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KS3 English 4 LBtUK Lesson-1

KS3 English 4 LBtUK Lesson-1

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Objective ± We are learning to analyse the way a writer makes a description interesting.

Two of the most effective techniques you can use when describing a scene are: Active, interesting verbs ± µdoing¶ words that pack a punch. The five senses ± sight, smell, touch, taste, sound.

As you read the following extract, underline and annotate any evidence that the writer is using interesting verbs or the five senses.

In this extract, a boat is caught in a terrible storm:
The vessel had been sitting in the water calmly, rocking like a babe in arms. Now, it lurched and creaked painfully, sending shocks of spray up from the prow of the ship. Great bullying smacks of water flung themselves over the side of the boat, drenching the men, who clung to the sides like limpets on a rock. The taste of salt coated their throats. They cried out to each other, but the wind stole their words away. The sea rose and shuddered like a wild horse trying to shake off its rider. Past exhaustion, the men slumped and whimpered even as they gripped on for dear life, whilst the wind howled and the rain battered down all around them. Sometime before dawn, the ocean was soothed. The men slowly came to, and as the rose-yellow sky warmed and unfurled above them, they peered at each other, astonished, unable to believe they had survived such a violent night.

Did you find any active verbs?
The vessel had been sitting in the water calmly, rocking like a babe in arms. Now, it lurched and creaked painfully, sending shocks of spray up from the prow of the ship. Great bullying smacks of water flung themselves over the side of the boat, drenching the men, who clung to the sides like limpets on a rock. The taste of salt coated their throats. They cried out to each other, but the wind stole their words away. The sea rose and shuddered like a wild horse trying to shake off its rider. Past exhaustion, the men slumped and whimpered even as they gripped on for dear life, whilst the wind howled and the rain battered down all around them. Sometime before dawn, the ocean was soothed. The men slowly came to, and as the rose-yellow sky warmed and unfurled above them, they peered at each other, astonished, unable to believe they had survived such a violent night.

Did you find any active verbs?
The vessel had been sitting in the water calmly, rocking like a babe in arms. Now, it lurched and creaked painfully, sending shocks of spray up from the prow of the ship. Great bullying smacks of water flung themselves over the side of the boat, drenching the men, who clung to the sides like limpets on a rock. The taste of salt coated their throats. They cried out to each other, but the wind stole their words away. The sea rose and shuddered like a wild horse trying to shake off its rider. Past exhaustion, the men slumped and whimpered even as they gripped on for dear life, whilst the wind howled and the rain battered down all around them. Sometime before dawn, the ocean was soothed. The men slowly came to, and as the rose-yellow sky warmed and unfurled above them, they peered at each other, astonished, unable to believe they had survived such a violent night.

Did you find any evidence of the five senses?
The vessel had been sitting in the water calmly, rocking like a babe in arms. Now, it lurched and creaked painfully, sending shocks of spray up from the prow of the ship. Great bullying smacks of water flung themselves over the side of the boat, drenching the men, who clung to the sides like limpets on a rock. The taste of salt coated their throats. They cried out to each other, but the wind stole their words away. The sea rose and shuddered like a wild horse trying to shake off its rider. Past exhaustion, the men slumped and whimpered even as they gripped on for dear life, whilst the wind howled and the rain battered down all around them. Sometime before dawn, the ocean was soothed. The men slowly came to, and as the rose-yellow sky warmed and unfurled above them, they peered at each other, astonished, unable to believe they had survived such a violent night.

Did you find any evidence of the five senses?
The vessel had been sitting in the water calmly, rocking like a babe in arms. Now, it lurched and creaked painfully, sending shocks of spray up from the prow of the ship. Great bullying smacks of water flung themselves over the side of the boat, drenching the men, who clung to the sides like limpets on a rock. The taste of salt coated their throats. They cried out to each other, but the wind stole their words away. The sea rose and shuddered like a wild horse trying to shake off its rider. Past exhaustion, the men slumped and whimpered even as they gripped on for dear life, whilst the wind howled and the rain battered down all around them. Sometime before dawn, the ocean was soothed. The men slowly came to, and as the rose-yellow sky warmed and unfurled above them, they peered at each other, astonished, unable to believe they had survived such a violent night.

Let¶s try the same thing with this extract. This comes from a book called Gulliver¶s Travels, written by Jonathan Swift in 1726.
I lay down on the grass, which was very short and soft, where I slept sounder than ever I remembered to have done in my life, and, as I reckoned, about nine hours; for when I awaked, it was just day-light. I attempted to rise, but was not able to stir: for, as I happened to lie on my back, I found my arms and legs were strongly fastened on each side to the ground; and my hair, which was long and thick, tied down in the same manner. I likewise felt several slender ligatures across my body, from my arm-pits to my thighs. I could only look upwards; the sun began to grow hot, and the light offended my eyes. I heard a confused noise about me; but in the posture I lay, could see nothing except the sky. In a little time I felt something alive moving on my left leg, which advancing gently forward over my breast, came almost up to my chin; when, bending my eyes downwards as much as I could, I perceived it to be a human creature not six inches high, with a bow and arrow in his hands, and a quiver at his back. In the mean time, I felt at least forty more of the same kind (as I conjectured) following the first. I was in the utmost astonishment, and roared so loud, that they all ran back in a fright; and some of them, as I was afterwards told, were hurt with the falls they got by leaping from my sides upon the ground.

Did you find any active verbs?
I lay down on the grass, which was very short and soft, where I slept sounder than ever I remembered to have done in my life, and, as I reckoned, about nine hours; for when I awaked, it was just day-light. I attempted to rise, but was not able to stir: for, as I happened to lie on my back, I found my arms and legs were strongly fastened on each side to the ground; and my hair, which was long and thick, tied down in the same manner. I likewise felt several slender ligatures across my body, from my arm-pits to my thighs. I could only look upwards; the sun began to grow hot, and the light offended my eyes. I heard a confused noise about me; but in the posture I lay, could see nothing except the sky. In a little time I felt something alive moving on my left leg, which advancing gently forward over my breast, came almost up to my chin; when, bending my eyes downwards as much as I could, I perceived it to be a human creature not six inches high, with a bow and arrow in his hands, and a quiver at his back. In the mean time, I felt at least forty more of the same kind (as I conjectured) following the first. I was in the utmost astonishment, and roared so loud, that they all ran back in a fright; and some of them, as I was afterwards told, were hurt with the falls they got by leaping from my sides upon the ground.

Did you find any active verbs?
I lay down on the grass, which was very short and soft, where I slept sounder than ever I remembered to have done in my life, and, as I reckoned, about nine hours; for when I awaked, it was just day-light. I attempted to rise, but was not able to stir: for, as I happened to lie on my back, I found my arms and legs were strongly fastened on each side to the ground; and my hair, which was long and thick, tied down in the same manner. I likewise felt several slender ligatures across my body, from my arm-pits to my thighs. I could only look upwards; the sun began to grow hot, and the light offended my eyes. I heard a confused noise about me; but in the posture I lay, could see nothing except the sky. In a little time I felt something alive moving on my left leg, which advancing gently forward over my breast, came almost up to my chin; when, bending my eyes downwards as much as I could, I perceived it to be a human creature not six inches high, with a bow and arrow in his hands, and a quiver at his back. In the mean time, I felt at least forty more of the same kind (as I conjectured) following the first. I was in the utmost astonishment, and roared so loud, that they all ran back in a fright; and some of them, as I was afterwards told, were hurt with the falls they got by leaping from my sides upon the ground.

Did you find any use of the five senses?
I lay down on the grass, which was very short and soft, where I slept sounder than ever I remembered to have done in my life, and, as I reckoned, about nine hours; for when I awaked, it was just day-light. I attempted to rise, but was not able to stir: for, as I happened to lie on my back, I found my arms and legs were strongly fastened on each side to the ground; and my hair, which was long and thick, tied down in the same manner. I likewise felt several slender ligatures across my body, from my arm-pits to my thighs. I could only look upwards; the sun began to grow hot, and the light offended my eyes. I heard a confused noise about me; but in the posture I lay, could see nothing except the sky. In a little time I felt something alive moving on my left leg, which advancing gently forward over my breast, came almost up to my chin; when, bending my eyes downwards as much as I could, I perceived it to be a human creature not six inches high, with a bow and arrow in his hands, and a quiver at his back. In the mean time, I felt at least forty more of the same kind (as I conjectured) following the first. I was in the utmost astonishment, and roared so loud, that they all ran back in a fright; and some of them, as I was afterwards told, were hurt with the falls they got by leaping from my sides upon the ground.

Did you find any use of the five senses?
I lay down on the grass, which was very short and soft, where I slept sounder than ever I remembered to have done in my life, and, as I reckoned, about nine hours; for when I awaked, it was just day-light. I attempted to rise, but was not able to stir: for, as I happened to lie on my back, I found my arms and legs were strongly fastened on each side to the ground; and my hair, which was long and thick, tied down in the same manner. I likewise felt several slender ligatures across my body, from my arm-pits to my thighs. I could only look upwards; the sun began to grow hot, and the light offended my eyes. I heard a confused noise about me; but in the posture I lay, could see nothing except the sky. In a little time I felt something alive moving on my left leg, which advancing gently forward over my breast, came almost up to my chin; when, bending my eyes downwards as much as I could, I perceived it to be a human creature not six inches high, with a bow and arrow in his hands, and a quiver at his back. In the mean time, I felt at least forty more of the same kind (as I conjectured) following the first. I was in the utmost astonishment, and roared so loud, that they all ran back in a fright; and some of them, as I was afterwards told, were hurt with the falls they got by leaping from my sides upon the ground.

We are going to be writing a description of an incredible journey on a bicycle, using the techniques we have looked at ± active verbs and the five senses.

Where could you go on your incredible journey on a bicycle?

Incredible journey

Down to the bottom of the sea

Space

On your worksheet, start to collect ideas for the sorts of verb you might use to describe your journey ± don¶t forget, keep them active and interesting. Plunge Rush Swoop

Plenary ± Share some ideas for your incredible journey. Where are you going? What does it feel like?

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