of men and women taking risks. This shows why men are more
likely to partake in riskier activities than women.
This article is relevant to the topic of my paper. It shows why men do riskier activities,
like whitewater rafting, than women. Part of it is genetics, but some of it is up to how
men are raised. This article is a little bit 'wordy' for my paper, but it does have useful
points and will provide excellent research.

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This paper is published by three people, two are professors and the other is a
consultant. I believe this is a fairly reliable source as it points to other articles and
numerous studies.
Lickerman, Alex. "Should You Take a Risk?" Psychology Today. N.p., 22 Sept. 2013. Web. 25
Mar. 2015.
The author is Alex Lickerman. He is currently teaching at the University of Chicago.
He is also the vice president of counseling. He has had to deal with people taking
risks. The article focuses mainly on the probable outcomes of risks and whether you
should take them.
I rather like the article, it will show that some risks are worth taking and some are not.
This article also guides you through the process of decision making. It is a little bit
weaker as it only cites a handful of research papers.
The website seems to be fairly reliable, there are a number of credible authors that
publish on the site. I can not find anything wrong with the site, though they do publish
almost anything.
MountaingirlBC. "Living on the Edge: Extreme Sports and Their Role in Society."
Http:// N.p., 9 Aug. 2006. Web. 24 Mar. 2015.
The author is unnamed, but she does partake in extreme sports, such as mountain
climbing. It does not matter as much for this article that she is unnamed, as it is not a
scientific or scholarly article. The main purpose is to explain why it is important to let
these extreme risk taking adventures continue.
This article is a good source for this paper as it talks about why risky sports are
needed. It shows how they are useful to people and to society. It does list some

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scientific sources and reasons why these are needed. It is a little bit weaker because the
author technically is not listed, but the article is still useful.
People who actually partake in these dangerous activities are the writers on the site, so
I view them as experts. Granted, the do not have degrees in there fields, but they have
been out in the fields.
Schneider, Terri A., Ted M. Butryn, David M. Furst, and Matthew A. Masucci. "A Qualitative
Examination of Risk among Elite Adventure Racers." Journal of Sport Behavior 30.3
(2007): 330-57. ProQuest Central. Web. 19 Mar. 2015.
This article was written by multiple people. The first, Schneider, is an extreme athlete
herself. Burtyn is a professor of sport psychology and sport sociology at the San Jose
State University. Furst also taught at SJSU. His classes were: sport psychology, stress
management, and even running. He is well versed in this topic. Masuci also teaches at
SJSU and is now the department head. He teaches sport activities and psychology
This article quotes numerous sources to back up the main ideas. This is a relevant
article for my paper because it is about risk taking and extreme sports. This will
provide a good source of information supporting my view and topic.
This article appears to be fairly valid; it was written at the San Jose State University.
This University has a large kinesiology department, the study of of human kinetics. It
was also written by multiple people, they could double check facts and sources.

Step #5: The Essay

See my ePortfolio. Look under the Extended Inquiry page.

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Step #6: Reflection
1. Your idea.
I started with a good number of topics, but I had a favorite from the beginning. I
chose extreme trips, which turned into extreme sports, which is personal. I have found
that if my topic is personal and has meaning for me that I can write about it far more
easily. I decide to refine my idea into extreme sports because extreme trips was a little
bit too broad. The core idea really did not change from start to end.
2. Your research.
I chose five sources that were relevant to my topic and that I found useful. I also
interviewed a friend who had a bad experience with extreme sports. I found a wide
variety of evidence in my digging.
There were a few sources that were overwhelming, they simply had to much data
and it was nigh on impossible to interpret. I did find a handful of sources that had the
right amount of useable data that was easy to understand.
I did drop one of the sources because it was no longer relevant.
3. The effect of your research on your direction.
There really was not anything that surprised me about my research, aside from the
overwhelming data. I found the right amount to build a platform for my essay to be
constructed upon. The research I turned up did direct my essay in a certain direction, but
it went where I wanted it to.
4. The writing of your essay.
I decide to write in a more informal style, like I would be giving a speech.
However, I refrained from using: cant, wont, shouldnt, etc. I wanted to sound personal,
but not unprofessional or informal. I chose to write this way because I am comfortable
with writing speeches. The flow of the essay is greatly improved with this style.
5. Your critique group.
My critique group did not help a lot. The group only caught a handful of grammar
and punctuation errors in my work. It did hinder me because the advice they gave was not
good advice. I had to decide whether to use the advice or discard it.
6. Your life as a researcher.
This project has been a lot more in depth then what I do. I was forced to think
through every single detail, regardless of whether it was significant. This is not the way I
write. I sit down and write the essay in one go.
The method of thinking through every single little detail hinder me. Ideas were
few and far between because I had to document everything and the whole writing process
was spread out over a few months.
7. Your life as a learner.

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I did not really learn anything new. All of the material we covered I already new.
However, I did use a few new multi media sources, such as animoto and tagul.

Step #7: Presentation

This was done in class and I do not have an exact transcript of what I said. I will give the
main points I listed:
I made the Tagul from parts of my essay, so I believe that this gives credibility. I backed
my essay with numerous sources.
Seeing certain words, such as adventure, extreme, gamble, etc, can trigger memories and
emotions. Some of the emotions and feeling that it triggers for me are quite strong.
I choose an arrow that points to the left which suggest forward motion. This is because of
how we read: right to left. I also chose the words to be at ninety degrees of each other so it would
look interesting, but not jumbled.

Step #8: Multi-Modal Project

Multi-Modal Project Memo:

Your text must be accompanied by a 1-2 page memo describing the choices you made;
why you chose the modes you did, what rhetorical strategies you employed, what your
text compels a reader to do, think, or feel, etc.

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Why I chose to use a word based visual piece was because the meaning is clear and
obvious. With the image being made out of words, you do not need to decipher the meaning.
There are words in the image such as: extreme, gamble, adventure, risks, sports, hard, and fun.
These words can mean many different things to people, so what this piece means is really up
to you. I did limit the amount of words in the image because I wanted it to look clean and
simple. I chose to use Tagul instead of Wordle for my Extreme Sports essay Multi-Modal.
Some of the main reasons were because of the options and the fact it does not require flash
player, which can be finicky.
The main options I could change were: the lay out, the frequency of words used, the
text size, and I could upload my own image. I looked for a good piece of clip art that I could
use for my project. I choose a use an arrow pointing to the right, this suggest forward motion
because we read left to right. I also picked the clip art for the blue in it. Blue can mean many
things to different people, but the color triggers a multitude of memories for me. Blue reminds
me of a clear day, the water, and some clothing that I wear during these sports. Blue can also
be calming.

See picture below.

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