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Peer Review: Research Outline/Draft 1

Reviewer: Araceli Rodriguez

Reviewee: Carolina Gonzalez

Look at the content of your peers outline/draft. Make marginal comments and a summative
comment for the author of the paper which you are reviewing. Carefully consider the authors
implementation of the P.I.E elements in each of their slices. Also consider how and why they
need to be changed. BE CLEAR about what you are saying and why you are saying it.

Keep in mind the following (but also include things you think should be added):
Does each P.I.E element do what it is supposed to in each of the slices?
Does each slice have only one flavor? (is the slice talking about more than one thing?)
Is each slice placed logically within the paper?
Did you understand the content of the slice as it was presented? Tell the author what you
did understand and didnt.
Are the slices understandable for an outsider? Explain what the author can do to make it
more understandable.
Did you understand the content of the paper as a whole? (Is this an effective research
paper? Explain)

Write detailed and helpful comments that will help your peer consider how to
better shape their slices to make a well formed research paper.


1. Extended Response: In an academic voice, discuss the most/least important skill (particular ability or
expertise) or idea (understanding or awareness) that can be gained from this course by an outsider
student considering the readings which have been completed.

You may discuss:

Why one reading is more important than another based on the ideas presented in those readings.
A particular unit within the course.
A critique on a major assignment within the course.
Other (See me for approval)

Format and Requirements

1300-1700 words, 12pt Times New Roman, single spaced, 1 inch margins.
Proper title and MLA header.
Correct comma use and sentence boundary awareness.
Use MLA format (8th edition) for in-text citations.
A works cited page is required.
You must use Detached Impersonal Style for the entire paper.
Quotes may be no longer than 3 lines.

Summative Comments:

Your intro can be stronger by rearranging your words to make it sound more assertive.
When you are writing your point remember that thats the topic sentence. You do not want to
include explanation in this section. Getting straight to the point will allow your audience to
understand what you are writing about easier. Overall, from my point of view what I understood
is that some readings can be more beneficial to students compared others due to the content that
they provide. Your main focus is on Multilingual students and Reading and Writing Without
Authority to prove your thesis, but I believe that in order to make this research paper stronger
you should add another reading that is beneficial. There are areas where you sound repetitive
with the information therefore, adding a different reading to back up your thesis will make the
paper sound less receptive and will make it stronger. Once you have your quotes chosen exactly
that will improve the explanation section more because that is where the understanding and
explanation of the quote should belong. Good job with gathering your thoughts and ideas to back
up your thesis however, I hope the comments will allow you to back up your ideas and thesis
even more.