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SNECU WORKSHOP ESSAY / EPT TASK 2 SEM 2, SESSION 20102011

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OUTLINE : ESSAY 1. INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH 1.1. HOOK (ATTENTION GETTER : FUNNEL OR GENERAL TO SPECIFIC / RHETORIC QUESTION / ANECDOTE / STARTLING FACT / DEFINITION / DIALOGUE / QUOTATION) 1.2. BRIDGE (1 OR 2 SENTENCES TO LINK HOOK TO THESIS STATEMENT) 1.3. THESIS STATEMENT (STAND, EMPHASIS, FOCUS AND MAIN IDEA 1 & MAIN IDEA 2)

2. BODY PARAGRAPH 1 2.1. TOPIC SENTENCE 1 2.1.1. SUPPORTING DETAIL 1 EXAMPLE FOR SD 1

2.1.1.1. 2.1.2.

SUPPORTING DETAIL 2 EXAMPLE FOR SD 2

2.1.2.1.

2.2. CONCLUDING SENTENCE 1

3. BODY PARAGRAPH 2 3.1. TOPIC SENTENCE 2 3.1.1. SUPPORTING DETAIL 1 EXAMPLE FOR SD 1
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3.1.1.1.

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3.1.2.

SUPPORTING DETAIL 2 EXAMPLE FOR SD 2

3.1.2.1.

3.2. CONCLUDING SENTENCE 2

4. CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH 4.1. CONCLUDING STATEMENT 4.2. SUMMARY OF BODY PARAGRAPH 1 & 2 4.3. RECOMMENDATION OR PREDICTION

Question: You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Achieving advancement in technology equates to modernity. However, this comes with a steep price for urbanites to pay as they have to face many prevalent problems like gridlock and family disintegration. Therefore, working from home provides the only solution to these current problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write a report of about 250 words. Focus: Thesis statement for Introductory Paragraph:

Agree
Main Idea 1 Topic Sentence for Body Paragraph 1 Main Idea 2 Topic Sentence for Body Paragraph 2

Disagree
Main Idea 1 Topic Sentence for Body Paragraph 1 Main Idea 2 Topic Sentence for Body Paragraph 2

Support Support A B

Support A

Support B

Support Support A B

Support A

Support B

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Example Example SDA SDB

Example Example SDA SDB

Example Example SDA SDB

Example SDA

Example SDB

Concluding Sentence for Body Paragraph 1

Concluding Sentence for Body Paragraph 2

Concluding Sentence for Body Paragraph 1

Concluding Sentence for Body Paragraph 2

Concluding Statement for Concluding Paragraph:

Type A : Essay of Agreement As defined by the Oxford Advanced Learners Dictionary, work is a job or a task which a person does to earn money and home is a house where people live in usually with the family. So, work from home can be defined as earning money by doing tasks or jobs in a house where family resides. There are many advantages to this type of employment and this can be the best solution to many problems. Therefore, it is undoubtedly agreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems because it can help in fulfilling quality family as well as fulfilling working conditions. To begin with, when parents work from home, they can ensure the safety of and the harmony within their family. While working from home, parents can monitor their childrens activities and therefore can prevent the children from being involved in negative activities such as vandalism. For illustration, when parents are always at home, they can ensure the activities in and out of the home which their children are occupied with, will always be the positive ones . Not only that, when the parents are around, their childrens welfare will be taken care of. To explain, the parents can guide their children from befriending bad friends who can influence the children to become juvenile delinquents . In short, the peacefulness and the harmony within a family can be ensured when people work from home. Moreover, many problems can be solved when parents work from home because they have no distraction and they can improve life quality. There are so many familial matters that parents can deal with when they work from home . For instance, when parents are working at home, they can monitor their childrens whereabouts and activities. Interestingly, when parents
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know that their children are safe and happy, they will not be distracted to commit white collar crime such as bribery. Besides that, working from home parents can upgrade their quality of life. More specifically, home is the most intimate and personalized space and by being at home, high performance job can conveniently be produced. Thus this leads to an improved quality work and eventually quality of life. In brief, with focus and conducive at home employment, many problems can be prevented from occurring. All in all, because of the plus points of working from home which are fulfilling quality family time as well as fulfilling working conditions, it can be firmly agreed that working from home is the ultimate way out of the modern worries . After all, the priority is to ensure happiness among the citizens because with that, city folks have no basis to commit crimes. Therefore, it is predicted that almost all countries will promote work from home as it provides a favorable environment for people to live peacefully.

EPT Essay Band:

Task Response : 8

Coherence & Cohesion : 8

Lexical Resource : 8

Grammatical Range & Accuracy : 8

Overall Band: 8

Type B : Essay of Disagreement Is working from home the only solution to all the problems of today? Working from home can be a solution to some problems but not for all. When people work from home, they can spend more time with their family and this creates a harmonious and loving family unit, thus preventing crimes from being committed. Therefore, it is totally agreed that working from home is not the only nor the best solution to current setbacks due to the disadvantages of working from home and the advantages of government financial aids as another solution. To commence, working from home leads to lack of social contact that breeds boredom and freedom. When individuals work from home, they will have limited access to peer communication and thus, boredom emerges. For example, even surrounded with gizmos, people crave for entertainment, and without anyone around, they can entertain themselves with pornography. Besides, freedom is another disadvantage of not having social contact. For explanation, without having constant communication, people will have the liberty to do anything they like, including straying from the right path. As nobody is watching them, they would not hesitate to commit adultery, be sexually promiscuous or even abuse drugs. To sum up, boredom and freedom surface from the disadvantage of working from home due to lack of social contact. Furthermore, government financial aids can be a better solution to working from home as it can lessen financial burden and life pressure. By having financial security, people will have no worries. To illustrate, when city dwellers are happy and peaceful, they are not desperate to commit white collar crimes like bribery and money laundering. Not only can that, without any life pressure, urbanites live in harmony. As an explanation, when people are financially insecure,
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they will create havoc in the society. So, life without any worry is a life without any crime as people have no reason to become the criminals. In brief, government help in the form of finance can solve many current problems. All in all, because of the weaknesses of working from home and the strength of monetary help from the country, it is disagreed that working from home can be the ultimate way out of the modern worries. After all, with happiness, city folks have no basis to commit crime. Therefore, it is recommended to all leaders to provide a conducive environment for people to live in peace.

EPT Essay Band:

Task Response : 8

Coherence & Cohesion : 8

Lexical Resource : 8

Grammatical Range & Accuracy : 8

Overall Band: 8

Type C Essay : Essay of Both Agreement and Disagreement (Argumentative) By 2010, almost 75% of the companies in developed countries have adopted work from home type of employment. This way of working was unheard of before the new millennium. However, this has both advantages and disadvantages. Therefore, it is agreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems due to the quality of family life even though it is also disagreed because of the advantages provided by government financial aids. To begin with, when parents work from home, they can ensure a safe and family life. Working from home, parents will be able to monitor their childrens activities and therefore can prevent the children from being involved in negative activities such as vandalism. For illustration, when parents are constantly at home, they can ensure the activities in and out of the home which their children are occupied with, will always be the positive ones. Not only that, when the parents are around, their childrens welfare will be taken care of. To explain, the parents can guide their children from befriending bad friends who can influence the children to become juvenile delinquents. In short, the peacefulness and the harmony of a family can be ensured when people work from home. On the other hand, government financial aids can be a better solution to working from home as it can lessen financial burden and life pressure. By having financial security, people will have no worries. To illustrate, when city dwellers are happy and peaceful, they are not desperate to commit white collar crimes like bribery and money laundering. Not only that,
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without any life pressure, the city dwellers can live in harmony. As an explanation, when people are financially insecure, they could create havoc in the society. So, life without any worry is a life without any crime as people have no reason to become criminals. In brief, government help in the form of finance can solve many current problems. All in all, because of the plus points of working from home and the strength of monetary help from the country, it can be both agreed and disagreed that working from home is not the ultimate way out of modern worries . After all, the priority is to ensure happiness among the citizens because with that, city folks have no basis to commit crime. Therefore, it is recommended to all key players of the country to provide a favorable environment for people to live peacefully.

EPT Essay Band:

Task Response : 8

Coherence & Cohesion : 7

Lexical Resource : 7

Grammatical Range & Accuracy : 8

Overall Band: 8

Type C Essay : Essay of Both Agreement and Disagreement (Discursive) Working from home is the best way to be employed, said Maria Daud, the chairperson of an NGO for single mothers. This way of working was unheard of before the new millennium. However, this has both advantages and disadvantages. Therefore, it is both agreed and disagreed that working from home is the only solution to many modern problems; agreed because they can focus on important matter; disagreed because of lack of social contact. To start with, many problems can be solved when parents work from home because they have no distraction and they can improve on life quality . There are so many familial matters that parents can deal with when they work from home. For instance, when parents are working at home, they can monitor their childrens whereabouts and activities. Interestingly, when parents know that their children are safe and happy, they will not be distracted to commit white collar crime such as bribery. Besides that, by working from home parents can upgrade their quality of life. More specifically, home is the most intimate and personalized space and by being at home, high performance job can conveniently be produced. Thus this leads to an improved quality work and eventually quality of life. In brief, living in conducive environment of home employment, and having total focus on work performance, many problems can be prevented from occurring. On the contrary, working from home leads to lack of social contact that breeds boredom and freedom. When individuals work from home, they will have limited access to peer communication and thus, boredom emerges. For example, even surrounded with gizmos, people crave for entertainment, and without anyone around, they can entertain themselves with
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pornography. Besides, freedom is another disadvantage of not having social contact. For explanation, without having constant communication, people will have the liberty to do anything they like, including straying from the right path. As nobody is watching them, they would not hesitate to commit adultery, be sexually promiscuous or even abuse drugs. To sum up, boredom and freedom surface from the disadvantage of working from home due to lack of social contact. All in all, because of the plus points of working from home and the strength of monetary help from the country, it can be both agreed and disagreed that working from home is not the ultimate way out of modern worries . After all, the priority is to ensure happiness among the citizens because with that, city folks have no basis to commit crime. Therefore, it is recommended to all key players of the country to provide a favorable environment for people to live peacefully.

EPT Essay Band:

Task Response : 8

Coherence & Cohesion : 7

Lexical Resource : 7

Grammatical Range & Accuracy : 8

Overall Band: 8

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