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Directions: Read the following intro paragraphs and comments. Then, rewrite the paragraphs eliminating all writing errors and revising all logic flaws.
Intro Sample I: Throughout history, literature has evolved. It has expanded from “inside the box” concepts to descriptive and outgoing sincerity. In American poetry, many literary movements such as Traditionalism, Realism, and Imagism are the very reason for this discussion. Comments:
1. Throughout history—this is a good intro phrase but perhaps an adjective or
adjective phrase is needed—telling us what type of history
2. What is it? (Don’t start your second sentence with it. Give us a noun.)
3. 4. 5. 6. “Inside the box” is too cliche’ for the second sentence What do you mean “inside the box”? “Inside the box” is not parallel with descriptive and outgoing sincerity. Describe the transition overall in American history and then compare that transition to the transition of American literature. 7. traditionalism-realism-imagism can be italicized but not capitalized 8. traditionalism, realism, and imagism are in the wrong order 9. there is a verb tense change—from past to present—has evolved to are 10. you are using passive voice—helping verb + main verb—try not to do that 11. the thesis statement is weak....you weren’t asked to have “this discussion”...you were asked to describe the development of American poetry since the Civil War—focusing on realism, imagism, and traditionalism Maybe try something like this.... Perhaps the greatest period of America poetic evolution occurred from 1860 to 1930. During this period, American poetry abandoned the strict rules of closed poetic form and embraced a period of artistic experimentalism resulting in the development of three key literary movement—realism, imagism, and traditionalism. active voice—past tense
Intro Sample Two:
In American literature there are many different forms of literary styles of writing and some were very influential in the development of U.S. literature such as Realism, Imagism, and Traditionalism. All of them have their own unique style and way of depicting the point they are trying to get across in their writings and poetry. Comments: 1. In American literature is an okay phrase to start with, but introducing American lit at the beginning of the essay leaves you very little “transition” room. 2. Avoid “there are many”...these are hollow words. They say very little. 3. “literature there are many different forms of literary styles of writing is incredibly wordy and repetitive”. literary styles of writing—literature is written—so you don’t need “of writing” 4. How many times can you use literature or some form of the word in one sentence? 5. Sentence one is a run-on. are/were two verbs— 6. All of what? You must use a noun after All of.....them what? their what? they what? 7. What is your thesis? What are you discussing in your essay?
Explain how the method meets Frost’s description of the world’s destruction. Identify first way world might end B. You may not use 1st person and/or 2nd person in this essay. D. Explanation of poem II. but it will do. V. (You may write about how the world will end in fire. we. Destructive Method Three A.) Instructions for essay: 1. Make certain you have mentioned specific examples. C. D. Explain how the “method” is fire-like or ice-like. you) Essay Outline: Thesis: I. Explain how the method meets Frost’s description of the world’s destruction. 2. how the world will end in ice. Attention Getter B. 4. Your essay must be a thoughtful composition. You must explain how each mention reference is either fire and/or ice like. Make certain you have mentioned specific examples. C. Read the poem and write a carefully reasoned essay in which you explore Frost’s concept of the destruction of the world.) . Make certain you have mentioned specific examples.Robert Frost Essay: In his poem “Fire and Ice. (1. Conclusion Sample Body Paragraph: (This sample is not a good example. Author/Title C. IV. 3. Identify first way world might end B.” Robert Frost explores the subject of mankind’s destruction. III. Intro: A. Explain how the “method” is fire-like or ice-like. Destructive Method Two A. C. D. Identify first way world might end B. Explain how the “method” is fire-like or ice-like. or how the world will end as a result of both fire and ice. You must explain how 5. Destructive Method One A. You must refer to specific events and/or things that will lead to mankind’s destruction. Explain how the method meets Frost’s description of the world’s destruction.
Be prepared to explain how the “thing” is hot or cold in terms of temperature. Place each of those “things” in a category—either cold or hot. But if it had to perish twice. From what I've tasted of desire I hold with those who favor fire. create a list of things that you think may lead to the destruction of the world. Some say in ice. Fire—hot things—that when taken to extreme will lead to the destruction of the world Ice-cold things-that when taken to extreme will lead to the destruction of the world 1 hatred 2 lust 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 1 indifference 2 depression 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 .Fire and Ice Some say the world will end in fire. Robert Frost Directions: After reading “Fire and Ice” by Robert Frost. I think I know enough of hate To say that for destruction ice Is also great And would suffice.
and for everything wich is natural which is infinite which is yes (i who have died am alive again today. and whatever is done by only me is your doing.Seeker Of Truth ee cummings poems i carry your heart with me i carry your heart with me(i carry it in my heart)i am never without it(anywhere i go you go... leaning back in my arms for life's not a paragraph And death i think is no parenthesis may my heart always be open to little. wholly to be a fool while Spring is in the world my blood approves.my darling) i fear no fate(for you are my fate. Don't cry .. then laugh. and kisses are a better fate than wisdom lady i swear by all flowers.this is the birth day of life and love and wings:and of the gay great happening illimitably earth) how should tasting touching hearing seeing breathing any-lifted from the no of all nothing-human merely being doubt unimaginable You? (now the ears of my ears awake and now the eyes of my eyes are opened since feeling is first.. since feeling is first who pays any attention to the syntax of things will never wholly kiss you.my sweet)i want no world(for beautiful you are my world.the best gesture of my brain is less than your eyelids' flutter which says we are for each other.my true) and it's you are whatever a moon has always meant and whatever a sun will always sing is you here is the deepest secret nobody knows (here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud and the sky of the sky of a tree called life.my dear.which grows higher than the soul can hope or mind can hide) and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart i carry your heart(i carry it in my heart) seeker of truth follow no path all paths lead where truth is here i thank you God for this most amazing i thank You God for this most amazing day:for the leaping greenly spirits of trees and a blue true dream of sky. and this is the sun's birthday. may my heart always be open to little birds who are the secrets of living whatever they sing is better than to know and if men should not hear them men are old may my mind stroll about hungry and fearless and thirsty and supple and even if it's sunday may i be wrong for whenever men are right they are not young and may myself do nothing usefully and love yourself so more than truly there's never been quite such a fool who could fail pulling all the sky over him with one smile .
the point of poem is to convey a “sensual image” 5. tried out new techniques 3. no theme has to be conveyed in poem Haiku pg 650 Oread pg 651 In a Station of the Metro pg 652 A Pact pg 654 The Red Wheelbarrow pg 666 Birches pg 708 This Is Just to Say pg 669 Chicago pg 699 Mending Wall pg 704 Fire and Ice Ars Poetica pg 678 seeker of truth i thank God for this amazing The Man with the Blue Guitar pg 692 anyone lived in a pretty how town Stopping By the Woods on a Snowy Evening pg 711 Acquainted with the Night 713 since feeling is first i carry your heart with me may my heart always be open to little Part II: List the author of each work. Poems must explore an universal theme 5.Experimentalism Experiementalism 1. Poems should rhyme or have a tangible reason for not rhyming—blank verse 4. Abandon traditional form 2. Abandon traditional form 2. the poem must elevate. Break rules of punctuation/capitalization Modern Poetry 1910-1930 Identify which of the following categories in which the poem fits. 3. Haiku pg 650 Oread pg 651 In a Station of the Metro pg 652 A Pact pg 654 The Red Wheelbarrow pg 666 Birches pg 708 This Is Just to Say pg 669 Chicago pg 699 Mending Wall pg 704 Fire and Ice Ars Poetica pg 678 seeker of truth i thank God for this amazing The Man with the Blue Guitar pg 692 anyone lived in a pretty how town Stopping By the Woods on a Snowy Evening pg 711 Acquainted with the Night 713 since feeling is first i carry your heart with me Traditionalism 1. eliminate unnecessary words 4. . Return to traditional form 2. or educate. wrote about new subjects or old subjects in new ways 3. imagist. illuminate. Imagism 1. Explored new themes in new ways 4.. It’s okay to try something new in moderation. Remembera poem may exhibit characteristics of one or more type(s) of poem. and/or traditionalist. tried out new teachniques 3. Be prepared to explain how the poem is experimentalist.
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