The Sunset: An Excerpt
The Sunset: An Excerpt
shook his hand, and when he smiled he revealed his big, bright
yellow teeth. He was very tall and very pudgy, dressed in a red
flannel shirt that had spots of brown liquid stained all over it.
His face was blocky and fat with rosy round cheekbones and two
chins above his thick, white-haired neck. Gazing into his light
blue eyes was like looking through windows on a cloudy day and
a small potato nose was mounted above his red cracked lips.
Gray and white hair, made thin over years of aging, stuck out
from his head and behind his ears. When he spoke, his
Southern drawl was thick and much more noticeable than his
daughter’s was, and his breath reeked of chew tobacco and the
walked in, followed the boys into the living room where they
started out with small talk. She sat on the couch next to her
“You know, Marty, I’m… I’m sorry I acted the way I did when I
saw yer truck outside my house there that day,” said Mr. Travis.
thinks I’m getting too close with one of the gals at my job, so he
“Oh, you know,” Marty said, having not spoken more than
now.”
“Eh… well, what can I say? It’s got its ups and downs.”
for that, of course. But, I was fighting the good war in my youth.
y’know?”
told me you’d known Fanny since we moved here. I’m real sad
“No harm done, boy. I think you’re a good kid. But out of
do. Pop said my mom would handle things while I just stayed
put.”
“Ah, I gotcha. Hell, I’m just glad you were able to make
For the next few minutes the three of them sat around
silently. Fanny turned her head towards the clock, then towards
some time, today,” she said, having not uttered a word for more
than an hour.
“By all means, go ahead,” Mr. Travis said.
Mr. Travis’s hand one last time and went out the door with his
daughter. The two turned left heading down the trail with no
“What’s that?”
times.”
taking in the beauty and serenity of it all. They took off their
shoes and socks and left them behind a bush. They rolled up the
ends of their pant legs and walked through a shallow part of the
lake. It was a pretty, quiet, sparkling lake, and no one was there
but them. They found a lonely deck and sat next to each other,
silent. Every few minutes Fanny, turned to him, then back at the
sky. Marty’s head was down looking at his hands crossed on his
lap.
looked up at her.
family and college and my, um.” He got real quiet. “Book…”
“Your book?”
Then he caught himself. “Um, okay, I’m lying to you. It’s not
make into something great one day. I’ll have to get more into it
with you.”
“Please do that.”
know her, but she seemed too perfect. Too innocent. Too kind.
It was enough that they were friends. How could he ask for
her hand from his back, he laid down on the deck, his eyes
fixated on the fruity sunset’s waning glow. And Fanny lay next
a deck, it was a grassy hill, and instead of Marty, it was her old
sweetheart, Jed, lying right next to her. He, like her in that
They didn’t leave until about a half hour later when the
sun sunk too low. Marty was worried that he wouldn’t find his
way home. The two quickly put their shoes and socks back on
and ran back to Fanny’s house. When they got there, they
lingering fear of an angry Mr. Travis finding out his daughter had
“Yes, Fanny?”
“So did I, Fanny.” He smiled, his eyes returning thanks for all
the time she spent with him. The grin that formed on his face
To be continued.
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