DESCRIPTIVE WRITNG EXAMPLE

My first experience with a carnival ride was a Ferris wheel at a local fair. Looking at that Ferris wheel, I was dumbstruck. It was big and intimidating. Ever since that first impression a long time ago, these rides have reminded me of something to be afraid of. Even the engines sound scary.

Rewrite with a sensory details, figurative language, and vivid action verbs
My first experience with a carnival ride was a Ferris wheel at a local fair. Looking at  that looming monstrosity spinning the life out of its sardine­caged occupants, I  was dumbstruck. It was huge, smoky, noisy and not a little intimidating. Ever since that  initial impression became fossilized in my imagination many years ago, these rides  have reminded me of mythical beasts, amazing dinosaurs carrying off their  screaming passengers. Even the droning sound of their engines brings to mind the  great roar of a fire­breathing dragon with smoke spewing from its exhaust­pipe  nostrils.     

Goal: Descriptive writing vividly portrays a person, place, or thing in

such a way that the reader can visualize the topic and enter into the writer’s experience.
Characteristics: The general characteristics of descriptive writing include:
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elaborate use of sensory language rich, vivid, and lively detail figurative language such as simile, hyperbole, metaphor, personification

symbolism and

showing, rather than telling through the use of active verbs and precise modifiers

Uses: Descriptive writing appears almost everywhere and is often

included in other genre, such as in a descriptive introduction of a character in a narrative.