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tramhuong Feb 5, 10, 12:41pm #1

Good morning all!


I'm practic ing writing. And this is my first time here. Please help me check this
essay!Thank you.

The mass media, including TV, radio and newspapers, have great influence in
shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree this
statement? Give reasons for your answer.
The mass media, including TV, radio, newspapers play a very important role in our
modern life. They have change our life very much. In my opinion, it is not execrable to
say that they have a great influence in shaping people's ideas, both for the better and
for the worse.
First, the mass media affec t people's fashion. Simply take a glance at the way you
dress right now, it was probably something you have pic k up over the internet or
magazines. What we are wearing may look similar to what famous actors or singers
have worn recently. And all of the things we often to is to imitate the models appear
every day in fashion shows.
Second, we c annot deny that the mass media have a great contribution to shaping our
ways of thinking. What we watc h on TV, radio: what we read in newspaper and
magazines affect ,without our awareness, a great deal to our thinking. Does what
Obama, Bill Gates say on TV mean anything to you? Does what your music idols wear
affec t your taste of fashion? I definitely believe the answer will be "yes". When
choosing what to wear, most of us have a tendenc y to c hoose what is said or shown
to be fashionable by famous people.
Third, it is obvious that the mass media also play an important role in our attitude to
life. Some people complained that children nowadays tend to be lazier and more violent
and want to c ome in for a share of soc ial's product as much as possible. This is simply
the result of bad programmes shown on T.V all time, incontrollable websites and even
the carelessness of parents. To be free from their children, some people allow the
children to surf the webs, without noticing that there are plenty of disasters on
Internet which the young have little experienc e to deal with. People, especially

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teenagers, always have an idol and they tend to follow what their idols do and say no
matter these things are good or bad.
In conclusion, we have absolutely no control over the media. However, we do have the
final decision on the path we c hoose to take. The extent of the power mass media is
able to influence us only reac hes this far, the rest is really still within our control.

mfannin Feb 5, 10, 10:43pm #2

agree or disagree this should read: agree or disagree with this statement?

magazines affect ,without should be: magazines effec t, without

Does what Obama, Bill Gates say should be: Does what President Obama and Bill Gates
say,

Michelle Fannin

EF_Kevin [Moderator] Feb 7, 10, 02:16pm #3

It is nice if you keep the numbers the same, like this:


The mass media, including TV, radio, newspapers play very important roles in our
modern life.
The TV, radio, and newspapers are plural, so you can make "roles" plural, too.

Here is another example of the same thing:


They have change our lives very much.

You could say "my life," but if you use "our" you should say "our lives."

In my opinion, it is not execrable to say that they have a great influence in shaping
people's ideas, both for the better and for the worse. ---- thanks for teaching e a new
word! I never knew the word execrable until now!

:-)

The extent to whic h the mass media is able to influenc e us only reac hes this far, the
rest is really still within our control.

Kevin, EssayForum.c om

tramhuong Feb 7, 10, 05:56pm #4

Thank you a lot for your help, Michelle and Kevin.

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About"execrable", I think I used the wrong word.
Can I use the word "exessive" instead, Kevin? I mean "In my opinion, it is not
excessive to say that they have a great influence in shaping people's ideas, both for
the better and for the worse."
Tramhuong

greentea93 Feb 8, 10, 03:39am #5

They have changed our life very much.


it is obvious that the mass media also plays an important role in our attitude to life
Some people c omplain that children nowadays tend to be lazier and more violent and
want to come in for a share of social's produc t as much as possible

tran

EF_Kevin [Moderator] Feb 8, 10, 05:44pm #6

Good question! Well, I had to look up execrable, ha ha! Excessive does work here, even
though it usually means "too muc h." It really works well here.

A simpler way that is not quite as interesting as your idea for using excessive is to say
"exaggerating:
"In my opinion, it would not be exaggerating to say that they have a great ...

Kevin, EssayForum.c om

tramhuong Feb 9, 10, 02:23am #7

Thank you all for your help!


Tramhuong

BORE Feb 9, 10, 02:51am #8

hmm! not bad for a bigginer ,but i think you only concertrated on the image the media
potrays,check things like attitude of people on c ulture and the new c ulture .

THOSAGO MABORE
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tramhuong Feb 9, 10, 08:09am #9

Thank you, Bore


That's a good idea. I'll think about it!
Tramhuong

serkitinati [Suspended] Feb 12, 10, 12:57am #10

You know? i read it all its good and it has good information. love it so much. good job.

Serkalem

tramhuong Feb 28, 10, 05:24am #11

Thank you for your encouragement, Serkalem!


Tramhuong

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