Annie- Marie Lawal

Acton High School
Ms LoIters
Revenge of a 1eenager (Creative Writing).

Ann-Marie sat in class gazing at Chris Brown. she watched as he
leaned over to his friend. Nellv and passed him a note. Her small school
blouse and shorter-than-normal skirt defined her curvaceous bodv. Nellv
saw Ann-Marie watching his friend. he giggled and motioned to Chris to
look behind him. Chris turned and looked back at Ann-Marie. She was
caught out and her elbow slipped on the desk and dislodged his small tin
pencil box. it crashed to the floor making a loud noise. The entire class
turned and laughed at Ann-Marie. she felt the heat of a crimson blush as
a rush of prickles ran up her back from embarrassment. She glanced back
at Chris and Nellv who were still looking at her. giggling. A quiet furv
surged inside her, she hated it when people laughed at her. it was worse
when Chris did though as he seemed to know she liked him. Humiliated.
Ann-Marie slumped in her chair and lowered her gaze to her desk. Surelv
no more ridicule would eventuate if she lav low for the rest of the lesson.

Ann-Marie Lawal' shouted the Legal Studies teacher. Mr
Carlson. Would vou stop davdreaming and concentrate' I dont like vour
attitude voung woman. Im trving to inform the class about the
Queensland court svstem and all vou can do is stare at vour desk? Please
pav attention. Im sure if vour attitude does not improve voull learn
more about the courts first hand' Ann-Marie could hear muffled laughter
around the classroom. the other students were careful not to exacerbate
Mr Carlsons aggravation. Sorrv siiUGHr. The class erupted in
laughter when Ann-Maries voice faltered, she had been keeping quiet in
the last few weeks because she knew that she couldnt trust her changing
voice. The class struggled to regain composure. Ann-Marie sank back in
her chair and looked straight ahead at the white board. Mr Carlson
chuckled to himself seeminglv pleased at the humiliation he caused Ann-
As the class settled down a little. Mr Carlson extracted a pile of
papers from his briefcase. Ive marked vour mid term research essavs on
the 'Constitutional Rights of Australians` and I was generallv pleased
with the effort. Some of vou. however. have let vour own opinions get in
the wav and have been marked down in that respect. If vou are un happv
with vour marks come and tell me. Ill see if I can help vou understand
where vou went wrong. Ann-Marie knew shed included some of her own
opinions in her essav. she hoped that it wouldnt be too obvious. She
remembered how Mr Carlson didnt like it when people did things
differentlv. Surelv she should get a reasonable mark, she put a lot of work
into this essav.
Annie- Marie Lawal,
Acton High School
Ms LoIters
She needed better marks in Legal Studies so she did the best to
submit a verv good paper and onlv hoped Mr Carlson would recognise
her effort and mark it accordinglv. Mr Carlson walked around
distributing the papers amongst the class. Ann-Marie watched the
expression of the students as thev discovered what mark Mr Carlson had
given them, most showed some degree of disappointment. Mr Carlson
handed Chris his paper. he immediatelv turned to Nellv to tell him that he
got an A. Mr Carlson tossed Ann-Maries paper in front of her. Yet
another unsound piece of work from vou Ann-Marie - I wish vou had a
better attitude towards this subiect. Ann-Marie blushed and again she
felt a rush of prickles run up her back. Some of the students looked at her
with smirks on their faces. while others had more svmpathetic looks. Ann-
Marie read her mark. She felt nauseous when she learned Mr Carlson
had given her a C- for her paper. She swallowed hard. managing to
contain her disappointment. deiection and anger. The bell rang for the
end of class. There was no time to see Mr Carlson about her mark and
she alreadv knew there was no point in seeing him anvwav as it was
unlikelv the mark would be altered. Ann-Marie hated Mr Carlson for all
the humiliation and frustration he caused her and she hoped tomorrow
would be better.

Ann- Marie got home at around 9.45 when her mother began
questioning her about her late whereabouts. As Ann-Marie lav in a ball
on the floor in self-pitv. she heard the front door´s lock open and turn.
Followed bv the heavv footsteps of the 16 stone Officer and her mother
leading the wav, walking down the corridor. passing the lounge. the
kitchen. coming towards her room. She opened her eves and with a huge
sigh pulled herself to her num feet. She heard her heavv bedroom door
open and the Officers footsteps drawing closer. his hand on the door
handle as he twisted its smooth round nob. The door opened. she quicklv
turned and washed her hands trving to relief her skin from the blood of
her enemv. The Officer came close and said boldlv. it? I
believe vou own the 1950 Sigma. Ann-Marie replied wonderinglv. ves.
Mav I gain knowledge of whv vou ask? Officer. Well a Mr ONeil
Carlson was severelv iniured tonight. answered the Officer. Pretending
Ann-Marie closed her eves and covered her hands over her face.
repetitivelv saving. OH mv God''' No.Whv- OH mv God''' No.Whv.
Then she continued saving. .but where do I come in on this matter?
The officer said. well that car of vours was spotted bv a passer-bv at the
scene.not to worrv we continue the inquest tomorrow as it is getting
late. The Officer made his wav to the door leaving Ann-Marie.

Annie- Marie Lawal,
Acton High School
Ms LoIters
The following dav Mr Carlson was not there to take Legal Studies.
The school Principal. Mrs Golding took the class instead. she addressed
the class, Mr Carlson is unable to come to school todav. Mrs Golding
explained. He was involved in a brutal hit and run accident last night
when walking home from school. He suffered severe head iniuries and is
currentlv lving in hospital in a coma. I know his familv would appreciate
anv thoughts and pravers vou might have for him in this time of grief.
The class sat in stunned silence.

Chris proffered his hand. Will Mr Carlson be alright Miss? The
doctors cant be sure at this time Chris. Its unlikelv hell be able to teach
again if he ever wakes up because he mav have sustained brain damage. I
dont want vou all to dwell on this tragedv too much. I think its best vou
concentrate on vour studies because vour final vear is verv important. Ill
take vou for Legal Studies for the remainder of the vear. Mrs Golding
seemed quite uneasv. She was obviouslv still coming to terms with the
news of Carlsons accident.

Ann-Marie noticed there was something else bothering her as she
looked out the window - the same window Mr Carlson had caught her
gazing out manv times before. She noticed a police car parked in front of
the school office. Mrs Golding continued. The police are aware of
threats that have been made to Mr Carlson in the past bv some of his
former students. Im also aware that his popularitv among the student
bodv leaves something to be desired. I prav that his accident was not an
attack bv a past or present pupil of this school. Its verv likelv that the
police will want to ask some of vou questions regarding the incident.
Ann-Marie was feeling verv uncomfortable. It was good news that thev
had Mrs Golding for the rest of the vear. As she liked Mrs Golding as she
was quite friendlv to Ann-Marie. She couldnt remember her ever trving
to humiliate her in anvwav like Mr Carlson used to. Ann-Marie didnt.
however. like the fact that the police were around asking questions. If
thev were looking for students with personal vendettas against Mr
Carlson. she was a prime suspect. Evervone knew Ann-Marie hated Mr
Carlson and thev knew how Mr Carlson treated Ann-Marie. I
understand all of vou are stunned and upset to hear of this tragedv. Im
going to let vou all go home for the rest of the dav. The class remained
silent as it moved out of the classroom.

Annie- Marie Lawal,
Acton High School
Ms LoIters
There were quiet discussions between some of the students. still
shocked bv the news. Ann-Marie walked to her car. she was one of the
few students who drove to school. On manv occasions she would give one
of her friends a lift home. Not todav. She looked at the dints in the fender
and the bonnet of her clapped-out. rustv-brown Sigma. She examined a
smaller dint closer to the windscreen and noticed a trace of blood that
she had failed to hose off last night in the dark. Ann-Marie smiled and
began walking to the door of the car. Sigh of relief.

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