September 20th, 2017

Thao Pham
Peer Review of Ryan Beiter

Summary:
The author is inspired by a Theory of Everything and wants to understand the universe
and why everything happened at the most fundamental level, thus, the author decided to study
physics and math in college. The author tells a story about Georg Riemann and how Riemanns
theories seemed to be taught in most of his math and physics class. The life story of Riemann
was told and how he changed the worlds way of thinking about Eulidean geometry and created
an entire field of differential geometry. Base on the theories of Riemann, Albert Einstein further
published physics papers on photoelectruc effect and won the Nobel Prize for Physics for that
topic as well. Recently, Einsteins theory of general relativity was confirmed by LIGO, and due
to much inspirations, the author looks forward to study relativity in graduate school and
throughout his career as a physicist.

Major Points:
As a non-physics major reading this paper, I think the paper is well-written and
understandable. The first two paragraphs, the author tells a story about his curiousity and how
the courses he took and other experiences influence his decision to study physics, including the
first theorist, Georg Reimann.
Then the author told a life story of Riemann and his world-changing creation, which led
to Albert Einstein study, even though, the flow is smooth between the two theorists, theres a
lack of tying back to the author, the authors thoughts and experiences. The fifth paragraph
expresses well about Einstein and the authors course work and how it helps shape the authors
direction for the future.
The 3rd, 4th, and 6th (conclusion?) paragraph for me were too much information, even
though theyre informative, theres no connection between the author and the materials. These
paragraphs only talk about Riemann, Einstein and their works.
I think the author should end the paper tying back to the authors narrative and future
pursuits. For now, the conclusion seems to be an informative body paragraph focusing on
Einsteins life and his discoveries.

Minor Points:
The grammars need to be reviewed as well as typos, missing words. (ex. could be,
happened, AP Physics, was lost on my?, )
I dont quite understand the prior on the ordo cognoscendi, if the author can have a
little explaination after the quote, thatd be great. Otherwise, its easy to read and understand,
just need a little more personal narrative.