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11th
March,
2010

 


English
Essay‐
The
Scarlet
Ibis



Abridged
versions
always
fail
to
make
the
story
interesting.
They
lack
both
of
description
and

emotions.
The
Scarlet
Ibis
is
a
perfect
example
of
this.
The
abridged
version
was
a
complete

disaster,
for
it
both
lacked
emotion
and
description,
whilst
the
unabridged
version
was
full
of

description
and
feelings.

In
the
first
story,
the
author
foreshadows
Doodle’s
death
in
the
first
paragraph.

«
The
last
graveyard
flowers
were
blooming,
and
their
smell
drifted
across
the
cotton
field

and
through
every
room
of
our
house,
speaking
softly
the
names
of
our
dead.
»
Original
(P.1)

This
paragraph
suggests
Doodle’s
death
because
it
says
:
the
names
of
our
dead,
and
the
last

graveyard
flower.
Also
few
lines
after
the
narrator
says
:

«
(…)—and
I
remember
Doodle.
»
(P.1)

However,
in
the
abridged
story,
they
completly
took
out
the
suggestion
of
Doodle’s
death.

But
they
did
leave
«
and
I
remember
Doodle.
»
This
already
is
a
major
difference.
In
the

beginning
of
the
unabridged
version,
we
know
that
someone
died,
a
memory
of
a
dead.

Rather
in
the
abridged
version,
no
foreshadowing
of
the
dead
can
be
seen.

Another
major
detail
that
the
abridged
version
doesn’t
have
is
the
narrator’s
self
conflict
and

pride.
Throughout
the
original
story,
the
narrator
wants
to
teach
Doodle
how
to
be
like
a

normal
boy,
but
not
because
he
loves
his
brother,
but
because
he
is
ashamed
of
his
brother.


So
he
can
be
proud
of
Doodle
and
not
ashamed,
he
teaches
Doodle
how
to
walk,
swim
and

more.
He
experiences
a
self
conflict
by
doing
this.


He
pushes
his
brother
because
of
his
pride.
His
pride
is
both
harmful
and
helpful.
It
was

harmful
because
in
the
end,
it
was
the
reason
of
Doodle’s
death,
the
reason
he
was
so
cruel

to
his
own
brother.
Then
it
is
helpful
because
without
it,
he
would
have
never
pushed
his

brother
so
far
and
Doodle
never
would
have
learned
to
walk
and
run
like
a
normal
boy.


«
I
did
not
know
that
pride
is
a
wonderful,
terrible
thing,
a
seed
that
bears
two
vines,
life
and

death.
»
Original
story
(P.2)

This
paragraph
is
a
good
example
of
what
the
self
conflict
is
:
the
pride
that
cannot
bear

having
a
mental
brother.
After,
there
are
also
minor
conflicts
such
as
teaching
Doodle
all
he

needs
to
know
in
a
limited
time,
in
which
they
fail.

However
the
second
story
took
out
the
self
conflict
the
narrator
experienced,
and
focused

on
Doodle
and
his
inability
to
be
like
the
other
boys.
This
is
a
mistake.
The
story
lost
a
lot
of

depths
in
the
story,
making
us
feel
less
emotion
when
Doodle
dies.
Without
his
pride
and
his

self
conflict,
we
don’t
understand
his
perspective
or
feel
pity
towards
him.
This
is
a
serious

loss
of
meaning.

Another
thing
to
compare
is
Doodle’s
inability
to
be
normal.
In
the
original
story,
there
was
a

lot
written
about
him
never
being
able
to
be
normal.
The
second
story
took
it
all
out.
That

also
took
out
a
lot
of
depths,
because
readers
who
haven’t
read
the
original
story
will
not

understand,
and
will
loose
the
emotion
when
Doodle
dies.

Doodle’s
inability
to
walk
,
swim

and
be
normal
was
one
of
the
main
problems,
and
it
was
that
that
brought
the
narrator
to

feel
ashamed
of
him
and
train
him
non
stop
so
he
could
be
proud
of
his
brother.

«
He
might
not,
she
sobbed,
even
be
‘all
there’
»
Original
(P.1)

The
second
story
is
abridged
and
many
very
important
details
have
been
deleted.

One
of
the
thing
that
also
struck
me
is
how
much
text
they
took
out
of
the
original
story.

That
may
be
the
reason
why
it’s
called
abridged,
but
they
took
out
so
much
text
and

description
that
it
makes
it
not
very
interresting
to
read.

I
chose
two
scenes
to
compare.
The
two
scene
where
Doodle
dies
and
when
the
Scarlet
Ibis

dies.
In
both
the
stories,
the
Scarlet
Ibis
is
a
foreshadowing
of
Doodle’s
death.
However
in

the
original
version,
they
give
more
information
and
credit
to
the
big
red
bird.


«
Even
death
did
not
mar
its
grace,
for
it
lay
on
the
earth
like
a
broken
vase
of
red
flowers,

and
we
stood
around
it,
awed
by
its
exotic
beauty.»
Original
(P.3‐4)

The
abridged
version
rephrased
this
quote.
They
changed
the
words
around
saying
‘Even

death
did
not
mar
its
grace’
at
the
end.
They
took
out
the
whole
description
of
the
exotic

bird,
the
description
of
its
legs,
its
colors.

Doodle’s
death
was
very
sad
in
both
the
stories.
However
I
believe
it
was
more
tragic
and

sad
in
the
original
story.
The
first
story
put
more
details
about
everything,
and
portrayed
the

big
brother’s
cruelty
then
turning
into
sadness,
and
finally
to
regret.

Also
the
fact
that
there

were
more
conflicts
with
the
narrator,
which
made
the
ending
more
tragic.

«
His
little
legs,
bent
sharply
at
the
knees,
had
never
before
seemed
so
fragile,
so
thin.
»

Original
(P.4)

This
last
paragraph
and
this
quote
is
very
important
because
it
shows
that
the
brother
truly

cared
about
his
younger
sibling,
and
even
though
he
may
have
been
ashamed
of
him,
he

loved
him.
This
quote
portrays
one
last
time
Doodle’s
invalidity,
how
his
little
knees
were
so

fragile
compared
to
others.

However,
even
though
the
two
versions
have
many
differences,
they
also
share
many

common
traits.
They
both
talk
about
Doodle’s
and
the
narrator’s
friendship,
although
in

different
depths,
and
brotherly
love.
All
of
them
have
the
major
events,
such
as
death
of
the

Scarlet
Ibis.


In
the
end,
the
better
story
was
the
original
story.
I
don’t
know
why
the
author
would
want

to
abridge
it
like
that,
taking
all
the
emotions
out
of
the
story.
The
story
is
about
a
two

brothers,
and
the
friendship
built
between
the
two
boys.
It’s
a
very
intense
story,
very

interresting
to
read.