FIRST LANGUAGE ENGLISH Coursework portfolio Ordoñez, Máximo AR512 0005 Assignment 1: Argumentative piece DRAFT Smoking and

consuming alcohol are as bad as any other type of drugs like marihuana or cocaine. Smocking, is very bad to our health, for example, it can bring you lungs cancer and also it makes you to less the form, because when you run you get tired more quickly. Then, alcohol is also very bad for your health, it can bring you cirrhosis and it drunk you, and so you can easily loose control of yourself and maybe, you can fight with other people without any sense, or you can crash in a car, so it is very dangerous. The only difference that this two substances have compared with the others drugs, are that this two are legalized, so it is easier to find them, and people don’t think that they are so bad and so they don’t look bad at you if you smoke cigarettes or you drink alcohol, as they look to the drug-addicts. Firstly, I would like to talk about the terrible consequences of consuming cigarettes. Many scientific, had proved that smoking can lead to asthma and emphysema. Asthma is a chronic (long-term) disease that makes it hard to breathe and emphysema is a chronic lung disease that can get worse over time, this mean that this little apparently innocent thing, will bring to all smokers many difficulties to breath and also this will have as influence that the person will not feel well. Lots of other diseases are also caused by the cigarette, such as lung cancer, emphysema, heart disease, and ulcers. This lasts have long term effects, but this don’t mean that they are not so serious, this are the more serious ones, because as they have long term effects, …. is very difficult to heal them. Lung cancer, kill more person than any other cancer, and this is because first, millions of people smoke, and second because the cancer starts on the lung but then it spread to the blood and so it is distributed to all the organs in the body so it’s very difficult to stop it. Another consequence of consuming cigarettes, not so serious but very bad view and that affects to our appearance, is that smoking leave the teeth with a yellow colour that make and effect as if the smoker hadn’t brushed his teeth. Also, smoking is a major cause of oral cancer, accounting for 92% of these cancers in men and 61% in women. The increased risk attributed to smoking is of 27 fold in man and 6 fold in women. As with laryngeal cancer, alcohol consumption increased the risk of oral cancer. Then, smocking has also consequences to the no smokers that have everyday contact with people who smoke. For example, little babies inside the mothers who smoke, have a huge probability of dying of “Sudden Infant Death Syndrome”. Also, people that for example work in an office, and one employer smoke near them, the other non smokers employees can be affect by the fume exhaled by the smoker one. This is called second-hand smoke. I’m very use to be with people who smoke because here it’s very common. But luckily, two month ago, in my city (Córdoba, Argentina) it had risk a law that forbids smoke inside public places such as restaurants or shopping malls. This is a very advantageous because firstly, people non smoker will not inhale the fume of

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FIRST LANGUAGE ENGLISH Coursework portfolio Ordoñez, Máximo AR512 0005 other, and also because I think that smokers will smoke less because if they have to go outside to smoke, they will prefer to remain with the desire. Alcohol has also lot of bad consequences for us. Drinking, if it is moderates, it isn’t bad, experts says that a cup of wine per day if good for our health, but if you drink with out control, you will star to act in a different way, more violently and with out understanding everything you’re doing. One of the principal causes of crashes with cars is alcohol. Young people looks as if they don’t know the fatal consequences of drinking and driving. Although they had drink, they mostly admitted driving a car after this. Experts says that although only the 7% of people from 15 to 20 years old are the ones who drives, they represent approximately the 13% of people evolved in fatal traffic accidents, and in most of them, alcohol is involved. Also, alcohol open the doors of sexuality, this if because the people young don’t know very well what they are doing and so it is very probable that they will have sex if the occasion is present. Then, alcohol can produce also cirrhosis that is an infection in the stomach of the person. This can be very serious if it isn’t treated in a good and quickly way. To conclude, if you are thinking about smoking or drinking, think twice because smoking is bad for you. Smoking can cause cancer, emphysema, gum disease, and many more and drinking can cause you fatal crashes react violently, have sex and cirrhosis. Smoking kills more people than any other cancer combined also including aids and alcohol kill more people in the routes that any other thing. I hope you, the smoker and drinker, learned something from this. Very weak grammar and vocabulary. Also, you need to organize your ideas into better paragraphing. Cigarettes and alcohol Smoking and consuming alcohol are as bad as consuming any other type of drug like marihuana or cocaine. Smoking, is very bad for our health, for example, it can cause lung cancer and also it makes lose energy, because when you run you get tired more quickly. Then, alcohol is also very bad for your health, it can cirrhosis and it provokes many effects in the person that is consuming that, and so you can easily lose control of yourself and maybe, you can fight with other people without any sense, or you can crash on a car, so it is very dangerous. The only difference that these two substances have compared with the others drugs, are that these two are legalized, so it is easier to find them, and people don’t think that they are so bad and so they don’t look bad at you if you smoke cigarettes or you drink alcohol, as they look the drug-addicts. Firstly, doctors are concerned about the terrible consequences of consuming cigarettes. Many scientific, have proved that smoking can lead to asthma and emphysema. Asthma is a chronic (long-term) disease that makes it hard to breathe and emphysema is a chronic lung disease that can get worse over time. This means that this little apparently innocent vice, will bring many difficulties to breathe to all smokers and also this will have as consequence that the person will not feel well. Lots of other diseases are also caused by cigarettes, such as lung cancer, emphysema, heart disease, and ulcers. This lasts have long term effects, but this doesn’t really mean that they are

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FIRST LANGUAGE ENGLISH Coursework portfolio Ordoñez, Máximo AR512 0005 not so serious, these are the more serious ones, because as they have long term effects, and is very difficult to heal them. Lung cancer kills more persons than any other cancer, and this is because first, millions of people smoke, and second because cancer starts in the lung but then it spreads to the blood and so it is distributed to all the organs in the body so it is (no contractions in formal style) very difficult to stop it. Another consequence of consuming cigarettes, not so serious but very bad seen and that affects to our appearance, is that smoking leave the teeth with a yellow colour that provokes an effect as if the smoker hadn’t brushed his teeth. Also, smoking is a major cause of oral cancer, accounting for 92% of these cancers in men and 61% in women. The increased risk to smoking is of 27 fold in man and 6 fold in women. As with laryngeal cancer, alcohol consumption increased the risk of oral cancer. Then, smocking has also consequences to the no smokers that have everyday contact with people who smoke. For example, little babies inside the mothers who smoke, have a huge probability of dying of “Sudden Infant Death Syndrome”. Also, people that for example work in an office, and one employer smoke near them, the other non smokers employees can be affect by the fume exhaled by the smoker one. This is called second-hand smoke. I’m very use to be with people who smoke because here it’s very common. But luckily, two month ago, in my city (Córdoba, Argentina) it had risk a law that forbids smoke inside public places such as restaurants or shopping malls. This is a very advantageous because firstly, people non smoker will not inhale the fume of other, and also because I think that smokers will smoke less because if they have to go outside to smoke, they will prefer to remain with the desire. Alcohol has also lot of bad consequences for us. Drinking, if it is moderates, it isn’t bad, experts says that a cup of wine per day if good for our health, but if you drink with out control, you will star to act in a different way, more violently and with out understanding everything you’re doing. One of the principal causes of crashes with cars is alcohol. Young people looks as if they don’t know the fatal consequences of drinking and driving. Although they had drink, they mostly admitted driving a car after this. Experts says that although only the 7% of people from 15 to 20 years old are the ones who drives, they represent approximately the 13% of people evolved in fatal traffic accidents, and in most of them, alcohol is involved. Also, alcohol open the doors of sexuality, this if because the people young don’t know very well what they are doing and so it is very probable that they will have sex if the occasion is present. Then, alcohol can produce also cirrhosis that is an infection in the stomach of the person. This can be very serious if it isn’t treated in a good and quickly way. To conclude, if you are thinking about smoking or drinking, think twice because smoking is bad for you. Smoking can cause cancer, emphysema, gum disease, and many more and drinking can cause you fatal crashes react violently, have sex and cirrhosis. Smoking kills more people than any other cancer combined also including aids and alcohol kill more people in the routes that any other thing. I hope you, the smoker and drinker, learned something from this. Still quite weak in expression. 15 out of 40 Assignment 2: Descriptive – Narrative - Creative

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My autobiography
By Paul “ Bono” Hewson.
My real name is Paul Hewson and I was borned in Ballymun, Dublin. My mother, who was called Iris, was Protestant, and my father, Bob, was a Roman Catholic. When everybody asked me whether I would call myself a Catholic or Protestant, I said that I always felt like I was sitting on the fence. My mother died of a brain hemorrhage at her father's funeral, when I was only fourteen years old. Many of our songs, especially from the early albums ("I Will Follow", "Out of Control", "Tomorrow"), focus on this part of my life. I went to Mount Temple Comprehensive School, an Ecumenical school, which was the first one of these in Dublin. During my childhood and adolescence, me and my friends were part of a surrealist street gang called Lypton Village, where one of the rituals was nickname-giving. I had several names: first, I was "Steinvic von Huyseman", then just "Huyseman", then "Houseman", then "Bon Murray", "Bono Vox of O'Connell Street", and finally just "Bono". "Bono Vox" is an alteration of Bona Vox, a brand of hearing aid. The phrase in Latin translates to "good voice". "Bono Vox" was the name of a hearing aid shop they regularly passed on North Earl Street, just off O'Connell Street, in Dublin. I was nicknamed "Bono Vox" after the shop by my friend Gavin Friday because I sang so loudly he seemed to be singing for the deaf. Initially, I did not like my name. However, when I learned it translated to "good voice", and I accepted it. In the year ‘76, I responded to an advertisement by fellow student Larry Mullen, Jr. to form a band, as did Dave Evans (also known as The Edge), brother Dick Evans (who soon left the band), and Adam Clayton. The remaining four formed a band named 'Feedback', before changing the name to 'The Hype' and finally on U2. Initially I sang, played guitar and wrote songs. As The Edge became a better guitarist, I was relegated to vocals only, but although this, I often play acoustic guitar and harmonica. I married my girlfriend, Alison "Ali" Stewart, on 21 August 1982, in an Anglican ceremony at a chapel on the Guinness family estate. My stint in U2 and relationship with Ali began around the same time. We have four children: Jordan who was borned on 1989, Memphis Eve who was borned on 1991, Elijah Bob Patricius Guggi Q who was borned on1999 and John Abraham who came to the world on 2001. Following the Enniskillen bombing in 1987, several newspapers claimed Provisional IRA paramilitaries had put I on a hit-list for my "fuck the revolution" speech following the bombing that left 11 dead and 63 injured on 8 November 1987. I had been advised to cut my on-stage outburst from the Rattle and Hum film but it stayed. Some papers suggested the film's charity London premiere on 31 October would have to be cancelled. It wasn't, and U2 all turned up, although our attempts to busk in Leicester Square were prevented by crowds and police. In 1992, together with U2's guitarist The Edge, I bought and refurbished Dublin's twostar 70-bedroom Clarence Hotel and converted it into a five-star 49-bedroom hotel,

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which quickly gained a reputation as one of the most stylish (and expensive) hotels in the city. I am almost never seen in public without my traditionall sunglasses. I have said in a Rolling Stone interview that the reason is that i has very sensitive eyes to light. If somebody takes my photograph, I will see the flash for the rest of the day. My right eye swells up. I've a blockage there, so that my eyes go red a lot. So it's part vanity, its part privacy, and part sensitivity. I am on the board of the Elevation Partners private equity firm which attempted to purchase Eidos Interactive in 2005 and I have since gone on to invest in other entertainment businesses. This summer, I have made a travell to Brazil, Chile and Argentina, and there I had played for thousands of people. There I felt really confortable and very well received and I will like to return when I can. This is much better writing, though too factual and at times it sounds like a mere listing of events. 19 out of 40. Assignment 3: Reading and writing

“Love letter to the earth”
In the text “Love letter to the earth” there is shown very well the feeling of love and protection that the red man’s community have to his land. This text is a letter that writes a person from the red man’s community, probably the Indian Chief, to the great chief in Washington, USA. In this letter, there is expressed lot of feelings that I will stand out. When it begins, the text says that the USA wants to buy the land of the red man. This first line obviously shows us the feeling of expanding and of power that this creates. Then, it continues saying: “For we know that if we do not sell, the white man will come with guns and take ours land” There we can perceive that this Indian people, are almost obliged to sell their land, because if not, the USA will start a war against them and they will not only loose their land, but also they will loose lot of 5

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innocent people that will be kill in the battle of saving their land. So that, I think that this is a very difficult decision and so they would have to choose very carefully. Then, if we continue reading, we can see the “innocence” perhaps of the red man, or the “ridicules” of the white man. The “innocence” because nowadays, lots of wars are created because of territory. For example, the war of the Malvinas Islands, that was between Argentina and England. This happened when two little island in the south of Argentina was taken by the English people, and so, lots of young argentines and English people were killed. I also could say “ridicules” to the American people there because the land is for everybody, provided they do not pollute or destroy the history of the place, the red people have no problem of letting them to be there. I can imagine the one who wrote this thinking the ridicules that the sell could be sell, they thing that it is impossible to sell a thing so important and precious. There we can really notice the difference of this people that lives without technology and it is all the time in contact with plants and animals, and all the natural things as rivers or mountain, and with the others that live in the city all full of noise and pollution and with out fresh air or water. Then, there is a part in the text where describes the water: The shining water that moves in the stream and rivers is not just water, but the blood of our ancestors.” Here we can imagine the way in which water is seen not only as the freshest water and the most natural, but also as full of history, they can’t sell that land knowing that there all the history of the red man had happened. After, there are two lines that say: “You must teach your children that it is sacred and that each ghostly reflection in the clean water of the lake tells of events and memories in the life of my people.” And: “You must teach your children that the ground beneath their feet is the ashes of our grandfathers.” Here we can also notice how does this Indian people concede theirs land and what should happen if they have to sell it. We also can see how this community loves their land when it says “the air is precious to the red man”. They really have a great feeling of love to their land. Then another phrase I would like to rescue is “[…] the earth is our mother” and so they treat it as if it is their mother. 6

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To conclude, I would like to say that this people that don’t have nothing technological, or big block of flats, or luxurious international hotels, appreciate the best things of the earth, the natural environment, and perhaps, we should start to be a little bit more like them and start to appreciate our land as our mother or as a gift from God.
Too weak in expression and organization. 4 out of 10 Writing 17 Reading 4 Total mark 21

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