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Introduction

It is argued that students should be taught real life skills, like how to look after money. This
essay agrees that they should be part of the curriculum. The essay will first discuss how
everyday competencies benefit people later in life and then talk about the dangers of not
being taught how to manage money at an early age.
I have completed an effective introduction by doing three things:
1. Paraphrasing the question
2. Stating my opinion
3. Outlining what I will talk about in the rest of the essay or in other words, the main points
Im using to support my opinion.

Conclusion
In conclusion, this essay supports the idea that teenagers ought to be taught functional
subjects like financial planning because it helps them in adulthood and a lack of education
related to these topics can have serious consequences.
So all I have done is restate my opinion and included my main supporting points. However, I
have not simply copied the words, I have used synonyms and paraphrasing to vary my language.
Here are the paraphrases I used:
This essay supports- This essay agrees
should- ought to
students- teenagers
functional subjects- real life skills
look after money- financial planning
later in life- adulthood
dangers- serious consequences
Introduction

Contemporary advances have a serious effect on the planet. While I appreciate that critics
may hope that people will shun the latest developments, I believe that technology itself can

give us an answer. This essay will first discuss how not using electronics is unfeasible,
followed by a discussion of how science is now coming up with ways to reverse global
warming and pollution.
This introduction does three basic things:
1. Paraphrases the question
2. States opinion
3. Outlines what the essay will discuss
Conclusion

In conclusion, this essay acknowledges that technological progress does jeopardise the
planet, but cutting-edge discoveries can actually halt and even heal this destruction.

Adding a Prediction or Recommendation to Our Conclusion

In conclusion, this essay supports the idea that teenagers ought to be taught functional
subjects like financial planning because it helps them in adulthood and a lack of education
related to these topics can have serious consequences. It is recommended that governments
make this a compulsory part of the education system.
In conclusion, this essay acknowledges that technological progress does jeopardise the
planet, but cutting-edge discoveries can actually halt and even heal this destruction. It
is predicted that climate change will be successfully tackled with such inventions.
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