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Introduction 1)........ since the dawn of time/All around the world/As long as there is technology 2) Throughout history........../It is commonly seen 3) It is agreed that .............../It is supported/The idea is not supported/It is disagreed 4)This argument will be proven by looking at how
Supporting Paragraph 1 5) For one,..................../Firstly 6) For example...../For instance 7)This makes it clear..../Because of this example... 8)As this shows... Supporting Paragraph 2 9) In addition to this..../Secondly/Moreover 10) An instance illustrating this in action is..../For instance 11) Thus ....../As can be seen from the example.... 12) It is obvious from this that.....
Conclusion Paragraph 13) Following this look at ..... 14) It has been proven that ..../It has been shown that 15) Thus it is recommended /Thus it is predicted that... Essay Question Living with animals such as owning a pet dog, cat or bird is good for people. Do you agree or disagree? Use personal examples to illustrate your responses
Human beings have shared the world with animals since the dawn the time.Throughtout history animals have provided humanity not only with sustenance and work but also companionship. It is agreed that living with animals is beneficial for people. This argument will be proven by looking at how sharing a home with an animal can both encourage feelings of empathy and teach responsibility For one, common dwelling between animal and human can help people understand the feelings and needs of others. For example when I was young I was required to take care of family s two dogs Caring for these dogs demanded I be conscious of their needs and I believe this was a very key lesion in my development as an empathetic person. As my example shows living with animals have a positive effect on people. In addition to this people who share homes with animals are taught how to become responsible individuals. Returning to the prior example from my youth, as a boy I had to follow a rigorous schedule to ensure my dogs were fed on time, given attention and taken outside few times a day. This daily practice in being responsible for another living thing had a very strong impact on my sense of duty. As results such as this are common among all who own pets, the benefits animals bring to people are clear. Following this look at how living with animals increases a person s sense of empathy and understanding of responsibility, it has been proven that sharing a home with another living thing has more pros than cons. Thus, owning a pet is highly recommended.
Task 1 General
You went on a sightseeing trip with a tour company but did not like it. Write a letter to the company manager to complain. In your letter include:
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why you went on the trip what you did not like about it what you suggest the company do to improve their service for future visitors
To the manager of Gordon Travel, I am writing this letter to you to bring to your attention a few shortcomings in the service you provide.
Last week, I traveled to Kiev as part of your Eastern Europe Journey program in an effort to better educate myself about this region of the world. Although the hotel and meals were fine, the tour guide on our bus was less than adequate. He seemed ill prepared for the tour and kept forgetting facts and the names of the locations we were visiting. To be honest, he seemed so unsure of himself when speaking to our group that I have the feeling he had never been to Kiev before. In addition to this, although he was able to speak broken Russian, it was evident he could not speak any Ukrainian. This of course made the tourists aboard our bus even more skeptical of the facts he was sharing regarding Ukrainian linguistic history. I hope you use my feedback constructively to improve the quality of your tour for future visitors to the Ukraine. Ensuring your patrons receive an English-speaking Ukrainian native as a tour guide would be a good start. Good luck, Ryan
Write to your community hospice and volunteer your time to assist old people for free. In your letter, explain:
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why you want to help old people what you can do exactly what time you are available
To the Richmond Hospice, I am writing to enquire whether you are in need of additional volunteers at the moment. Allow me to introduce myself and share a bit of background regarding my request. For the past ten years, I have found great fulfillment in working with the elderly at the Peace Hospice in Carleton County. While working there, I served dinner to the residents every Sunday evening and had the opportunity to chat with people from all walks of life. For me, being able to comfort people in the later stages of their lives is very rewarding. As you know, the Peace Hospice will be unfortunately closing as of next week and many of the residents are being transferred to you. Thus, I was hoping I could continue to serve dinner between 4 and 7 pm every Sunday at your facility. If you could find some way to accommodate this request, I would be most grateful. Looking forward to hearing form you, Ryan
ou have to reschedule a meeting your company has recently pledged to have with members of another company. In your letter:
Do you think your team could arrange to see us at our headquarters on the 18th at 10 am? Please excuse the confusion. our financial situation this year has been dire. Please take note of my new address as printed on the envelope encasing this message. late last week I returned home to find my basement flooded. I trust you can understand the difficult times we are in now. If possible. As a result of this. Your friend. Unfortunately. Although the problem was addressed before major damage occurred. You see. Ryan . things took yet another turn for the worse this past week as our CFO decided to resign.y y y explain why you need to amend the schedule apologize for the amendment suggest a new meeting time Dear Sir/Madam. most people in our office have become burdened with additional work. I am writing to apologize for not updating you on my new living status. It also has cable TV and pool table. making our meeting on the 12th simply impossible at the moment. we would like to postpone our meeting by a week. In your letter include: y y y an explanation for your sudden move a description your new home in what way your new home is better than your old home Dear Curtis. my landlord offered to have me move to one of his other houses until everything is completely rectified. Please allow me to apologize on behalf of Company XYZ for any inconvenience this has caused you. which will make returning to my old place difficult! Again. I¶m sorry that I was not able to let you know ahead of time that I was moving. I am not complaining about this move as the new place is much roomier and has a nice view of the park. Ryan Task1General Write a letter to your friend apologizing for not informing them about a recent move you made to another city. As you know. It appears that the cold weather we have been having caused a water supply pipe running along the roof of the basement to burst. Personally. I regret to inform you that it looks like our team will not be able to uphold the arrangement. I am writing to you regarding our plans to meet this 12th December 2011.
As you know. I am writing to ask a favour with regards to the move I told you about last we met. Allow me to highlight why I believe he is deserving of this award. I hope you agree that he is the right choice to receive your award. After two months of searching. Doctor Alan Charlsby has brought both prestige and opportunity to our Highland community. As you can see. I am writing in response to your request for nominations of individuals that have made significant contributions to our home of Highland. In your letter include: y y y why you are moving a description of the new flat why you need your friend¶s help Dear Richard.Your local community newspaper has announced a competition to acknowledge a person who has greatly contributed to your town or city. Write a letter to the editor about a person you know who deserves the award. Could I ask you to pitch in? My wife and I would be delighted to offer you dinner and a chat over wine in . my wife¶s favourite. Good luck with the selection process. he has committed his life to education and has helped our community¶s young scholars achieve excellence in their medical studies. and I do not believe this would have been possible without the efforts of Doctor Charlsby. I had the pleasure of meeting of meeting Doctor Charlsby during our preliminary medical studies 30 years ago and we have remained professional colleagues since. Today. my wife and I are planning to relocate to the other side of town to be closer to our work. we are short a few hands to help lugging the stuff this Saturday. Ryan Write a letter to a friend asking for help moving to a new flat. a small studio for her to paint in. perseverance and charity. a spare bedroom and study. currently heading the medical studies department of Highland Medical School. The person I would like to nominate is Doctor Alan Charlsby. Doctor Charlsby. In your letter include: y y y what his/her personal qualifications are how you know the person how he/she contributed to the community To the editor of the Highland Local Times. There are two balconies. we have finally found a place we feel comfortable in. Highland Medical School is considered among the best institutions for medicine in the country. I hope you have been keeping well and that this letter finds you and your wife in good spirits. a new barbecue and. Anyway. is a model citizen whose life has been devoted to hard work. Despite being offered higher paying positions in larger cities.
Please let me know where and how to send the damaged goods back to you. Talk about : y y y what happened describe the problem and damage clearly say what you want the landlord to do Dear Clarence. Ryan You purchased electronic equipment online and found it damaged when it arrived. I came across an external data drive that I felt could help me backup the hard drives of a few old computers I have in my office. Your friend. I also expect you to pay for the postage of this return. I regret having to inform you that my wife and I had a small accident in the kitchen of your apartment yesterday.compensation. I imagine his must have happened during transit as this crack is way too obvious to have been missed by the packaging department of your company. the pot cracked open spilling . Ryan Write to your landlord about minor accident you had in the kitchen yesterday that has caused some damage. my wife brought a large quantity of water to a boil in a clay pot as a base for a soup she was making. Expecting prompt action. In your letter: y y y describe the product describe the damage explain what you want to happen as a result of this incident Dear Sir/Madam. I am writing to you regarding damaged goods I have received from your company. I am writing this letter to let you know precisely what happened. The product code is AA44-57 and I am attaching a copy of my receipt to this letter for your reference. exposing the inner wiring. You see. After the water reached a rolling boil. of course. Last night. You can imagine my surprise when the product arrived with a large crack in the outer casing. while perusing your website last week. No pressure to join. but it would really help us a lot if you could find the time. Write a letter of complaint to the manager of the online company. I think it goes without saying that I am expecting you to reissue a working data drive to me.
the linoleum lining of the kitchen floor has been almost completely mangled. I already have plans to be in Toronto next week and could pick it up from you in person. Luckily. In the event you have this book. as we feel terrible for being the indirect cause of this problem. but a 2002 edition is available under the alternative title µAfter the Curtain¶. Tell your friend: y y y What dishes were included in the meal Where you ate the meal Which dish in particular you liked the most Dear Nik.describe the book . The first edition of the book was published in 1999. my wife was not injured. I am writing to you regarding a book I cannot seem to track down here in Ottawa.boiling water all over the floor. Hoping to hear back from you soon. Write a letter to them describing a meal you recently had.and how you would pay for it Dear Toronto Books and More. My wife and I would like to offer to cover the cost of redoing the floor. Write a letter to a bookshop in another city asking for the book. You see.explain why you need the book . I would be most grateful if you could hold a copy for me. In fact. Yours truly. . We would like you to come over this weekend so we can plan what the next step is regarding this issue. I am writing to you to share a culinary experience I had that really opened my palate to a world of new flavours. The book is entitled µThe Spoils of War¶ and is an account of American economic growth following the collapse of the Soviet Union. I trust you have been keeping well since we last spoke. However. In your letter: . I would like to express how important it is that I find this book. I am currently completing an Economics degree at Ottawa University and have recently been told by my professor that this publication would greatly aid my final term paper. Ryan Your friend works as a publisher for a food-related magazine. Ryan You need to read a book that cannot be found in the book shops in your area. very little of the floor is still recognizable.
Among the many dishes were sticky rice balls submerged in vegetable soup. Ryan Write a letter to a friend in a foreign country. all courses were vegetarian. what kind of job do you think a design major like me could get there? How would you describe the working conditions? I am really looking forward to your response. As I know you would also marvel at this dish. It looks like this question has been repeated a few times in various cities around the world. For one. In your letter you should: y y y ask what kind of job you would be able to get there ask what the working conditions are there explain why you want to work there Ryan¶s note: y I posted a response to a very similar question a few weeks back. we¶ll have to catch up over chili dogs at a Giants game! Bye for now. It has always been my dream to live in New York City and to experience life within one of the world¶s most multicultural metropolises. steamed bamboo and an assortment of grilled mushrooms. Last night. Dear Anna. my Anhui colleagues treated me to a traditional dinner. I have decided to pursue a career in design in New York City and was hoping you could provide me with some guidance based on your experiences there. which I found particularly charming. You can thus try it when I return home! See you in a few weeks. However. I have recently moved to the province of Anhui in China. I am writing to you to tell you that. When I arrive. like you. Write a letter to the photographer asking them to work at your next family event. In keeping with the religion. The meal was served in a Buddhist temple sitting atop a quaint little mountain. I hope you are in good spirits and health.As you know. Your letter should include: . Ryan ou are really impressed with the work of a photographer who captured guests at your friend¶s party. It has been much too long since we last met. I am a little anxious about a few things. my favourite course by far was an aged tofu spread that is eaten with crunchy rice strips. The spiciness of this dish really complimented the saltiness of the rest of the meal. However. Let me start by saying that I am so excited to finally have the opportunity to travel to a foreign country. I was sure to take a jar of the spicy tofu with me.
I was quite taken by the portraits. the purpose of this letter is to bring a problem we had to your attention. All photos are to be in wallet and standard portrait sizes. photos of the baptism itself and larger group shots of the entire family during the reception to follow. Despite our best efforts to ignore them. Write a letter to the manager of this attraction and say: -what you enjoyed about the attraction -what was the problem -what you suggest the manager do to rectify the problem To the management of the Ottawa Strawberry Fields Company. there is a photo of Richard¶s grandmother and grandfather. Hoping you will join us next month. Honestly. 3. really captured the evening well and appear to be among the highest quality photography work I have ever seen. Dear Paul Lawson of Lawson Photography. Basically. I suppose it goes without saying that I am hoping I can convince you to join my family next month for the baptism of my cousin Robert¶s son. . now framed and sitting atop Richard¶s piano. The photos. we were accosted by a number of aggressive peddlers looking to sell us touristy goods. Please allow me to explain what happened to fully put you in the picture. you had a minor problem. Although the experience was an enjoyable one. My family was fortunate enough to visit your fruit farm this past weekend during the last leg of our Canadian tour. In particular. these peddlers made attempts to prevent us from leaving and yelled obscenities at us when we refused to purchase their cheap goods. as we were departing and walking to our rented car. Which picture you liked most and why. Thus. Although we had a wonderful time picking berries and learning about Canadian agricultural history. Ryan You recently visited a tourist attraction. I am aware that the sellers we met in your parking lot are not affiliated with your company. however I would expect the Ottawa Strawberry Fields Company to do what it can to keep these sorts of people away from its patrons. which reflects their happiness well and makes them look quite dignified in their old age. We¶re hoping to have both indoor and outdoor small group shots. 2. Why you would like them to work for you. I am writing to you regarding your work and am hoping I can provide you more of it. both Holocaust survivors.1. couples and group shots you took at my friend Richard¶s party last weekend. What the family event is and what photo sizes you will require.
Victor Kempler¶s interpretation of the character Sebastian made for good accompaniment.Regards. though. include: -the details of the event -what you most liked about the event -a polite criticism of something you thought could be improved Dear Sir or Madam. and I am sure everyone in the audience was as mesmerized as I was. Congratulations on your fantastic effort! You have left Brisbane waiting with enthusiasm for your return next year. Write a letter to the organizers of this event congratulating them on a successful production. you should say: -how long you have known him for -what are his qualifications -why he is suitable for the position . He is asking you to write a recommendation letter to the principal of the school. I personally found her performance particularly astonishing and was the highlight of the evening for me. It was a magnificent show. and one that paled in comparison to the event¶s strengths. In your letter. we look forward to your annual displays of the world¶s most celebrated writer. Here in Brisbane. Ryan An online student of mine recently told me they saw the following question on the Task 1 portion of their General exam: An annual event was recently held in your area. Let me start by saying your choice to cast Alice Piper for the lead role was very fitting. This is only a minor imperfection. however I have to say that I feel an older actor would have probably been more suitable. I am writing to congratulate you on your recent performance of Shakespeare¶s Twelfth Night this past Saturday at the Mickelson Theatre of the Arts in Brisbane. Bravo! Ryan Here is a Task 1 question as seen on the General IELTS exam in Brazil this month: A friend of yours is applying for a job as a sports instructor for teenagers in a summer school in Australia. In your letter.
Sincerely. which he has held to this day. he was offered the title of Academic Director at the prestigious Youth Melbourne Academy of Leaders. With all of his experiences and qualifications. It would be my pleasure to give you some background information on him and explain why I feel he would be a wonderful addition to your faculty. Dr. As a languages major myself. Elliot Carter. His popularity with the students garnered him the µfavourite teacher¶ award at each of those schools. I was very interested in taking this course to help fast track my studies at Homer. Dear Sir. Our professor. who recently sent you an application and aspires to be a part of your team this summer.Here is my suggested response: To whom it may concern. we are three weeks into the course and have spent little time analyzing Bantu-related topics. hence his enthusiasm regarding working at your institution. Ryan Write a letter to the principle of your college to inform him that you have joined an evening course that appears not to match its description in the college brochure. I have known Elliot for the better part of seven years as we studied Adolescent Education together at Brent University in Canberra. In your letter. . however. You see. I have no doubt he will bring a lot of talent to you. Following this experience. I am writing to you regarding a course I am taking at Homer College that appears to bear little resemblance to its description in the school¶s brochure. I hope this letter encourages you to add Elliot to your roster of teachers. In addition to graduating with distinction. Currently. Yule. about one month ago I came across your brochure which described a Bantu Languages weekend course that could be applied as a credit towards the university¶s Bachelor of Arts degree. He has informed me that he is eager to take on a new challenge. Personally. I am writing to you on behalf of my friend. Elliot spent each of his university summers volunteering at various schools similar to your own. you should include: -why you have joined the course -how the course is different from the brochure description -what action you expect the principal to take Start your letter with: Dear Sir.
As this isn¶t really in keeping with the brochure¶s description. you know that in additional to a salutation and a farewell your Task 1 response is going to have 3 paragraphs outlining: (1) the purpose of your letter. I would hope someone would have a word with Dr. Yule to help him stay more on topic.seems very accomplished but has a tendency to let his lectures shift towards general African history. . What I would appreciate is if the college could get back to me to confirm whether this is a history or languages course. If the latter. « Over the past few weeks I have noticed« The cause of my concern is rooted in« (3) It would thrill me if you could consider« I would be so grateful if you could« I expect this situation to be resolved in a timely manner. It is felt making public transportation available free of charge ramifies more advantages than disadvantages. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this change? Most large cities today boast numerous public transit options. This will be proven by looking at how a free public transportation system encourages more environmentally friendly living and provides accessibility to low-income individuals. (2) a description of the situation and (3) a statement regarding what you as the writer would like to see happen. I demand you rectify what has happened and expect« ublic transportation could be made free of charge. I¶m sure you can understand I feel a bit baffled as to what the nature of this course is. available to residents for a fee. what has happened is« To date. Ryan Sentence starters for General IELTS Task 1 If you have already seen my video series regarding letter writing. Here is a quick rundown of some sentence starters you can use in each of these 3 sections of your letter: (1) I am writing to bring to your attention« As you may or may not be aware« The purpose of this letter is to draw your attention to« This letter is being written to you in hopes« (2) Basically. Thank you. Whether providing these options free of charge is a positive thing is often a highly debated topic.
On the one hand. it is argued that being equally versed in both national and international news is important. Thus. it is clear that removing the fare charged to public transit passengers has more pros than cons. often focus on local news issues. the congestion that city experiences on the road is greatly reduced. Having fewer vehicles on the road in turn reduces a city¶s overall carbon footprint immensely. This would thus heighten a low-income earner¶s chances of gaining financial ground. electronic news sources rival the traditional printed newspaper in popularity. it is understandable why some people focus their attention more on national news reports than international ones. and this is an area of news Canada¶s elderly people are interested in. it is considered impossible to state that one of these reporting types is better than the other. regardless of their economical situation. For example. as more people use a city¶s public transit system. on the other hand.For one. Today. act as good examples here as their lifestyles employ more foreign travel and thus require a working knowledge of developments on the global stage. It is agreed that the Internet will one day replace the newspaper as the most . People who typically share this point of view usually defend it by arguing that as cultures. It is hoped this alternative is considered as a future growth option for emerging cities. is difficult to say. However. To what extent do you agree or disagree? The advent of the Internet has marked a dramatic shift in the way people around the world consume information. In addition to this. economies and borders blur. many people believe their nation¶s interior issues should take reporting precedence over exterior ones. As this example shows. privileging a city¶s people with free transit service boasts more benefits than drawbacks. who tend to travel less than their younger counterparts. a proper understanding of the world is necessary to retain competitiveness. Both opinions will be analyzed in this essay before a reasoned conclusion is drawn. For example. As this example shows. After analyzing the above. Most would argue a basic understanding of events at both a national and international level is important. the benefit to removing public transportation fares can be seen. it is understandable why this point of view has garnered support. Young people. however. After analyzing all sides of the above debate. Discuss both views and offer your opinion. any city that employs this change would empower its people with the ability to live and work in entirely different parts of a city. allowing people to use a city¶s transportation services without charge can be exceptionally helpful to low-income residents. For instance. encouraging people to use public transportation through fare elimination has many benefits to the environment. The Internet is going to replace the newspaper as the most popular source of news and information in the future. Thus. others feel thoroughly understanding international events is more important than focusing on local news. elderly people in Canada. The reason for this is that these domestic stories apply more directly to day-to-day life in Canada. while others think it is more important to be aware of international news. Whether one is more important than the other. such as university students. Some people focus on national news. Thus.
This brings with it more negative than positive ramifications for humanity. like most news websites. it has been proven that electronic news sources will one day be more widely consumed than their printed alternatives. This position will be proven by looking at the advantages of versatility and dynamism the Internet has over traditional printed news. Firstly. for example. The problem many students run into is that they misinterpret what this instruction sentence is really asking them. or lack thereof. and this in turn causes the overall relevance of their essay response to suffer. students would be best to follow a discussion essay format and analyze the merits. the New York Times¶s website can be accessed from any location with an Internet connection. you can see the instruction sentence is directly telling the student how they are expected to formulate a response. I would like to share the 5 most common mistakes I see in the IELTS essays I correct for students online: Common mistake 1 Misunderstanding the instruction portion of the essay question All IELTS essay questions include a sentence that tells the student precisely what they are expected to do in their written response. As this example shows. In many countries. I will highlight the instruction sentence in blue: The Internet is replacing many traditional forms of communication. (Phrases like this ask students to analyze the opinions of others. argue. In this brief article.) . the printed version of this paper is not distributed. and thus inaccessible. The Gulf News website. houses entire catalogues of video that users may peruse. However. If you have found this is a problem for you. Discuss this and state your opinion. Thus.used source of news and information. Here. Thus. Let¶s look at an example IELTS essay question to illustrate. analyze. This is a resource that paper news sources cannot match. it is clear that as time goes on preference for electronic news sources will grow. Typically. electronic news resources are much more mobile and convenient than traditional newspapers. In addition to this. After looking at how the Internet betters printed news in the areas of mobility and resourcefulness. this sentence will include words likediscuss. let¶s go over a few sample instruction sentences and state clearly what they are asking: Discuss both sides of this argument. Compare the printed and electronic versions of the New York Times. of the topic or position presented in their essay question. support or refute and the student is expected to respond accordingly. information distributed through the Internet can include dynamic content not possible among printed mediums. it is clear that someday the Internet is going to take the place of the newspaper as the most in demand source of media. the accessible audience with which the New York Times connects is widened via the Internet. Because of this.
please refer to the videos available here. Thus. Here. us. Don¶t be afraid to repeat words that appear in your essay question in your thesis. However. students try to paraphrase important keywords and phrases from their question in their thesis and this typically alters the original meaning to a certain degree. Thus. The solution to this is to write passively. Common mistake 3 The use of personal pronouns in essays Using personal pronouns in your essay (for example: I. instead of writing something like: I believe worldwide poverty will one day be eradicated.What is your opinion on the subject? (Here.) (If you are unfamiliar with how to properly write an argument or discussion essay. Repeating words from your question will help ensure your examiner sees a direct link between it and your essay. we would respond in a discussion essay format. «try: It is believed poverty will one day be eradicated. sharing our personal opinion at the end. our) will not cause a student to lose marks on their exam. responding in an argument styled essay would be best. All too often. the essay question is asking you to respond directly with your opinion.) Do you agree or disagree? Share personal examples to support your response. we. . So. Nothing ruins an argument essay faster than a problematic thesis. an essay question that reads: Do you agree or disagree that students should be required to study a language in high school? «could be responded to with the thesis: It is agreed that students should be required to study a language in high school. (Now we are being faced with 2 instruction sentences.) Common mistake 2 Writing a thesis that does not respond directly to the essay question In the event you are given an IELTS question that requires a response written in an argument essay style.) What is your opinion on the subject? Analyze both sides in your essay. you. overusing them causes an essay to sound informal in nature and not very academic. The most effective way to do this is by responding in an argument essay format. (This question instructs the student to include examples from their life while arguing one side of a particular position. it is imperative you compose a clear and relevant thesis.
«is setting the stage for a much stronger argument than a student who writes: For example. Common mistake 5 Writing with grammatical accuracy The last mistake in our list is basic grammatical accuracy. Should parents limit the time their children spend on such activities? Most would agree that modern lifestyles involve a barrage of electronic distractions. Having a writing coach can also be immensely helpful. Unfortunately. Thus. a student who writes: For example. As this example shows. run-on sentences. children who idle away time in front of electronic toys tend to develop poor study habits. the second example¶s broadness makes the example seem less tangible and thus lowers its overall quality. you want to use something that can show your argument in action. income growth among developing countries has the led to the improving of living standards in many areas. children engage these electronic pass-times for extended periods and this can lead to negative outcomes. computer games and the Internet.Common mistake 4 Using ambiguous examples in your IELTS essay It is important to remember that when including an example in your IELTS essay. Take childhood physical development as an example. Thus. . GDP growth in China has led to the improving of living standards throughout the country. As most would agree. such as television. it is obvious that parents are best to restrict the amount of time children plug in to these sorts of mediums. a child¶s health can be negatively affected via overexposure to electronic device usage. This is best done by referring to areal-life event. a parent¶s control of a child¶s media intake is required for the child¶s well-being. it is argued parents should control the quantity of time children commit to idle endeavors. concise sentences and to link these sentences with cohesive phrases. The best tip I can offer those students struggling with nagging grammar issues is to compose your essay entirely of short. This amount of exercise simply is not possible if this young person logs several hours in front of a computer every day. Firstly. In addition to this. person. a recent study in Canada revealed a negative correlation between the daily number of hours a high school student spends in front of the television and their marks in school. company or place. This will be proven by looking at how engaging these sorts of hobbies for long periods of time can negatively affect a child¶s studies and health. there is a clear and very obvious relationship between television exposure and academic performance. As you can see. The most common errors I see in the essays I correct are sentence fragments. a child¶s physical development depends directly on their receiving a certain amount of exercise on a daily basis. improper preposition usage. For example. Thus. As this example shows. verb tense issues and mistakes in a student¶s lexical selection. Most children spend a lot of time watching television and playing computer games.
As the world becomes more industrialized and increases in population in the twentyfirst century. housing. it has been proven that proper parental guidance must include efforts to ration a child¶s television. housing. Firstly. children of double-income families are often indirectly taught that money is more important than family unity. it is a proven fact that Canadian children of single. For instance.¶) . working parents tend not to perform as well in school as their classmates from nuclear familial arrangements boasting a stay-at-home mother or father. parents who choose their professional goals over raising their children run the risk of setting poor examples for their offspring. It is argued that this form of rearing does not benefit children as much as when they are raised directly by their biological parents. computer and Internet exposure. It is hoped parents everywhere commit to do what they can to ensure they are the primary guidance-providers of their young ones. it is clear that young people are not benefited when they are raised by guardians. young children are looked after during the day while their parents go to work. These children grow up with unhealthy opinions about the significance of income level and could potentially become adults who judge other human beings based on monetary status. children are best raised by their parents. After analyzing the above points. Although humanity must use a certain number of resources to sustain itself. children are cared for by daytime guardians while their parents work to build careers. Some people think that human needs for farmland. and industry are more important that saving land for endangered animals. the use of these resources in an irresponsible manner is disagreed with. As this reasoning shows. young children regularly separated from their parents may experience feelings of abandonment and this can lead to other problems. the merits of regular parental presence can be seen. This will be proven by looking at how such a family arrangement causes misguided values and feelings of abandonment among the young people in question. a tremendous amount of land to be converted for farmland. Thus. Ecology Harmony (<±Is this the name of a company? Why is µharmony¶ capitalized?) and conservation for future generations are valid reasons which shall be analysed to support this point of view. What is your opinion of this family arrangement? Customs regarding the raising of children vary from on culture to another. It is hoped this essay helps persuade parents to more involved forms of parenting. For example. This has caused. In many countries. and will continue to cause. This example shows that there is a clear link between a child¶s academic performance and the level of attention they receive from their parents. space will also diminish. It has thus been proven that parents should avoid working patterns that are detrimental to the development of their children. Secondly. In a sense. they are raised by guardians and not their biological parents. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. In many countries.After analyzing the negative ramifications too must exposure to electronic mediums can have on young people. commercial and industrial usage thereby destroying the homes of endangered animals. (<±This outline sentence is awkward. Try: µThis point of view will be proven by analyzing the importance of ecological harmony and the conserving of natural resources for future generations.
Government sectors and environmental organisation must act to ensure that lands are conserved for this purpose (<±For what purpose? µHuman needs and greed?¶). then the unique species can become endangered or possibly extinct forever. If one does not take care of these habitats. air pollution and traffic congestion which are detrimental to human health in the long run. teachers and parents must make efforts to educate our (<±Please stop using personal pronouns when they are not essential. (<±Where is the link back to your thesis? In this paragraph.) The world has already become so commercialized and artificial and therefore.) younger generations their responsibilities and the importance to protect the ecological harmony for the longevity of the mother earth. For example. Let¶s go over them one at a time. there are limited open spaces. (<±OK. Just write simple sentences that communicate your point accurately. They make your writing sound like it was written by an adolescent. In summary. it won¶t matter how many academic-sounding words you use. please say this clearly.The world is created (<± µis created¶? It is being created now?) with an ecological balance for the sustainability of our mother earth. some parts of the world like Hong Kong have become so industrialized that one can only see buildings. Last but not least. There are still a handful of issues we need to deal with before your writing will become truly effective. if China does not take some serious actions to protect the pandas. These industrialized countries have become so artificially materialistic. are you talking about µsharing nature¶ or are you talking about humanity having a µnatural environment to live in¶? This concluding sentence should read something like: µThus. it is clear that humanity must make use of the resources it has at hand in a responsible manner to help preserve their purity. I feel like you are trying very hard to sound academic. Can one imagine if the Chinese younger generations can only find and see their very own unique animal in the books and not in real life? It will be totally meaningless! (<±Take these 2 sentences out. (<± What is your point? All I see in this sentence is an incoherent grouping of words about nature. Dear student. For example. You are not writing a high school essay.¶) Secondly. construction. then it (<±¶It?¶ There is only one panda?) will eventually become extinct. it is evident that the ecological impact and lives of endangered species must be dealt with seriously and definitely must not be sacrificed at the expense of human needs and greed. As can be seen. When I read your writing. You don¶t need to do this. you will receive a disappointing mark. all living flora and fauna. What are you talking about here? Are you trying to say that the planet was created to be shared by all living things? If so. fresh air and natural environment with animals for individuals to enjoy. If your IELTS examiner cannot understand what you are saying. It is important that the lives of such God given creatures are kept well and passed onto our future generations to enjoy as these are naturalworld heritages which no money can buy.) As a result of this development. Hong Kong is a good example. almost every country has unique animals that belong to a particular habitat. housing estates. there is an urgent need for humans to ensure that the lives of these endangered animals are treated as a top priority for the future generations.) Therefore human needs must not overtake and destroy the ecology of the earth or else this will result in natural disasters. the idea of using the world¶s natural resources in an irresponsible manner cannot be supported. greedy and unhealthy to live in as a result of not saving some space for our precious nature. .
For instance. I had to reword your thesis to make it clearer. our. who owned and ran a car dealership. this same friend runs a very profitable company. us. I found that the topics covered in this unit were extremely helpful the following year when I moved on to university and out of my parents¶ house. For example. Please review my other changes above. Don¶t use µI. If it doesn¶t. it is agreed that high school aged students should be taught how to manage money. having an understanding of monetary manipulation is a skill that everyone in the world needs to have at least basic knowledge of. Firstly. In addition to this. it should be followed by a singular noun (in the case above: country). Thus. you. Do you agree or disagree? Often. Ryan y Several students told me they saw the following question on their General exam in Australia. However.As you can see above. (Thanks to those students for passing on the info. teaching adolescents about how to regulate their funds helps to prepare them for independence. Your thesis should show an obvious connection to your question.) High school aged students should be taught how to manage money. As my . I feel there is very little cohesion in your writing. Good luck in your next attempt. during my senior year in high school. As this shows. I was privileged enough to be enrolled in an accounting course which taught a unit of study entitled µManaging Money¶. providing young people with information regarding how to handle money is a good thing. no doubt partly because of the financial information his father bestowed upon him. Please watch your grammar. which makes it difficult to follow. One thing I don¶t understand is why your thesis is not discussed at the end of each of your supporting paragraphs. one of the merits of educating students about money matters is that it often fosters business success later in life. be careful of word forms. It makes your essay sound like it has been written by an middle school student and not an adult. If you use a word like µevery¶. we. a high school friend of mine was taught how to manage money by his father. the Task Achievement portion of your mark will suffer. This will be shown by analyzing how such a course can both instill good business sense in young people as well as prepare them for the working world they face after finishing their education. people debate whether personal money management is a suitable topic for a high school classroom. etc¶ in your essay. Today. µEcology¶ and µecological¶ are different and need to be used in their correct context. Also. I¶m sorry if any of this sounds disappointing. but I really feel I need to push you to change. If you submit this kind of writing on your examination you will receive a terrible mark. my.
This will be proven by showing how this practice helps children garner both basic financial skills and a sense of responsibility. giving children a small amount of money every week helps their early understanding of financial matters. Thus. it is hoped that high school aged students the world over be exposed to some kind of training regarding the handling of money. Thus. The positive correlation between these trends makes it obvious that parents who work too much are acting as a detriment to the mental welfare of their children. Firstly. it is recommended that the modern family budget time for their developing young people. it has been proven that this course of study is a positive thing. Nowadays we see an increase in social problems involving teenagers. it is argued that providing children with a modest amount of pocket money on a weekly basis is helpful to their development.experience shows. Do you agree or disagree? The nuclear family of today is much different than that of fifty years ago. teaching young people how to be financially independent can be helpful to them later in their lives. It is agreed that the social problems adolescents often experience are the direct result of their parents busy work schedules. teenagers of absent parents often do not get the direction they need to develop as socially competent individuals. For example. statistics clearly show a link between parental neglect and the numbers of youths afflicted with social problems. Providing children with pocket money on a weekly basis can benefit them in the future. Firstly. Many people believe that it is because parents spend more time at work and less with their children. For instance. it has been statistically proven that depressed teenagers in Canada typically interact with their parents less than one hour per day. This will be proven by looking at a Canadian case study of this phenomenon in action as well as the universal correlation that exists between youth social problems and neglectful parents. it can be seen that parents who spend copious amounts of time away from their children cause more harm than good. Thus. It is increasingly common for both parents to work. After looking at how adolescents are benefitted through basic monetary instruction. adolescent people develop social abnormalities. it is clear that parents need to prioritize more time for their teenage children. even if this means reducing the number of hours they work. After analyzing this topic. Do you agree or disagree? Although sometimes a contested issue. and this is often argued to be the cause of social problems among their teenage children. For example. this . the number of teenagers suffering with anxiety is a figure that moves in tandem with the number of dual-income households. my friend¶s eight year old son has been given one Canadian dollar every week for the past year. This example makes it clear that without parental guidance. It is thus clear that parents need to spend less time working for the sake of their offspring. When the practice was first commenced. Secondly.
As this example shows. providing children with pocket money every week leads them to have constructive experiences regarding financial issues. parents are encouraged to consider adopting this regime. the rejuvenation of old traditions for the purpose of making money brings new life and audiences to cultural practices that may have otherwise been forgotten. it is hoped this phenomenon continues to grow in practice the world over. especially in the tourism industry.boy would often spend his money frivolously on items of little value. in my own childhood I was given very small amounts of money every week and allowed to spend it freely. the exploitation of their cultural heritage provides them with honest work and a livelihood they can be proud of. Ryan¶s note: y I am unsure how true my Kenyan example is (my apologies if this is indeed inaccurate). the reawakening of a tradition is a positive thing and demonstrates why the idea of making money through the use of one¶s culture should be supported. As this makes clear. Secondly. This will be proven by looking at how monetizing cultural traditions helps to both create jobs and bring new audiences to old art forms and ancestral practices. For instance. Thus. However. This ancient art form has thus garnered broader interest and a much wider audience. After looking at how the monetizing of ancestral practices both provides jobs and popularizes old art forms. it is felt this trend is much more positive than negative. As this example shows. in Kenya tourists often pay to experience Kenyan safaris and traditional fireside dinners and dancing. After analyzing how giving children a little cash on a weekly basis develops their financial comprehension and level of responsibility. he came to understand that if he postponed the spending of his dollar his overall wealth accumulated and this allowed him to buy items of greater value. providing children with pocket money is a positive thing. the traditional cultural practices of many societies have become monetized. in China many tourists are willing to pay money to take part in the process of tea making. examples don¶t have to be spot on. I drew this example from a story a friend of mine told me about a vacation he took in Kenya. it has been proven that this practice is more positive than negative. For example. In addition to this. For the people who organize these tourist attractions. as time went on. Although many may argue this is a negative phenomenon. parents who issue their children a minute weekly allowance encourage the development of their child¶s sense of responsibility. the using of cultural traditions for money making purposes is more of a positive than negative thing. Thus. As you can see. Firstly. Do you feel this development is more positive or negative? Today. I feel having control over the use of these funds was one of the first major steps I took in my life towards learning how to become a responsible person. For instance. it is believed that overall this trend tends to be positive in nature. Of . As my personal story shows. Cultural traditions today are often used for money making purposes. the use of cultural traditions provides many of the world¶s unskilled people with a means to support their families.
y In the past. On the negative side. living in the West could make possible their ideal lifestyle aspirations. it is argued this unfortunate state of existence results from different causes in developed and developing countries respectively. it has encouraged the world¶s people to grow closer together through common culture and language. it has caused the customs of certain people to become forgotten. y Why do so many people live lives full of stress and pressure? Discuss the reasons and give possible solutions. Although this competitiveness is good for the world¶s economy as a whole. These days. spoke languages and practiced activities as dictated by their regional culture. Today. the Internet has opened the eyes of the world to the affluent living conditions of those in the United States. many . on the other hand. After analyzing the major causes of stress and pressure in developed and developing countries. These causes and their suggested solutions will be analyzed in this essay. living a life rife with stress appears to be a fairly common plight. try to make them as accurate as you can but equally important is your ability to choose examples that support your points well. it simply is not feasible at this time for the average Chinese person. Firstly. On the positive side. Indian and Chinese brands are becoming stronger and rivaling those of their Western counterparts. there is no doubt that it is causing increased anxiety and feelings of unease among many Western multinationals as they work hard to maintain their market share. Only one hundred years ago. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Globalization has brought with it both positive and negative developments. Although owning a large house and having multiple cars may be plausible for the average American. For those in developed countries. It is hoped this suggested solution helps to reduce stress and pressure in the world today. people living in China who hold their ideal living conditions to the level found in the United States are bound to burden themselves with unnecessary pressure. This will be proven by analyzing how common ideology and culture help to reduce both incidences of war and hate crime. are thought to be often caused by unrealistic ideals. travelling to Asia would allow them to become a part of the growth happening there. In the modern world. it is argued that much of the stress experienced in developed countries comes as a result of the new economic competitiveness of Asia. Europe acts as a good example here. the world¶s cultures resemble one another quite closely. Although the reasons for this appear to be many in number. Firstly.course. countries that share common attributes tend to be less likely to engage in war with one another. Despite this. people wore traditional clothes. it is argued the merging of the world¶s lifestyles is a beneficial trend. For people hailing from developing countries. Pressures in the developing world. Thus. it is felt both groups could benefit from relocation. For example.
crime is increasing.European countries warred with each other over ideological differences. The now peaceful temperament of Europe acts as good evidence to the benefits that come through the blending of ideologies and cultures. Although it is arguably impossible to pinpoint a single cause for the recent rise in global crime. the main culprits are thought to be poverty and political oppression. Thus. strategies that reduce poverty and oppression will be analyzed. Thus. For instance. For example. and this is a very positive thing. Despite the fact that this level of freedom pales in comparison with many other countries. . providing increasing levels of political freedom can be seen as a measure to combat crime. these same countries are proud to be united under a single heading. The addition of schools. libraries and quality health facilities led to the establishment of a new economical status for the people who lived there. After analyzing the manner in which globalization minimizes both the chances of war and crimes motivated by hate. Secondly. such as the Klu Klux Klan. it can be concluded that the mixing of cultures directly reduces hate crime. membership to organized hate groups. This drops occurs simultaneously with the immigration rises that occurred during the same period. For example. It is hoped the mixing of cultures increases globally into the foreseeable future. In addition to this. it is argued that global crime can be reduced through measures that promote public feelings of well-being and security. the merging of global lifestyles poses a negative correlation to the incidences of hate crimes. What are the main reasons for this? What can be done to improve the situation? Support your position with relevant examples and include your own experience. it is concluded that this is a trend that brings positive results to the world. it is felt this thawing of political control has done a lot to reduce crime rates across the country. y In many countries. a once dangerous area of my hometown in Ottawa has undergone major infrastructural development over the past twenty years. encouraging prosperity among poverty-stricken areas can be a very powerful tool when combating crime. has fallen drastically over the last century in North America. providing people more political freedom can also reduce crime. Firstly. after major movements towards cultural. Thus. Today. over the past ten years China has increasingly allowed critical comment of its ruling party to appear in local newspapers. This clearly shows how tackling the issue of poverty creates inroads against violations of the law. With the rise of this new affluence came a major fall in crime rates. A commonality between the two appears to be the dissatisfaction of a people. economical and linguistic unity. To prove this. the European Union.
Despite this noble goal. It is proposed that when cities grow rapidly in size their infrastructures often cannot keep up thus causing a noticeable drop in life quality for certain parts of the city. By following this course of action. migrant children who travel to Shanghai with their parents do not receive any medical coverage or education funding from the government. Although at first this may appear to be an insignificant change. Beijing became a much more comfortable place to travel around in. or whether they deliver too small an impact to be considered truly beneficial. prior to the Beijing Olympics. Thus. the effectiveness of migration control and public transit will be analyzed. to the people that experience Beijing transit everyday this development did a lot for their daily stress levels. Using the larger cities of China as examples. Shanghai has long tackled the problem of over-migration using strict migration laws. . µHu kou¶ dictates a series of restrictions that a migrant must abide to when working or living in a region that is not their own. major reductions in global crime rates are expected. there simply is not the space for individuals to exercise safely. congestion was a major problem in China¶s capital. many proponents argue the general health of a population could suffer if a dedicated facility is not created in a city. the hu kou laws are very effective in keeping Shanghai¶s migration rates down and quality of life up. Thus. For example. It is expected that life quality in the metropolises of the globe will remain high so long as infrastructure maintains pace with growth. As can be expected. On the one hand. if there were not sports facilities. Others say that they have a small impact on individuals. This essay is going to analyze whether sports facilities contribute positively to communities. called µhu kou¶. For example. As the economic hub of China. and thus can be seen as an effective boost to the quality of life within the city. often the true ramifications of such institutions are thought to be mediocre at best.After analyzing the reduction of poverty and political oppression. After analyzing how migration laws and improved transit have helped improve the quality of life experienced in Chinese cities. it is felt these methods could also be effectively applied to other cities in the world. the world¶s biggest cities continue to swell in size as increasingly more people are choosing to migrate towards an urban lifestyle. The quality of life in big cities is worsening. It is for this reason that opinions supporting the construction of athletic resources can be understood. What do you think the reasons are? What can you suggest as a solution? Today. a comprehensive public transit system can do wonders for a city¶s quality of life. people simply would not have any means of getting physical exercise. For instance. migration laws are argued to be an effective solution to the falling lifestyle levels of cities around the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion. in big concentrated cities like Shanghai. Often the drawbacks of this phenomenon include the worsening of the overall quality of life found there. it is felt that crime is best tackled by reducing the causes of unrest among people. With the construction of new subway and bus lines. Some say that public health is important and there should be more sports facilities. Sports facilities are employed in an effort to promote public health. In addition to this.
Thus.On the other hand. a policy of fast-tracking has been adopted. What are the advantages and disadvantages of modernization? Here is my suggested response: A new wave of industrialization has taken the developing world by storm. often producing mixed results. In this case. they are rarely used at all. these facilities are typically without accompanying instructions outlining how to use them. Many old cities around the world are going through a major process of modernization. This has been unfortunately true in areas like Anhui.youtube. For instance. watch my video on proper argument essay structure at http://www. For example. The advantages and disadvantages of the rapid modernizing of many old cities around the world will be analyzed in this essay. buildings and roads. it is felt modernization causes more good than harm. the collective effort being made in India to modernize is also having a positive impact on the lives of Indian people. After analyzing the advantages and disadvantages of bringing the cities of the developing world up to speed with those of the developed world. Perhaps the most significant advantage of this process is the raising of living standards. Thus. if any. many second tier cities in India have seen a boom in the quality of life found there. it is hoped that caution is employed in the efforts made to renew the old cities of the world. it is clear that there are many disadvantages to this wave of modernization as well. there are also notable disadvantages to fast-tracking development. Among many of these countries. However. it can be concluded that dedicated athletic bodies offer more to a community than they take away and thus should be considered a valuable part of any developing metropolis. in addition to the housed sports facilities discussed last paragraph. where the demolishing of many culturally significant buildings is occurring at a degree akin to that of the Cultural Revolution. Shanghai has a tremendous number of smaller public exercise equipment available in parks and residential areas. it is obvious why many feel certain sports facilities are ineffective and a large waste of money. modernization can be seen as a positive thing. China. However. outlining sentence. Ryan¶s note: y This essay question calls for a straightforward argument essay structure. As a result. Although created with the best intentions in mind. Good luck! . If you are new to essay writing. After looking at both the arguments of those in support of public sports facilities and those in opposition. From this perspective. It is hoped more recreational athletic resources are created for public use in the future. For one. despite this advantage.com/watch?v=w3IngQDdYv4&feature=channel_video_title. try to pinpoint the thesis. To review. real impact on the public. rapid modernization often involves the destruction of historical relics. examples and restatement of thesis in the following response. many individuals would claim sports facilities pose little.
that provided by their friends is often very difficult for children to decline. this advice often comes from inexperienced sources. during the Second World War. As posted at ielts-blog. but with the advent of television this did not need to happen. which is two sentences long and somewhat reshapes our essay question to make it easier to respond to. traditionally a person would congregate with others for entertainment. It is argued that television has altered the quality of life for the ordinary person. television has fundamentally affected the manner in which people interact with each other. Alternatively. For instance. After analyzing how television changed both the way global information is shared and the level to which people interact with each other. it is felt the degree to which television has affected the lives of most human beings is significant. Because of television. Please notice the way my essay is structured and the cohesive phrases I use to link the ideas together. Two methods are suggested in which a parent can maintain an influential role in their child¶s upbringing. television in effect has replaced communal interaction as the main outlet for amusement among most people. Thus. namely by being a stable resource of advice and by being open-minded. it is difficult to argue television has not radically changed the lifestyle of ordinary people.Television has changed the quality of life for the ordinary person. This will be shown by looking at both how televised images alter the speed with which information is exchanged and how television has caused social restructuring. The efficiency with which television has made the conveying of information is remarkable. Thus. Do you agree or disagree? One of the most globally influential inventions of the twentieth century is the television. It is believed television has paved the way for new media sources such as the Internet. However. here is the essay question students in Egypt and Turkey received. these families were able to more clearly comprehend the difficulties their young men and women were facing and it is argued this was an improvement to the living standards their ancestors experienced during World War I. please review my how to structure an essay video tutorial playlist).com. For example. the invention of television has revolutionized the way humanity shares information with one another. Whether this is for better or worse. Please also make note of my thesis. televised visuals were extremely effective in maintaining a heightened understanding of the situation overseas for Americans and Canadians at home. Firstly. it is believed that the advice of a child¶s friend is too inexperienced to be considered µpositive¶. Secondly. . Here is the essay question as it appeared on the exam: Children¶s opinions are influenced by their friends. I have written a complete response below it for you to analyze and perhaps emulate. (If you are new to essay writing. Is this a positive or a negative development? What can parents do to influence their children¶s opinions? Here is my suggested response: Of all the influences a typical child is faced with while growing up. it is argued healthy parental influence should always come before that of an inexperienced youth.
it is clear that (insert restatement of thesis). The closed-mindedness of their parents forces these children to seek the advice they need from others. Thus. by acting as a stable role model in a child¶s life. Take traditional families. It is hoped these parenting traits are increasingly seen in the child-raisers of tomorrow. parents who are open-minded tend to make it easier for their children to relate to them. The first provides a brief review of the 2 supporting points you brought up earlier. This is best done with a comment of some kind. Thus. For example. while the second provides a restatement of your thesis using different words. your conclusion needs to leave your reader clearly understanding your position regarding your essay question. among the best ways for parents to remain the most influential source of advice in their child¶s life is to try to understand the problems today¶s modern child faces. Finishing your IELTS essay strong Your essay¶s conclusion paragraph plays a critical role in your essay. Thus. After analyzing the parental practices of stability and open-mindedness. for example. Typically.¶ Following this. your essay¶s conclusion paragraph will be written in 3 sentences. Secondly. Connecting these 2 sentences is an effective way to begin your conclusion paragraph. I recommend students finish their essays with a prediction or recommendation: µIt is recommended«¶ µIt is predicted«¶ Effective examples versus ineffective examples on your Task 2 essay? Let me offer an analogy regarding the importance of examples: Examples are to an IELTS essay as a tent pole is to a tent.Firstly. In other words. it is clear that the influence of a parent should be considered much more positive than that of a child¶s friends. examples are what hold up an argument in an . the student needs to conclude their essay. a parent can gain the trust and respect of their children and thus become a person their child listens too. it is clear parents make the best advisers to their children. your conclusion paragraph will begin something like this: µAfter analyzing (insert supporting point 1) and (insert supporting point 2). it is clear that stability among parenting can lead parents to become more influential in their children¶s lives. it is a known fact that children who have a stable parent figure guiding them tend to listen to their parents more. As this kind of long-term stability is rarely present among a child¶s friends. Children living as parts of a traditional family typically have a very difficult time talking to their parents about modern problems for fear their parents would not understand. Normally in my classes. Just as your introduction paragraph needs to provide your reader with a plan for your essay.
you¶ve got to choose effective examples carefully. The student¶s meaning is probably closer to: It is a well-known fact that the cultures of the world are not uniform. So what makes a good example good and a bad example bad? The answer is simple: (1) Good examples are specific. I consistently see essay opening sentences like these: (1) µCulture is a well-known topic around the world.¶ (Problem: basic grammar) (4) µThe invasion of computers in the classroom has caused student marks to skyrocket. like my father. In a nutshell.¶ (Problem: amplitude) Let me elaborate on why each of these examples prove to be terrible introductions to your essay: In the first example (1). Take the following.essay (whether that argument is yours or someone else¶s). this sentence is too broad. overly generalized statement that is somewhat ambiguous and therefore difficult to understand. Without them. Don¶t write in a manner that will make your IELTS examiner guess at your meaning« Cars are the example. When it comes to choosing an effective IELTS Task 2 essay example. Bad examples are vague. Tell your examiner clearly what the link is between the argument you are trying to support and your evidence« Cars play a good example here as they are the largest source of carbon emissions in the developing eastern world. Bad examples feel like they have been randomly dropped into the essay. (3)Good examples are displayed in a manner that does not disrupt the flow of the writer¶s work. Bad examples show little connection to the argument at all. (2) Good examples demonstrate the argument in action.¶ (Problem: too specific) (3) µThe Global Economy has helped make the World a safer Place. specific is always the goal. for example: Don¶t be ambiguous« For instance. Thus to succeed on your IELTS Task 2 essay question.¶(Problem: too ambiguous) (2) µThere are many people in this world who work hard. When correcting essays written by my classroom and online IELTS students. Of course. the student is making a large. for example. mobile phone growth in some countries has been dramatic. mobile phone growth in China and India has been dramatic. an argument simply fails to hold much water and is impossible to prove. it¶s a bad sign if your IELTS examiner can¶t understand the first sentence you have written! . Instead try being more specific« For instance.
. Giving examples before you¶ve stated your argument is like trying to put on your shoes before you¶ve put on your pants. What we need to do is fit our response into these sections.The second example (2) depicts a student with the opposite problem: their response is too specific. in this case capitalization. When first analyzing an essay question. it is important to decide on an effective structure with which we can respond. The reason for this is that: (1) argument essay structure is much more straightforward than discussion essay structure and therefore (2) lessens the chance of grammatical. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? What traits do you feel best judge a person¶s quality? These sorts of IELTS questions always seem complicated at first. what traits do you feel best judge a person. The third example (3) is a basic grammar issue. The problem is that this alters the amplitude of the sentence and therefore distorts the meaning of the piece. would be responded to in our thesis: It is disagreed that beauty acts as a reasonable marker by which people can assess each other. do you agree or disagree with this statement. at the heart of our essay is a strong thesis upheld by 2 effective pieces of evidence. but they really are not. µSkyrocketed¶ gives the impression that student marks have tripled or perhaps even quadrupled. Saying that student marks have µskyrocketed¶ is an overstatement. As I recommend to my classroom students: write in argumentative essay style unless explicitly told to do otherwise by your Task 2 question. A statement as outlandish as this would need to be supported with evidence. So our challenge then becomes: how can we respond to the above essay question (or questions in this case) using an argumentative structure? As you have seen in my video regarding argument essay structure. the first question. The second part of the question. the qualities of patience and selflessness are felt to be better gauges of a person¶s worth and this argument will be proven in this essay. compare and contrast 2 subjects or opinions. could be responded to in the outline section of our essay: Instead. only µThe¶ should be capitalized. In this example. aesthetical beauty was considered one of the main points with which humans judged each other as people. How to respond to IELTS Task 2 µdouble questions¶ I am often asked by IELTS students what they should do in the event their IELTS Task 2 essay directions pose multiple questions. wording or structural mistakes that can arise from trying to discuss. The final example (4) shows a student who is trying to use more complex words in hopes of making themselves sound more academic. So. I¶m always astonished by the number of students who seem to have forgotten when to capitalize their words and when not too. Take the following example: In ancient Rome.
. Instead. To see this in action. µOur world today«¶ would become: µThe current global situation«¶ or µIn today¶s world«¶. Can you see how sentence 2 has a much more academic air to it than sentence 2? Making this little change will do wonders for the tone of your essay. Please notice than in our thesis we make no mention of µancient Rome¶. (2) The current global situation is unstable in many ways.Great! Now I just want to point out something I feel is important. Sound more academic in your IELTS Task 2 response instantly! An important skill to master is the art of being able to present your opinion without using personal pronouns. Why? Because ancient Rome is not really in the scope of the essay question. µI believe that«¶ would become: µIt is believed that«¶. µI believe that«¶. So basically« µI think that«¶ would become: µIt is thought that«¶. take the following 2 sentences as an example: (1) Our world today is unstable in many ways. personal pronouns. which refers only to the opinion expressed and not the background from which this opinion comes. A trick to instantly help your essay sound much more academic is to learn to write passively and to avoid phrases that use these personal pronouns. The essay question asks: do you agree or disagree with this point of view. IELTS students often like to write µI think«¶. Let¶s take a final look at our thesis and outline sentence combination: It is disagreed that beauty acts as a reasonable marker by which people can assess each other. the qualities of patience and selflessness are felt to be better gauges of a person¶s worth and this argument will be proven in this essay. µOur world today«¶ or other such phrases that express their personal opinion or the collective opinions of a group they belong to using active.
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