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Alexis Olivas

Professor Batty

English 101

29 May 2017


For starters, I fixed misspellings throughout my essays. Such mistake was misspelling

"endeavors" every time I used the word. Also, the thesis I put in my conclusion was put in my

introduction where it belongs. In addition, I will omitted the second paragraph where I talk about

the painters. Instead I focused on the mural's visual elements and how they support the mural's

message. In the end of each paragraph I added transitional sentences so that the essay can have a

better flow. Lastly, I went through my essay and proofread it. There are a lot of places where I do

simple mistakes that could've been fixed if I had spent time looking back. Such simple mistake

was putting "the" instead of "they".