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WritingReflection1

Goal1:ConciseArticulation

Ivealwaysbeenaverbosewriter.Allofmywritingassignmentsalwayssurpasstherequired
limit.Forexample,allbutoneofmypoliticalblogsexceeds550words,whenonlytwo
paragraphsarerequired.InmyHonorsTocquevilleanalysis,Iwrote1,749words,whenthe
requiredmaximumwas1,000.IusedtothinkthatIdidthisbecauseIhadmanyinterpretations
andanalysesofthewritingsubjectsthetruthisthatIcantexplainmyideasinsimplemethods.
Thephrasequalityoverquantitycomestomind.JustbecauseIvewrittenalotofwords
doesntmeanmyargumentiscoherent.Theextrawordsoftendetractfromthequalityofmy
writingandhavealsocreatedmorework.Iveattemptedtoconquerthislongwindednesssince
sophomoreyear,buthavethusfarbeenunsuccessful.NowImgoingtotryanewapproach.My
currenttechniqueforwritingisjustlettingmybraincomeupwithideasandhavemyfingerstype
thosethoughts.Thisliterarythrowupisgreatbecauseitgetsmythoughtsdown,butInever
takethetimetogobackthroughandcombinesimilarideasoreliminatethenonessentials.
FromnowonafterIvefinishedheavingonthepage,Imgoingtoforcemyselftorethinkand
organize.Tighteditingisreallyamust.

Goal2:Transitions

Anotherproblemthatbranchesfrommyverbosearticulationmentionedaboveismysudden
jumpsinthoughtinmywriting.InmyHonorsTocquevilleanalysis,Imademanyofthesejumps.
Oneofwhichwasthis:

...Openlyhomosexualindividualswereexcludedfrompeergroupsandfoundithardornear
impossibletogetemployment.Eventhoughthesocietymightbedemocratic,itactedinatyrannical
mannertowardsthegaypopulation.

ThefoundersofourConstitutioncreatedtheUnitedStatesofAmericatoescape...

InoneparagraphIdiscussedtherelationshipbetweenmajoritiesandminoritieswhileusing
stigmatowardshomosexualityasanexample,andthenIstarteddiscussingtheFounding
Fathers.InmybrainIhadatransitiontolinktheseindependentthoughts,butIdidntgetitdown
onscreen.Ifeelthatthesolutionforthisgoalisfoundinthesametighteditingprocess
aforementioned.AsItakeadifferentapproachtomywritingandreallyorganizemythoughts,I
willbeabletonoticewhentransitionsneedtobeadded.

Goal3:AppropriateVoice

Myfavoritewritingtechniqueisinteractingwiththereader.Ienjoymakingmyessaysinteractive
anddrawingpeoplein.However,thisstyleisntalwaysappropriate.Itsacceptableinnonformal

blogposts,butnotinamoreseriousessay.Yetagain,myTocquevilleessayhasmanygreat
examplesoneofwhichis:

Itssubjectivetowhichmajorityopinionsyouvechosentofollow.Whetherornotyourviews
coincidewithwhatIveexpressedhere,IhopeIvestimulatedsomeneuronsandopenedyoureyes
totheoneafflictionfromwhichweallsuffer.

Mydirectdialoguewiththereaderisunnecessaryinthecontextofthisformalwritingpiece.
Movingforward,mystrategytocombatthisistoalwaysbeawareofwhetherthisisformalor
informalbywritingin
BIGBOLDLETTERS
atthetopofeachofmypaperssothatIm
constantlyremindedwhichvoiceIcanuse.

Note:Paragraph4isntincludedbecauseIwasalreadydonewithmycollegeessayswhenwe
beganwritingtheminclass.