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Alexis Olivas

Professor Batty

English 101

29 May 2017


I did not state how or why Panorama High is significant to the Latino community. I

changed my introduction to address how Panorama High is significant to the Latino community

by stating how it impacts the Latino population of the school. I also added some things that make

the school specifically designed for Latino students. For that I explained how the only foreign

language offered at Panorama is Spanish and also how once a year the school hosts a Hispanic

themed event called Adelante Hombre/Mujer Latino/a. I talked about how the school impacted

the whole community. For example I stated how dangerous streets such as "Blythe" became

much less dangerous once the school was open. Lastly, I fixed up my MLA formatting and

proofread carefully.