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DBQ

Begin Document Analysis here:


Document: A
Facts:
1. English settlers dug wells so they could captured fresh drinking water.
a. They had advanced thinking strategies which could be transferred to the Jamestown settlers
so they could use these similar ideas. English were good at thinking and making survival ideas.
2. The Jamestown environment wasnt very stable in thoughts of being a stable housing
environment for a long term.
a. The Jamestown environment could be a stable housing area but due to droughts many may
die due to dehydration during the summer. This would result in the Jamestown settlers to have
to find other drinking sources to keep them from dehydration.
3. Food supply in the area wasnt very compatible with the amount of humans in the Jamestown
settlers.
a. Many people part of the Jamestown settlers could die. Their food supply wasnt stable leading
to many death and making the population smaller and smaller by the generations.

Document: B
Facts:
1. Jamestown had drought very often.
a. Droughts lead to the river not over-filling. When the river over-filled it was from the rainfall
which was used for fresh drinking water. This could keep many from dieing leaving the
Jamestown settlers from losing a big chunk of their population by the year.
2. Rainfall wasnt rare but not very often either.
a. Dehydration was very possible for the current settlers because of rainfall being not often
enough to keep the river over-filled.
3. Most of the time when there was rainfall there was lots of rain.
a. When with the lots of rain it wasnt enough to last the year. When droughts occurred they
lasted a long time. Jamestown settlers were vulnerable causing death ranging in large amounts.

Document: C
Facts:
1. Jamestown only got shipments of males.
a. The Jamestown settlers had no women to reproduce which also could lead to many of the
Jamestown settlers dieing in a small amount of time. From this the shipment would have to be
more often because the settlers wouldnt have any young men to help.
2. The amount of men was unsustainable compared to the amount of women.
a. The amount of men was because they needed men to build houses and buildings.
3. They sent more gentlemen than any other type of men on the shipments.
a. They wanted the gentlemen to acquire women from other settlements.

Document: D
Facts:
1. The settlers were over confident
a. Lead to dumb choices
2. They brought lots of grain
a. They ate lots of carbs which fills you up quickly
3. They wanted to trade with the Indians
a. They didnt have success

Document: E
Facts:
1. They shipped 524 men to the settlement
a. The men were dying quickly so they need to keep sending more and more men
2. Many of the settlers died from their own accidents
a. They made many poor choices
3. The indians killed lots of the settlers
a. Indians didnt like the settlers so this lead to them killing lots of them

Begin Outline here: Please follow outline process- Look at the 5 paragraph construction
as a model of how your outline should look.
Attention Grabber:
Claim: Many of the Jamestown colonists died due a myriad of poor decisions, which
affected their water supply, relationship with the Natives, and the motivation of the settlers
themselves.
Roadmap: A large amount of settlers died from the location of the settlement,
mistreatment of the Native Americans, and the lack of resources brought with them.
Intro: The settlers choices were poor enough to cause the deaths of
many of them. For example from document E 11 settlers died from a boating accident,
which is a great example of them making poor decisions.
Reason 1: Although, the settlers made the poor choice of deciding on what location to settle.
Evidence: Settlers died from the poor decision of location which consisted of the water
being brackish. When they settled in Jamestown they used the water as a bathroom. This was a
poor choice because the water didnt flow into a ocean or even a large lake. From this it caused
the water to become dirty and grow bacteria, which when the settlers drank the water they got
sick. (Doc A) Relating to this they made the poor choice of settling in this location, but in some
sort has very low food supply. The fish in the stream were also getting sick due to the dirty
brackish water. Fish in this stream were getting contaminated with illness that were deadly. (Doc
A) From document B, the graph shows that the location of the settlers had droughts very often.
This is one of the causes to the water not being clean and the settlers getting sick.
Justification: Them not having good water and killing off the fish they lacked of
picking the location. The climate didnt have a bigger body of water, which lead to them not
keeping fresh water to drink but also used the fresh water as a bathroom. These poor choices
made many die.
Reason 2: Poor choice of mistreating the Native Americans.
Evidence: Outnumbered the English by a significant margin. They werent very willing
with the English. They mistreated them, such as killing them and forcing them to give them
favorable trade terms. Animosity between the two grew, and when the English really needed
their help during the starving times, they instead sieged them, which they let them die. Francis
West stole corn and food from the Native Americans. His mistreatment made the Natives
hesitant in giving help to the English during the Starving Times leading to thousands of deaths.
(Doc D) The mistreatment of the Native Americans allowed them to not have a trading system,
so this lead to them not have a stable food supply leaving many to die from starvation. The
settlers didnt know how to grow crop as well as the Native American, but also didnt get much
rain to water the crops they grew. They could have used the stream water, that could have been
a watering supply for the crops. The water was very brackish and can also grow bacteria on the
crops, which this would have lead to even more deaths. (Doc D) Jamestown settlers mistreated
the Native Americans which also pushed them to kill some of the settlers. The amount of settlers
killed over a time period of 3 years was unsustainable. The deaths registered at 210 settlers,
which was nearly half of the settlers shipped from England. The total amount of settlers shipped
came up to 524, that consisted of only men.(Doc E)
Justification: This evidence shows that the indians and the settlers didnt get
along after. One can say that the settlers made the worse choice in their life because the indians
provided them with everything they needed.
Reason 3: They made a poor decision of not bringing enough resources to survive for very
long.
Evidence: The English didnt bring enough women with them. This led to them not
having a way of reproduction meaning there will only be grown men. This was a great idea
because men in this time period didnt know how to cook because they relied on the woman to
cook the food. (Doc C) English settlers send shipments of only men which contained anything
from a governor to not knowing what they are going to be useful for. In the first two shipments it
had multiple amounts of men in some jobs with others including 1 person, which leaves them at
risk of them dying meaning they will need 1 or more on the next shipment. For example on the
first shipment they had only 1 surgeon. This was a very poor choice because if that surgeon
died then when settlers need assistance from the surgeon their request would be useless
because they are dead. (Doc C) Another poor choice of resources wise was them bringing a lot
of crops. This was a poor decision because they didnt know how to grow crops, but also in this
settlement area there was droughts very often. The occurrence of droughts wasnt very
surprising due to the geography where they settled. When it rained the streams tide was high
which was usually low during most time periods through the years. This allowed the crops to be
watered but there was so many that the crops didnt get an even share of water leaving many to
die, also due to the fact that there was droughts oftenly. (Doc B)
Justification: This tells that the Jamestown settlers werent smart at making
good choices, which lead to many of their poor decisions. They didnt think before doing in most
cases with major costs in the future, death.
Conclusion: One can now say that the Jamestown settlers made poor choices, which is why
they didnt succeed in completing their attempt at making a settlement. Their poor decisions of
where to make the settlement, mistreating the Native Americans, and also bring the lack of
resources to fulfill the supplement for the settlement. In conclusion, the Jamestown settlers
made very poor choices, which lead to the death of many and also the attempt to succeed with
the experience of failure of the settlement.
Begin Essay here: Please follow model below
Many of the Jamestown colonists died due a myriad of poor decisions, which
affected their water supply, relationship with the Natives, and the motivation of the
settlers themselves. A large amount of settlers died from the location of the settlement,
mistreatment of the Native Americans, and the lack of resources brought with them. The settlers
choices were poor enough to cause the deaths of many of them. For example from document E
11 settlers died from a boating accident, which is a great example of them making poor
decisions.

Although, the settlers made the poor decision of deciding on what location to
settle. Settlers died from the poor choice of location which consisted of the water being
brackish. When they settled in Jamestown they used the water as a bathroom. This was a poor
decision because the water didnt flow into a ocean or even a large lake. From this it caused the
water to become dirty and grow bacteria, which when the settlers drank the water they got sick.
(Doc A) Relating to this they made the poor choice of settling in this location, but in some sort
has very low food supply. The fish in the stream were also getting sick due to the dirty brackish
water. Fish in this stream were getting contaminated with illness that were deadly. (Doc A) From
document B, the graph shows that the location of the settlers had droughts very often. This is
one of the causes to the water not being clean and the settlers getting sick. Them not having
good water and killing off the fish they lacked of picking the location. The climate didnt
have a bigger body of water, which lead to them not keeping fresh water to drink but also
used the fresh water as a bathroom. These poor choices made many die.

Poor decision of mistreating the Native Americans. Outnumbered the English by a


significant margin. They werent very willing with the English. They mistreated them, such as
killing them and forcing them to give them favorable trade terms. Animosity between the two
grew, and when the English really needed their help during the starving times, they instead
sieged them, which they let them die. Francis West stole corn and food from the Native
Americans. His mistreatment made the Natives hesitant in giving help to the English during the
Starving Times leading to thousands of deaths. (Doc D) The mistreatment of the Native
Americans allowed them to not have a trading system, so this lead to them not have a stable
food supply leaving many to die from starvation. The settlers didnt know how to grow crop as
well as the Native American, but also didnt get much rain to water the crops they grew. They
could have used the stream water, that could have been a watering supply for the crops. The
water was very brackish and can also grow bacteria on the crops, which this would have lead to
even more deaths. (Doc D) Jamestown settlers mistreated the Native Americans which also
pushed them to kill some of the settlers. The amount of settlers killed over a time period of 3
years was unsustainable. The deaths registered at 210 settlers, which was nearly half of the
settlers shipped from England. The total amount of settlers shipped came up to 524, that
consisted of only men.(Doc E) This evidence shows that the indians and the settlers didnt
get along after. One can say that the settlers made the worse choice in their life because
the indians provided them with everything they needed.
They made a poor choice of not bringing enough resources to survive for very
long. The English didnt bring enough women with them. This led to them not having a way of
reproduction meaning there will only be grown men. This was a great idea because men in this
time period didnt know how to cook because they relied on the woman to cook the food. (Doc
C) English settlers send shipments of only men which contained anything from a governor to not
knowing what they are going to be useful for. In the first two shipments it had multiple amounts
of men in some jobs with others including 1 person, which leaves them at risk of them dying
meaning they will need 1 or more on the next shipment. For example on the first shipment they
had only 1 surgeon. This was a very poor choice because if that surgeon died then when
settlers need assistance from the surgeon their request would be useless because they are
dead. (Doc C) Another poor decision of resources wise was them bringing a lot of crops. This
was a poor choice because they didnt know how to grow crops, but also in this settlement area
there was droughts very often. The occurrence of droughts wasnt very surprising due to the
geography where they settled. When it rained the streams tide was high which was usually low
during most time periods through the years. This allowed the crops to be watered but there was
so many that the crops didnt get an even share of water leaving many to die, also due to the
fact that there was droughts oftenly. (Doc B) This tells that the Jamestown settlers werent
smart at making good choices, which lead to many of their poor decisions. They didnt
think before doing in most cases with major costs in the future, death.

One can now say that the Jamestown settlers made poor choices, which is why they
didnt succeed in completing their attempt at making a settlement. Their poor decisions of where
to make the settlement, mistreating the Native Americans, and also bring the lack of resources
to fulfill the supplement for the settlement. In conclusion, the Jamestown settlers made very
poor choices, which lead to the death of many and also the attempt to succeed with the
experience of failure of the settlement, but what would you say if you were a Jamestown settler
in this position?

5 Paragraph Essay construction


Introduction
Grabber- What can you say about the topic to grab the attention of
the reader?
Claim-
Is it arguable? Facts are not claims
It cant be too general, or too specific
Does it address the prompt?
Is interesting?
Is it clear and concise?
Back ground-
What are the important details that the reader
needs to know about your topic?
Roadmap-
This is where you briefly introduce the reasons you
have to defend your claim.
Clearly stated, concise
Body Paragraphs
State your Reason
Is it arguable? This is like a subclaim, cant be a
fact
Does your reason support your claim?
Present evidence
Must quote and cite your sources
Several pieces of evidence help in convincing your
reader you are correct
The more evidence the easier your warrant will be
Justification (Warrant, Argument)
How does your evidence support your reason?
Claim? Answering this question will provide you with a justification

Conclusion
Restate your claim
It can be worded a little differently if you wish
Provide Insight
A short summary of your warrants
Provide a Wrinkle
What could be a reason thats not as
obvious, or that was not previously presented in your essay
This is a chance to allow your reader
to further think about your topic after theyve read it.

Five Paragraph Essay Draft Checklist


Revision Process:
1. Before Peer Review, read your paper and complete the self-check using this checklist.
2. With your peer, take turns reading each others essay aloud. You will use this checklist to check one anothers
papers.
a. Bold your Claim
b. Highlight your Roadmap
c. Bold your reasons
d. Highlight your evidence
e. Bold your justifications
f. Highlight your Wrinkle
3. Partners should do the highlighting and bolding to ensure that all major parts of the essay are present.
Essay Component Self Peer
Check Check
Introduction
Grabber- What can you say about the x
topic to grab the attention of the reader?
Claim x
Is it x
arguable? Facts are not claims
It cant be too x
general, or too specific
Does it x
address the prompt?
Is x
interesting?
Is it clear and x
concise?
Back ground
What are the x
important details that the reader needs to know about your topic?
Roadmap
This is where x
you briefly introduce the reasons you have to defend your claim.
Clearly x
stated, concise
Body Paragraph #1
Subclaim - State your Reason
Is it x
arguable? This is like a subclaim, cant be a fact
Does your x
reason support your claim?
Present evidence
Must quote x
and cite your sources
Several x
pieces of evidence help in convincing your reader you are correct
The more x
evidence the easier your warrant will be
Justification (Warrant, Reasoning,
Argument)
How does x
your evidence support your reason? Claim? Answering this question
will provide you with a warrant
Body Paragraph #2
Subclaim - State your Reason
Is it x
arguable? This is like a subclaim, cant be a fact
Does your x
reason support your claim?
Present evidence
Must quote x
and cite your sources
Several x
pieces of evidence help in convincing your reader you are correct
The more x
evidence the easier your warrant will be
Justification (Warrant, Reasoning, Argument)
How does x
your evidence support your reason? Claim? Answering this question
will provide you with a warrant
Body Paragraph #3
Subclaim - State your Reason
Is it x
arguable? This is like a subclaim, cant be a fact
Does your x
reason support your claim?
Present evidence
Must quote x
and cite your sources
Several x
pieces of evidence help in convincing your reader you are correct
The more x
evidence the easier your warrant will be
Justification (Warrant, Reasoning, Argument)
How does x
your evidence support your reason? Claim? Answering this question
will provide you with a warrant
Conclusion
Restate your x
claim- (It can be worded a little differently if you wish)
Provide x
Insight A short summary of your reasoning.
Provide a x
Wrinkle (Give your reader something to further think about after
reading your paper)

When you have finished your essay please answer the following questions
Stars and Steps
Stars Steps

In my essay I did my evidence very well. This In my next essay I need to work on my
evidence provided lots of knowledge but also introduction and first reason more. This is
showed why I chose the claim I chose. because I didnt really write them very well.

Comment on progress or improvement from Another idea perspective I would have wrote
previous essay from teacher feedback this essay from is the settlers being
inexperienced. This is because it is very
similar to the perspective I wrote my essay
from.

The strength of my essay was my evidence. My essay was somewhat limited to the length
This was the strongest part of my essay. of my evidence.

Comment on the work related to style and The next step im going to take in my essay is
fluency criteria on the rubric bettering my essay but also adding a counter-
claim.

Yes, I used the checklist to better my essay


because I didnt have good evidence until I
used the checklist.

Specifically compare your work to the style


and fluency criteria on the rubric.

In my previous essays I didnt use much


evidence which this time I used much more
evidence supporting my claim greatly.
Advanced Proficient Partially Proficient
Opening contains a Opening has a clear Opening just repeats the
clear, high-level claim claim prompt or does not have a
Claim Answers the prompt Mostly answers the clear claim
(Thesis, Provides prompt Does not answer the
Topic background which sets Some background prompt
Sentence) the context for the piece Free of supports, Does not include titles
Provides a grabber pronouns, I think Includes supports,
Provides a roadmap statements pronouns, I think statements
More than 3 specific 3 specific reasons Less than 3 specific
reasons support the claim support the claim reasons support the claim
Specific, compelling Specific text evidence Specific text evidence not
text evidence for each for each reason provided for each reason, and
reason, properly cited Properly cites the or not cited
Provides warrants or evidence Does not provide
Reasons arguments for why text Provides some warrants for why text evidence
(Supporting evidence supports the argument for why text supports the claim
Details) claim/reason and evidence supports the Maintains little or no
Evidence elaboration beyond the claim order, logic or transition words
(Text obvious. Qualifiers are Maintains some order, between reasons
Support) used during the process logic and/or transition
Warrant/A of argumentation. words between reasons
Maintains clear
rgument order, logic and transition
Counter words between reasons,
argument using sophisticated
language
Counter argument
has all of the above
except argues to the
contrary, include a clear
rebuttal of the argument
Advanced, precise Vocabulary General word choice;
vocabulary appropriate appropriate for audience occasional errors in word
for audience and purpose and purpose usage
Advanced language: Some advanced Mostly common or dead
active verbs, figurative language: active verbs, verbs (is, did, go), imprecise or
Style and language, imagery, figurative language, colorless verbs or adjectives,
effective adjectives imagery, effective common phrases
Fluency Fluent variety of adjectives Little variety of sentence
sentence beginnings, Some variety of beginnings, structure, or
structures, length sentence beginnings, length; contains run-on or
Legible, neat, and structures, and length incomplete sentences
error-free Mostly legible, neat, Legible but sloppy or full
and error-free of errors
Ties the claim to a Ties the claim to a Repeats the claim
larger idea: self, the larger idea but is clumsy or statement or supports
Conclusio
world, other literature forced. No conclusion
n Includes a wrinkle
and insight