Eigo Enshu Ted Talk: February 23, 2017

Name: Reina Miyakawa

Topic: Perfect pitch

Scoring out of 5= 5: Excellent 4:Very Good 3:Good 2:OK 1:Needs Improvement

CRITERIA SCORE

Opener (first 30 seconds): Grabs audience’s attention with a story, question, etc. (topic is not clear) 5 /5
Very cute to start your speech with a brief demonstration of your pitch ability!

Body (middle 60 seconds): Information is clear, focused, and interesting 5 /5
Your introduction was very clear and well-structured
Closer (last 30 seconds): wrap up and state your main idea clearly and inspirationally 2 /5
**give us something to think about or some action to take
I wasn’t entirely sure what action you were requesting of the audience…enroll
our babies?
Vocabulary Usage: Simple, natural, easy to understand. If difficult words are used, the speaker explains them 3 /5
Some of the words were a bit challenging—choose simpler words, or explain
complex ones
Grammar: Grammar is correct, simple & clear 4 /5
A few sentences were too complex/awkwardly worded. Simplify and make
shorter sentences
Voice Inflection: clear emotion, strong intonation, charisma 5 /5
You were very engaged and had great charisma

Gestures/Eye Contact/Posture: connecting to audience 5 /5
Nice! Just like a TED speaker
ELI5: Speaker’s speech is easy to understand, speaking slowly, small pauses between phrases 4 /5
Your pictures helped a lot, but some of your ideas were too complicated—
simplify language
Memorized: Speaker doesn't use notes, speaks with confidence and memorization is complete 7 /10
Saki seemed to help you too often—you may’ve been able to remember without
so much help

Time: 4:10 Total speaking score: 40 /50
Total writing score: 50 /50

Notes:
I liked your speech a lot—it was interesting, related to you personally, and we learned
something that is helpful. You were an engaging speaker, and you spoke with
confidence. With more practice, your speech would be much smoother, although it
would be good to simplify your language more. Reina, you have a highly-developed
ability for public speaking. I hope you continue to challenge yourself to speak in
English like this. Don’t miss an opportunity to share your gift for speaking. You can be
a good example for your 後輩 and other Japanese people who are scared of English. It’s
been nice having you in class these past 2 years!