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Southern California Writers Association Newsletter & - Volume 12, Number 9 -- September 2013 TABLE OF

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Volume 12, Number 9 -- September 2013

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SCWA MIssion! President’s Message ! September 21st Speaker ! SCWA Speaker Schedule ! August Meeting Highlights ! October Speaker Preview! Monthly Meeting Information and Map ! Board of Directors ! Sponsors and Partners! Events and Announcements ! Active Member Directory ! Member Marketplace ! Member Projects ! Have You Picked Up Your Copy Of

! September “Will Write for Food” Contest ! August “Will Write for Food” Contest Winner ! Bring Out the Gutsy in You ! Do You Have a “My Gutsy Story®”?! Future Speakers - February! Terms of Use and Content Information Disclaimer !

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SCWA MIssion

The mission of the SCWA is to provide a forum for promoting the welfare, fellowship, spirit, education, information, and encouragement among published and unpublished writers in the Southern California area.

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President’s Message

Larry Porricelli, SCWA President

Our membership outreach continues to expand. In addition to our paid memberships, which have been steady the last three years, we’ve added 155 new members via Meetup and have 109 members in Facebook. Your Board is discussing the appropriate way to handle our growing web presence, along with some new services we might try out in 2014. Stay tuned for the exciting details. We are considering restructuring the SCWA Board, and preparing to name some new board members. If you are interested in helping out in any volunteer role, even in ways that take little time or effort, please contact me. Our group is thriving in so many ways. Let’s keep up the momentum and fill those last volunteer slots. Thanks. Check out the new Future Speakers profile. It’s a taste of the great talks in our near future.

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September 21st Speaker

“Wince-Worthy Tales - When Reality Takes the Mic”

Mariana Williams

September 21st Speaker “Wince-Worthy Tales - When Reality Takes the Mic” Mariana Williams

Mariana Williams has played piano and sung in hotels and clubs in the L.A. area as well as Casablanca and Japan. She turned her second hobby (boisterously laughing) into a career when she founded West Coast Comedy Contact, an agency that booked comics into one-nighters in L.A. These days when she's not groveling before anonymous literary agents, seeking representation for her two Veronica Bennett novels, she's performing on L.A. stages at story slams. Last March she was a Moth GrandSlam finalist in the competition at the Echoplex Theater (true stories told without notes). Everyone cheered at "It Sucks to be Vain and Poor" and she included the ghastly tale on her CD of stories, Wince-worthy Tales, which is now available.

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SCWA Speaker Schedule

 

DATE""

SPEAKER "

SUBJECT or SPECIALTY

September 21, 2013 "

Mariana Williams" "

 

Wince-Worthy Tales

October 19, 2013 "

 

Ina Hillebrandt" " Got a Story to Tell?

 

November 16, 2013 ""

SCWA Author Panel"" Panel discussion by SCWA Authors

January 18, 2014 "

 

February 15, 2014" "

March 15, 2014 "

Nancy Dodd" " Dr. Ken Atchity "

" D.P. Lyle, MD" " Forensics

From Story Map to Finished Draft in 7 Stages Opportunities in a Dynamic Environment

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August Meeting Highlights “Polishing Diamonds: Rewriting Your Story” Sheila Finch Sheila Finch, winner of the
August Meeting Highlights
“Polishing Diamonds: Rewriting Your Story”
Sheila Finch
Sheila Finch, winner of the Compton Crook Award, the San Diego Book Award,
and the Nebula Award was our first speaker to tackle the critical writing chore most writers dread. She
presented “Polishing Diamonds: Rewriting Your Story.”
Let’s be clear: Ms. Finch did not discuss editing your plot or character portrayal. Once you’ve fixed
those, your next professional obligation is to improve the writing quality, the texture of your
expression. For her, creating the first draft is like pulling teeth, accompanied by self-doubt. However,
she’s joyful about rewriting because “the work is [already] there.”
First, cut extraneous words—whether an editor has told you it’s 1,000 words too long or not—
and pay attention to requested magazine word counts. A. Start with adjectives: Wherever you have
two adjectives in a row, such as “a nice, sunny day,” cut one or replace both with a single better one.
B. Cut all the ly adverbs you use to prop up vague verbs. Replace with a descriptive verb that
incorporates the adverb’s meaning. “He said softly” becomes “He whispered.” C. Find places with
double verbs and omit one or replace both with a more vivid, comprehensive verb. “He stood and
walked” becomes “He paced” or “He headed for….” D. Dialogue tags: Don’t use any other tags than
“he said” or “she said,” and be economical with those. In long dialogue, use “he/she said” at the
beginning and then omit. After about five different exchanges, use a speaker’s name again for
tracking.
At this point, add up how many words you’ve dropped. “Now you’re over the ego hump and are
more open to cuts,” Finch says.
Next, you examine aspects of style. (Ursula Le Guin once had workshop members write an
opening paragraph in which nothing actually happens, but it’s ominous. They were not to use any
adjectives except numbers, if necessary.) Avoid passive-voice verbs [does not mean ing verbs]. In
passive voice the doer is not mentioned. “To say ‘The bank was broken into last night’ is a legitimate
statement but not if you add ‘robbers.’” The fix is “Robbers broke into the bank last night.”
Examine aspects that do not affect the plot. How many names start with the same letter [or have
the same number of syllables]? “Look at the distribution of sexes; keep both sexes in it.” Are the
backgrounds of the characters variable or multicultural rather than similar?
Ms. Finch next asked, “How many spear carriers do you have—on the pro and against sides?” In
other words, “combine characters if possible.” “Don’t give too many names—and none to minor
characters.”
Show versus Tell: Don’t tell the character’s background, as in “He was a miser.” Show him
demonstrating that quality by “not leaving a tip after he counts his money [change].” To show a man is
lying can be implied with “He shifted his gaze.” However, to state, “He wouldn’t meet her eyes” or “It
took him longer than normal to answer her question” is authorial. Finch asks, “Who’s doing the
measuring?”
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October Speaker Preview “Got a Story to Tell?” Ina Hillebrandt A recovering Fortune 500 Consultant,
October Speaker Preview
“Got a Story to Tell?”
Ina Hillebrandt
A recovering Fortune 500 Consultant, Ina Hillebrandt turned to writing a decade
ago. Ina moved to California with her daughter in the mid-eighties. She has written and edited articles
for the New York Times and LA Times and a range of radio, TV and video programs. Ina turned her
focus to specializing in helping people create vivid, compelling memoirs and morphing them into
performance on stage, screen, TV and Internet.
Have you been thinking you'd like to write your Life Stories? Have you starting with notes in a
shoebox? Need help organizing your notes? First time writer? Ina Hillebrandt has worked with folks of
all ages some who've never written before as well as published authors. She has a wealth of proven
techniques to help writers open up to new ways of thinking and writing. Her tools will help ignite your
creativity, improve your writing form and structure, and help shape your life history. Learn how to write
the book of your life.

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Monthly Meeting Information and Map

Meeting Location:

Claim Jumper Restaurant Banquet Room entrance, rear of building 18050 Brookhurst St., Fountain Valley, CA Restaurant telephone: (714) 963-6711

Registration & Networking:

9:30 a.m.

Meeting:

10:00 a.m.

Lunch:

11:30 a.m.

A ernoon Program:

12:30 p.m.

Lunch: 11:30 a.m. A ernoon Program: 12:30 p.m. Meeting Fees (cash, check or credit/debit) Reservation Type

Meeting Fees (cash, check or credit/debit)

Reservation Type

SCWA Member

Student

Others

RSVP by Early Bird Date

$25

$15

$30

RSVP after Early Bird Date or Walk-In

$30

$15

$35

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Board of Directors

President VP, Programming VP, Meetings VP, Membership Treasurer Webmaster Newsletter Editor

Larry Porricelli Open Dava White Brennan Harvey Charla Spence Brennan Harvey Steven G. Jackson

Harvey Charla Spence Brennan Harvey Steven G. Jackson Non-Voting Newsletter Speaker Reporter Mailing List Manager

Non-Voting

Newsletter Speaker Reporter Mailing List Manager

Glenda Rynn

Victory Crayne

Membership Information

Brennan Harvey, membership@ocwriter.com

& Meeting Reservations

Dava White, meeting@ocwriter.com

714-204-6500

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Sponsors and Partners

The SCWA gratefully acknowledges our sponsors, friends, and partners:

The SCWA gratefully acknowledges our sponsors, friends, and partners: La Jolla Writer's Conference of San Diego
The SCWA gratefully acknowledges our sponsors, friends, and partners: La Jolla Writer's Conference of San Diego
The SCWA gratefully acknowledges our sponsors, friends, and partners: La Jolla Writer's Conference of San Diego
The SCWA gratefully acknowledges our sponsors, friends, and partners: La Jolla Writer's Conference of San Diego
The SCWA gratefully acknowledges our sponsors, friends, and partners: La Jolla Writer's Conference of San Diego
La Jolla Writer's Conference of San Diego
La Jolla Writer's Conference of San Diego
The SCWA gratefully acknowledges our sponsors, friends, and partners: La Jolla Writer's Conference of San Diego
The SCWA gratefully acknowledges our sponsors, friends, and partners: La Jolla Writer's Conference of San Diego

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September 2013

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Events and Announcements

The SCWA Terms of Use and Content Information Disclaimer.

Recent Publications

Evelyn Marshall has published her second book: The Way They See.

Marianna Williams has published her third book: The Valentine State. After achieving prominence and success for a book she’s stolen and taken credit for, feisty 38-year old Veronica finds herself faced with the pressures of expectation and a looming deadline. A tongue-in-cheek metafictive book- about-a-book-within-a-book, The Valentine State, is a comedic tale of dysfunction and misadventure. Williams pens a year in the life of a writer as she lives in a beat-up house in Seal Beach, California, with a couple of misfit roommates. Billy Anderson is an ex-classmate turned handyman and small time drug dealer, and Liz Alden, is a gorgeous, young aspiring model. Secrets abound as the housemates get mixed up in blackmail and Veronica is hiding a love triangle. Everything is on the line as Veronica’s deadline steadily approaches, threatening to reveal her for the plagiarist she is and leave the three charming, yet roguish characters high and dry.

Susan Kay Gilmore has published her first non-fiction short story, “Possessed by Baseball.” As the daughter of a semi-professional baseball player, she left home at the age of eighteen and took a forty-one year hiatus from baseball. What happened forty-one years later to turn her into a raving baseball fanatic, and what valuable life-changing lessons did she learn? Is there life after baseball? “Possessed by Baseball” is now available digitally on Sony, Amazon Kindle, Barnes & Noble, Kobo, Copia, eSentral, and Scribd applications.

Conferences and Events

Southern California Writer’s Conference, Sept 20-22, Newport Beach, CA. Central Coast Writer’s Conference, Sept 20-22, San Luis Obispo, CA. “Bring Out the Gutsy In You,” Sept 26, 6 to 9 p.m., Regency South Coast Village movie theatre.

Active Member Benefits

BookBaby offers a 15% discount on all services in 2013 to SCWA members. Enter SCWA2013 as a promo or discount code. The La Jolla Writer’s Conference allows paid SCWA members to receive a registration discount year-round. The Southern California Writers’ Conference, held thrice annually in San Diego, Palm Springs, and Orange County, offers discounts to SCWA members who register early. Suspense Magazine allows paid SCWA members to sign up for a lifetime membership. SPAWN allows paid SCWA members to sign up for a $10 discount.

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Active Member Directory The SCWA offers a complimentary listing with all paid memberships. If you
Active Member Directory
The SCWA offers a complimentary listing with all paid memberships. If you would like your contact
information listed in the newsletter, please forward this information to editor@ocwriter.com.
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Alanen, Marie
Beagini, Marcus
Belmas, Genelle
Berg, William
Bornemann, Douglas
Bradbury, Mary"
Colando, PJ
Crayne, Victory "
Davis, Bonnie Jo
DiVita, Salvatore
Drucke, Carl
Dunn, Polly "
Dutcher, Mary Jo
Gilmore, Susan Kay"
Glenn, Peggy
Goldinger, Sharon"
Harvey, Brennan"
Huss, Erin
Izzo, Dan
Jackson, Steven G"
Jacobson, Don
Jones, Kim
Jordan-Dardashiti, Irene
Khan, Tami
Kimbrough, Andrew
King, Roy "
Kudukis, Alexandra
Lanove, Ivory
Lloyd, Rita Lee"
Long, Laura"
Marsh, Sonia"
Marshall, Evelyn"
McGraw, Sharmyn
Morgan, Glenn
Parker, Lucy
Porricelli, Larry"
Porter, Kathy"
Quinn, Darlene"
Ragsdale, Mike
Rynn, Glenda"
Sikes, Dara
Silverstein, Mark"
Spence, Charla"
Thomas, Shirl"
Turner, Rita
Vicente, Russell
Waits, Marie
Walker, Danny
Warburton, Lynette
Westenhaver, Don"
White, Dava"
Williams, Mariana"
Xiros II, Nikolas H.
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SCWA: editor@ocwriter.com"
stevengjackson.com"
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authorrhking.com"
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rl_loyd@yahoo.com"
ritaleelloyd.com"
949-493-1625
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laura.a.long@cox.net"
wordswortheditorial.com"
949-246-3211
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sonia@soniamarsh.com"
soniamarsh.com"
949-309-0030
Literary Fic "
Evelyn@EvelynMarshall.com"
EvelynMarshall.com"
714-220-1882
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grayguardians.com"
562-431-0366
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SCWA:president@ocwriter.com"
Kathy@grayguardians.com"
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darlenequinn.net"
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Non-Fiction"
CharlaSpence.com"
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SCWA: treasurer@ocwriter.com"
shirlth@verizon.net"
shirlthomas.com"
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donwestenhaver@roadrunner.com"
SCWA: meeting@ocwriter.com"
mariana@marianawilliams.net"
donwestenhaver.com"
714-994-1943
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714-204-6500
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marianawilliams.net

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Member Marketplace SCWA Members sell stuff. Check with the author for details on how to
Member Marketplace
SCWA Members sell stuff. Check with the author for details on how to purchase your copy.
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Crayne, Victory "
King, Roy "
Lloyd, Rita Lee"
Marsh, Sonia"
Marshall, Evelyn"
Marshall, Evelyn"
Porter, Kathy"
Porter, Kathy"
Quinn, Darlene"
Quinn, Darlene"
Quinn, Darlene"
Quinn, Darlene"
Spence, Charla"
Spence, Charla"
Westenhaver, Don"
Westenhaver, Don"
Westenhaver, Don"
Westenhaver, Don"
Williams, Marianna"
Williams, Marianna"
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Symfonie Fantastique"
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How to Survive in the 21st Century as a SSOFF!
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The Provider"
The Way They See"
Gray/Guardians"
Earth’s Ultimate Conflict"
Webs of Power"
Twisted Webs "
Webs of Fate"
Unpredictable Webs "
Personal Healthcare Record (Adult)"
Personal Healthcare Record (Child)"
The Whiplash Hypothesis "
The Red Turtle Project"
Nero’s Concert"
Alexander’s Lighthouse"
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The Valentine State"
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Member Projects

SCWA Members write stuff. Here’s what some of us are up to.

Victory Crayne writes novels in two genres: espionage thriller and science fiction. Usually in both at the same novel. She recently published Reluctant Spy. She is writing her next novel, tentatively titled Nuclear Blackmail. Steven G. Jackson has written five thriller novels, three in the last four years, which are in various stages of development: The Megalomania Gambit (marketing to literary agents), The Zeus Payload (marketing to literary agents), and The Lamia Transmutation (in rewriting stage). Darlene Quinn recenty released Unpredictable Webs, and is working on a fifth book in the series. Don Westenhaver specializes in historical fiction novels which commingle actual historical figures and events with fictional characters. He just completed his fourth novel, Alexander’s Lighthouse, which takes place in Alexandria Egypt during the first century AD, and an agent is reading it. Mariana Williams is Producer of Long Beach Searches for the Greatest Storyteller. In its second season, this event is held at the Long Beach Playhouse. Facebook Fan Page: LB Searches, www.marianawilliams.net/wince-worthy tales.

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Have You Picked Up Your Copy Of

 
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September “Will Write for Food” Contest

The ”Will Write For Food“ contest is a monthly blind competition to determine the best story based on the monthly writing prompt. First prize is a free admission to an SCWA meeting and publication on the SCWA website. Second prize is two movie tickets to a Regency theater. Third prize is a $5.00 gift card. Unlike the previous version, there are no limits to the number of times you can win. Like the previous version, you must enter to win. Join the fun! Email your story before the deadline to meeting@ocwriter.com

September 2013 Prompt

the deadline to meeting@ocwriter.com September 2013 Prompt Compose a story (1000 words max) based on the

Compose a story (1000 words max) based on the above theme. See Do You Have a My Gutsy Story for specifics. The deadline for the September Prompt is September 14, 2013. Sonia Marsh will be the guest judge. Winners will be announced at the September SCWA meeting. An additional prize for the September winner – publication in Sonia’s next Gutsy Story anthology.

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August “Will Write for Food” Contest Winner

There were no entries for the August contest, so no prizes to give away. That makes us sad. We like to give away stuff.

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Bring Out the Gutsy in You

A Free Book Launch Event with “Gutsy Traveler” Marybeth Bond, Keynote Speaker, National Geographic Author, Contributor to LA Times, USA Today, PBS, CNN and Guest on Oprah.

What:

Sonia Marsh, founder of the “My Gutsy Story ® series, launches the first My

Gutsy Story ® Anthology together with our special keynote speaker, Marybeth Bond, and a panel of indie authors who have contributed their inspiring stories to the My Gutsy Story® Anthology. This event is offered at no-cost to the community, and will inspire you to step out of your comfort zone, take risks, and follow your passion. We are offering a no-host bar and raffle prizes from our sponsors.

When:

Thursday, September 26 th , from 6 to 9 p.m.

Where:

Regency South Coast Village movie theater,

1561 W Sunflower Ave, Santa Ana, CA 92704

Who:

- Moderator: Marla Miller, Author and founder of The Marketing Muse workshops

- Sonia Marsh: Award-winning author and founder of the My Gutsy Story® series.

Linda Joy Myers: President of the National Association of Memoir Writers and co-president of the Women’s National Book Association, SF.

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Jason Matthews: Hosts a weekly Indie Authors Google+ Hangout, and is an e- publishing expert.

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Theme:

To inspire everyone to be gutsy and not postpone their dreams. We shall

share our own “My Gutsy Story®” and answer questions related to why we decided to step out of our comfort zone, how we changed, would we do it again, does being gutsy entail danger, and so much more. We encourage audience participation.

Charitable giving: A percentage of the proceeds from book sales will be donated to WomanSage, which provides opportunities, experience and education to enhance and empower all women. Sponsors: We shall announce our sponsors and raffle prizes as we get closer to the event date.

RSVP: Go to http://soniamarsh.com and add your name to the list. Questions: Send e-mail to: gutsyanthology@gmail.com

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Do You Have a “My Gutsy Story®”?

by Sonia Marsh

" Share something "Gutsy" you've done that either:

• Changed you

• Changed the way you think about something

• Made your life take a different direction

Submission Guidelines and possibility of being published in our 2nd

“My Gutsy Story®” 2014 Anthology:

• Written, no more than 1,000 words

Submit to Sonia@soniamarsh.com

• A new story posted every Monday on http://GutsyLiving.com

• One winner/month.

• Winner picks prize from our great list of sponsors

• We offer link backs to your website, and your social media to help you get more readers.

• We promote you on other sites as well.

Check out guidelines and prizes. http://soniamarsh.com/my-gutsy-story-contest

• Questions? Contact: Sonia@soniamarsh.com.

! I'm starting my Pubslush Campaign and hope you check it out and like the rewards I'm offering.

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Future Speakers - February Opportunities in a Dynamic Environment Dr. Ken Atchity Story Merchant Dr.
Future Speakers - February
Opportunities in a Dynamic Environment
Dr. Ken Atchity
Story Merchant Dr. Ken Atchity believes in the power of stories to change
the world. A storyteller himself (his recent thriller, The Messiah Matrix, can be visited on
www.messiahmatrix.com) Ken has been privileged to spend a lifetime helping stories reach their ideal
audiences in both publishing and entertainment. As a literary manager he has sold over 200 books
(fiction and nonfiction), and overseen over twenty New York Times bestsellers, including Mrs.
Kennedy and Me, The Kennedy Detail, Dracula: The Un-Dead, and The Last Valentine. As a
producer working with both major studios and indie financiers, he’s produced thirty-something films,
most recently Hysteria, Erased, The Lost Valentine, and the Emmy-nominated The Kennedy Detail.
His own books include several for storytellers, including How to Publish Your Novel, Writing
Treatments that Sell, and A Writer’s Time: A Guide to the Creative Process from Vision through
Revision.
Former professor of comparative literature at Occidental College and Distinguished Instructor at
UCLA Writers Program, Ken has also served as Fulbright Professor to the University of Bologna and
as regular book review for The Los Angeles Times Book Review for twenty years.
With what he calls “the new Gutenberg Revolution” in full sway with the technologies of
communication, Ken says, “I’ve not been this excited about helping storytellers for years. Today there
is truly a level playing field, where the old gatekeepers are giving way to new methods of reaching the
audience.” At the recent Thrillerfest in New York, his talk on “Direct vs Legacy Publishing” was the
most highly-attended workshop in Craftfest. His analysis of the situation can be found on his website
www.storymerchant.com.
For all his background as manager, producer, writing coach, and author, Ken is proudest of being
known for “thinking outside the box.” “If I find someone stuck in old ways of thinking,” he says, “I’m not
sure I can help him. We’re living in a world of accelerating change, and your mind must be open to
seizing the opportunities such a dynamic environment presents. Storytellers haven’t been this
fortunate in over a hundred years.” That’s what Ken will talk to us about when he speaks in February.
He can be reached at Atchity@storymerchant.com.

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August Meeting Highlights (Cont)

Rather than “tell” that a man likes to show off his body,” you can say, “He opened his shirt down to the navel.” To indicate a teenager’s embarrassment by her appearance, write, “She dropped her chin.” Don’t tell too much of a character’s background (“that’s backstory the author knows”). The reader may begin to doubt the author if he/she tells more than shows. Check for overused quirks. “Are there too many sighs, or does a character often blink rapidly? Ms. Finch complained that all James Lee Burke’s characters seem to have green eyes. Mysteries: “To play fair to the reader, hide the major clues in the beginning, even on the first page.” These details work up front “because the reader doesn’t have any background yet.” Word choices: “If a reader has to keep using a dictionary, you’ve lost the story. If a word is new to you, don’t use it—unless it’s historical, as in a period piece.” In writing science fiction, Ms. Finch has to fight herself from overusing opalescent and translucent. Evaluate the level of your sentence structure, Ms. Finch says, in other words, the ideas you express in independent/main clauses versus dependent clauses or phrases. If you have clauses of equal weight, are the actions of equal weight? “He walked to the store, and he encountered a robber.” Are walked and encountered of equal importance? You make the first idea minor by saying, “After he got there, he encountered a robber” or “After walking to the store, he encountered a robber.” Now the structures are of appropriate weight—but “can be lazy writing… because one implies a reason (or

condition) or incidental information.” The “walking to the store” portion needs to be cut entirely. Ernest Hemingway was so good it was hard to suggest any cutting in his work. Get busy and do the polishing you’ve been dreading. Find out more about Sheila Finch’s workshops: www.sheilafinch.com.

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Glenda Brown Rynn, Reporter grynn@cox.net

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