Eigo Enshu Ted Talk: February 23, 2017

Name: Kaho Fujiyoshi

Topic: Twins

Scoring out of 5= 5: Excellent 4:Very Good 3:Good 2:OK 1:Needs Improvement


Opener (first 30 seconds): Grabs audience’s attention with a story, question, etc. (topic is not clear) 5 /5
Without introducing the topic, you really engaged us well

Body (middle 60 seconds): Information is clear, focused, and interesting 5 /5
You did a great job of sharing your whole idea through stories—very

Closer (last 30 seconds): wrap up and state your main idea clearly and inspirationally 4 /5
**give us something to think about or some action to take
your message could have been stated a little more clearly…”recognize twins’

Vocabulary Usage: Simple, natural, easy to understand. If difficult words are used, the speaker explains them 5 /5
Fairly easy to understand—well chosen
Grammar: Grammar is correct, simple & clear 5 /5
Some complex sentences, but your use of pauses helped to make everything
very clear
Voice Inflection: clear emotion, strong intonation, charisma 4 /5
You could benefit from slightly more energy, but you spoke with confidence

Gestures/Eye Contact/Posture: connecting to audience 4 /5
You looked a bit stiff—loosen up a bit more
ELI5: Speaker’s speech is easy to understand, speaking slowly, small pauses between phrases 5 /5
Stories are always good for 5 year olds. Nice choices!

Memorized: Speaker doesn't use notes, speaks with confidence and memorization is complete 8 /10
You nearly remembered the whole thing.

Time: 3:20 Total speaking score: 45 /50
Total writing score: 50 /50

If you could more fully memorize your speech and make your closer a bit more clear,
you’d have a very strong TED talk. I enjoyed your talk so much because you told
stories from personal experience that teach us about an experience all of us have seen
but few of us have had. That is the perfect sort of topic for a TED talk. After
memorizing a bit more fully, I can imagine you giving this speech to an audience at
TED x TOKYO. Well done, Kaho!