Class #6: Writing Handout (Notes) First: Sentence corrections... Let's fix these!

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A.) Accomplishment = ___________________________________________________________
1.) What accomplishment you did?

2.) Whats your

accomplishment yesterday?
B.) Consider = ___________________________________________________________
3.) What do you consider to this class?

4.) Whats most consider

thing when you get a job?

5.) What your consider thing about time or money?

6.) What is your

consider today dinner?

7.) What is your considerance when you choose your lunch?
**Note: How do you consider _(A)__ to be? = What do you think about __(A)__?
I consider _(A)_ (to be) _(B)_ = I think (A) is (B).
C.) Expect = ___________________________________________________________
8.) What expect your future?
is your expect in university?

9.) What
10.) What do you expect 10 years later?

To do

today:
Error correction (above)
BOOK: Main Ideas & Supporting Details: page 9: A & B
BOOK: Developing a Paragraph: page 16, A, B, C
BOOK: Making Outlines (discussion): pages 17-18
About our first written paragraph

Due Week 6, Class #11 Date: ___________________________

5 topics
You must turn in an __________________________ AND a ____________________________!!
Can you email the writing?? _____________
Sample outline:
Main Idea:
_______________________________________________________________________________________________
__ (topic sentence)
Supporting Details
Supporting Detail 1:
__________________________________________________________________________
(adjectives)
Supporting Detail 2:
__________________________________________________________________________
(adjectives)

Conclusion:
________________________________________________________________________________________
(concluding sentence)
Using adjectives + writing
Ticket out the door! Make an OUTLINE to describe the Happy music video.
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Name (): ___________________________________ Ticket out the door: I Wont Let You Down
music video outline
I.

Main Idea:
___________________________________________________________________________________
(topic)
II.
Supporting Details
A. Supporting Detail 1:
__________________________________________________________________________
(adjectives)
B. Supporting Detail 2:
__________________________________________________________________________
(adjectives)
III.
Conclusion:
___________________________________________________________________________
(conclusion )

Writing Assignment Topics:

Please choose ONE of these topics for your midterm paragraph (1st writing
assignment).
It is due ______________________________________________________.
Topics:
1

How would you describe yourself? Give details, examples, and reasons.

What do you think of the educational system in Korea? Explain your opinion.

If you could give $1 billion to any organization/charity, what would you give
it to and why?

What is one of your favorite memories? Describe what made it so good.

What is your most important possession (item)? Why is it so important to

you?

Criteria:
5-10 complete sentences (no more, no less!)
5 or more vocabulary words from units 1-2 (check pages 23 and 45)

 vocabulary words are circled, underlined, or in bold

simple outline completed (on the back side of the rubric)
separate paragraph written or typed (NOT emailed)
proper formatting (all together, NOT just a list of sentences)
Yes:

NO:

Name: ___________________________________ Class Section: ______________________

Academic English, Fall 2015 Paragraph 1
Topic:______________________________________ Total score: _____________/50
Category

Excellent
(9-10)

Good
(6-8)

Needs
improvement
(4-5)

Poor
(0-3)

Preparation:
Outline

The outline on the back

is completed, detailed,
and accurate. Other
notes may be present
and attached.

The outline on the

back is mostly
completed, but
missing some
important parts.

The outline on the back is

not completed well, and is
missing a lot of important
information.

The outline on the

back is not
completed at all, or
is missing almost
everything.

Format:
Structure/
Sentences/
Paragraph
form

Sentences are
complete and of varied
structure. Good
transition words are
used. The paragraph is
all together, and not a
list of sentences.

All sentences are

complete and wellconstructed.
Structuring is generally
done well. Some
conjunctions and
transitions are used
correctly.

Some sentences are

complete and wellconstructed, but many are
too short or long. The
structure needs some
work. Conjunctions and
transitions are attempted,
but are incorrect.

Many sentence
fragments or run-on
sentences, OR
structure needs lots
of work. Most
sentences are
extremely short.
Conjunctions and
transitions are used
incorrectly

Conventions:
Vocabulary/
Spelling/
Punctuation/
Capitalization

Writer makes very few

errors in grammar or
spelling. Uses 5 or more
of our vocabulary
words correctly.
Words are circled,
underlined, or in bold.
There are no errors in

Writer makes 4-5

errors in grammar
and/or spelling, but
uses simple words
perfectly. Uses 3-4 of
our vocabulary words
correctly. 1-2 errors in
capitalization or

Writer makes 6-8 errors in

grammar and/or spelling.
Simple words are mostly
used correctly, but there
are some mistakes. Uses
vocabulary incorrectly, or
only 1-2 words. Many
capitalization/ punctuation

Writer makes so
many errors that it is
difficult to read.
Uses vocabulary
incorrectly, or not at
all. Punctuation
and/or capitalization
are not done

Score/
Comments

capitalization or
punctuation.

punctuation.

errors

correctly.

Ideas
and
Organization

Ideas are expressed in a

clear and organized
fashion. The topic
sentence and supporting
details fit well together.
Examples or stories are
used to illustrate the
main idea.

Ideas are expressed in

a clear manner, but
the organization could
have been better. The
topic sentence is
strong. The paragraph
contains a mix of
strong and weak
supporting examples.

Ideas are not very clear. It

took more than one
reading to understand the
main point. There are
more weak than strong
supporting examples. The
topic sentence needs
improvement.

The paragraph
seems to be a
collection of
unrelated sentences.
It is very difficult to
figure out what the
writing is about. The
topic is very weak.

Task
completion/
Effect on the
reader

The paragraph is easy to

understand during the
first reading. There is an
excellent, creative
introduction. There are
no significant errors.
The student follows all
guidelines.
It reads easily.

The paragraph is
mostly easy to
understand upon first
reading, but contains
areas that could be
improved. There is a
good introduction. The
student generally
followed the
assignment guidelines.

The essay is not easily

understood upon first
reading. A second or third
reading is required to
understand the paragraph.
The intro is weak. The
student didnt follow the
assignment guidelines
carefully.

The essay is not

able to be
understood, even
after 3 or 4 readings.
There is no real
introduction. The
student didnt follow
the guidelines for the
assignment.

****NOTE: Any copied or plagiarized work will receive a score of ZERO (0).
Other comments:

Preparation: Outline! (See pages 18 and 43 for models!)

*NOTE: The outline does NOT have to contain full sentences; simple words and phrases are fine.
However, please note that this outline is required and is worth TEN POINTS of your assignment.
You MUST include the five vocabulary words at the bottom of this page. Extra notes are
optional.
Paragraph Topic:
_____________________________________________________________________________
I. Main Idea/Topic Sentence:

II. Subtopic(s) and Supporting Details:

A.
1.
2.

(3.)
B.
1.
2.
(3.)
III. Conclusion:

Vocabulary words used (See pages 23 and 45) You need to choose FIVE (5) or more words:

Optional: other notes (websites, sources, etc.):