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Script Sample Coverage #2

What did you like about this script?

The script has a strong opening with Jef as the narrator. He immediately reveals his connection
to Poppys sad story and it creates an intriguing emotional tether between Poppy and Jefs
character as well as an immediate narrative hook for the audience.

Ernesto and Poppys story begins innocently enough and Ernesto definitely seemed to represent
all of the hopes and dreams that Poppy wished for on page 3. I also enjoyed the writers choice to
include subtle ironic humor in the second half of the script leading up to Poppys encounter with

However, once Poppy gets everything she wished for her character fails to be an active player in
the story rather than a pawn.

What do you think needs work?

Up until Poppys decision to run away with Ernesto on page 6, her parents controlled Poppys
entire life. Likewise, after her night with Ernesto, Poppys life continued to be controlled and
manipulated by others. As a result, it turned Poppy into a passive character in the narrative.
First, her parents try to keep Poppy a secret. Next, Tresla comes in with his factory and then the
villagers try to keep her fed because they benefited from Poppys condition.

I liked the comedic irony that was built up throughout the script. However, the abrupt manner in
which Poppy dies in the sinkhole at the end seemed a bit campy and it made the ending feel a bit

Moreover, even with Jef as the omniscient narrator, the story raised several plot related
questions, such as, if all Poppy and her family ate was gruel, then was the condition unique to
Poppys family or just her? Why did it the effects of Jefs beans last for so long the first time and
how was it discovered that his beans were the source of her condition?

Likewise, if Jefs business was saved because of Poppys condition, would it not have been at
risk again once the advancements in technology made it easier to get power? Lastly, Jef had no
direct contact with Poppy, so why did the writer choose to have him narrate instead of Poppy

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