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Introduction
This lesson will help you write better ‘agree or disagree’ or ‘opinion’ task 2 essays.

These questions are one of the most common on the IELTS writing paper.

Agree or Disagree Essay


Many students fail to do well in this type of question because they do not have a clear opinion and they do not use an
appropriate structure.

In this post we will look at:

1. Structure
2. Deciding Opinion
3. Idea Generation
4. Writing an Effective Introduction
5. Writing Supporting Paragraphs
6. Writing a Conclusion IELTS Preparation Improve Your IELTS Skills Essay Correction

We will use a question from an IELTS past paper to help us understand the task.
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Structure
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The best structure you can use for this type of essay is:

Paragraph 1- Introduction

Sentence 1- Paraphrase Question

Sentence 2- Thesis Statement

Sentence 3- Outline Statement

Paragraph 2- Supporting Paragraph 1

Sentence 1- Topic Sentence

Sentence 2- Explain Topic Sentence

Sentence 3- Example

Sentence 4- Concession Sentence


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Paragraph 3- Supporting Paragraph 2

Sentence 1- Topic Sentence

Sentence 2- Explain Topic Sentence

Sentence 3- Example

Sentence 4- Concession Sentence

Paragraph 4- Conclusion

Sentence 1- Summary

Sentence 2- Prediction or Recommendation

That’s it! Four paragraphs and twelve sentences. You don’t have to use this structure and other structures can get
you a high score, but this structure has been approved by IELTS examiners to be one that will allow students to write
a clear and cohesive essay. This structure will allow you to focus on generating your ideas and then writing an
effective essay.

Deciding Opinion
In this essay IELTS examiners want you to give a clear opinion, so it’s really important for you to make a decision
when you read the question. You will also need to do this in order to write an effective thesis statement.

Let’s look at an example:

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too
much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With this type of essay we have two choices:

1. We agree with the statement or;


2. We disagree with the statement
Some teachers advise that you can partly agree and disagree but this often leads to an essay with no clear focus and
a confusing structure.

So for this essay you can say either:

1. It is agreed that governments should tax fast food or;


2. It is disagreed that governments should tax fast food

I think I will have more ideas for A, so I’m choosing this one. Always choose the one that you feel comfortable writing
about even if you don’t personally feel that way. There are no points for writing about how you feel, you just want to
impress the examiner.

Idea Generation

Now we have to think of ideas for why governments should tax fast food.

Here are some:

Cigarettes and alcohol are taxed in the same way


The money raised could be used to treat people with health problems
Fast food companies should be punished for selling unhealthy food to people
Making the food more expensive would stop people eating it
The money raised could be used to educate people about healthy eating

We don’t need to use all of these, just two for our supporting paragraphs. I’m going to pick the rst and the fourth
ones because I know a little about these two and feel con dent I can expand on them with explanations and
examples. Remember the examiner wants you to fully support your arguments, not just list a lot of ideas.

Now we have two supporting ideas we can move on to our introduction.

Introduction
As previously stated, we will use the following structure:

Paragraph 1- Introduction

Sentence 1- Paraphrase Question

Sentence 2- Thesis Statement

Sentence 3- Outline Statement

For a more detailed explanation please see our post on writing an effective introduction.

In order to paraphrase the question we simply restate it with a different meaning using synonyms. I will also reorder
the question. Here is the question again:

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too
much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

Paraphrased: It is argued that governments should levy a tariff on junk food because the number of health risks
associated with consuming this kind of food is on the rise.

This is our rst sentence.

We now need to write our thesis statement. This is our opinion in one sentence. This essay will agree with the above
statement and will therefore look like this:

It is agreed that a higher rate of tax should be paid by fast food companies.

This is our second sentence.

We now need to write our third and nal sentence, which is the outline sentence. This sentence outlines what you
will write about in the main body paragraphs.
Firstly, this essay will discuss the fact that alcohol and tobacco companies already pay higher taxes and
secondly, discuss how higher taxes could raise prices and lower consumption, followed by a reasoned
conclusion.

So our full introduction will look like this:

It is argued that governments should levy a tariff on junk food because the number of health risks associated
with consuming this kind of food is on the rise. It is agreed that a higher rate of tax should be paid by fast food
companies. Firstly, this essay will discuss the fact that alcohol and tobacco companies already pay higher taxes
and secondly, discuss how higher taxes would raise prices and lower consumption, followed by a reasoned
conclusion.

3 sentences, 77 words.

We now need to write our supporting paragraphs

Supporting Paragraph 1
This paragraph should include:

1. Topic Sentence
2. Explanation
3. Example
4. Concession

A topic sentence tells the examiner what the rest of the paragraph is about. In other words, it is a summary of your
rst idea. It should look something like this:

Higher excise on liqueur and cigarettes has proven to be successful at curbing the harm caused by these
substances.

We now need to expand on this point a little. A good way of doing this is to assume that the examiner has no
knowledge of this subject and you have to explain clearly what you mean. Here is what this could look like:

This revenue has been used to treat health problems associated with these products, has proven useful in
advertising campaigns warning people about the dangers of alcohol and tobacco abuse and tax from fast food
could be used in the same way.

We should now think of an example to support our point. Think about any recent news stories, studies or adverts. If
you can’t think of one, make one up. The examiner won’t check if it is real or not.
The United Kingdom is a prime example, where money from smokers is used to treat lung cancer and heart
disease, while at the same time, pumped into health campaigns in schools to warn children about the dangers
of smoking.     

We have now fully supported our rst point and the last thing we need to do is write a concession statement. This
statement shows that there may be a counter argument or limits to your point. A concession statement
demonstrates that you have thought about the other side of the argument, thus making your argument stronger. It
could look something like this:

However, some may argue that alcohol and tobacco are addictive substances and fast food should not be
treated in the same way. 

That’s it. Four sentences. 102 words. The full paragraph should look like this:

Higher excise on liqueur and cigarettes has proven to be successful at curbing the harm caused by these
substances. This revenue has been used to treat health problems associated with these products, has proven
useful in advertising campaigns warning people about the dangers of alcohol and tobacco abuse and tax from
fast food could be used in the same way. The United Kingdom is a prime example, where money from smokers
is used to treat lung cancer and heart disease. However, some may argue that alcohol and tobacco are
addictive substances and fast food should not be treated in the same way. 

Supporting Paragraph 2
We now repeat the same formula with our second supporting point- higher taxes will increase prices and reduce
consumption.

Our topic sentence:

Increasing taxes would raise prices and lower consumption.

Explaining this further:

Fast food companies would pass on these taxes to consumers in the form of higher prices and this would lead
to people not being able to afford junk food. 

We now support our point with an example:

For instance, the cost of organic food has proven prohibitively expensive for most people.

Finally, we make a concession:


Despite this, people in many developed countries, where the problem is most acute, can afford price hikes and
will continue to eat high fat meals.

The full paragraph would look like this:

Increasing taxes would raise prices and lower consumption. Fast food companies would pass on these taxes to
consumers in the form of higher prices and this would lead to people not being able to afford junk food. For
instance, the cost of organic food has proven prohibitively expensive for most people. Despite this, people in
many developed countries, where the problem is most acute, can afford price hikes and will continue to eat
high fat meals.

Four sentences. 77 words.

Conclusion 

As stated before a good conclusion should include:

Sentence 1- Summary

Sentence 2- Prediction or Recommendation

Don’t write any new ideas in this paragraph.

A summary should just restate your thesis statement and your main supporting points.

In conclusion, junk food should be taxed at a higher rate because of the good precedent set by alcohol and
tobacco and the fact that the increased cost should reduce the amount of fast food people buy.
Finally, we should make a prediction or recommendation based on what we have already discussed. This shows the
examiner that you have really understood the question and the points you have been making.

Finally, it is predicted that with the ever increasing health problems associated with obesity, governments are
sure to introduce some kind of ‘fat tax’ in the near future.

Conclusion done. Two sentences.

Agree or Disagree Sample Essay 


It is argued that governments should levy a tariff on junk food because the number of health risks associated
with consuming this kind of food is on the rise. It is agreed that a higher rate of tax should be paid by fast food
companies. Firstly, this essay will discuss the fact that alcohol and tobacco companies already pay higher taxes
and secondly, discuss how higher taxes would raise prices and lower consumption, followed by a reasoned
conclusion.

          

Higher excise on liqueur and cigarettes has proven to be successful at curbing the harm caused by these
substances. This revenue has been used to treat health problems associated with these products, has proven
useful in advertising campaigns warning people about the dangers of alcohol and tobacco abuse and tax from
fast food could be used in the same way. The United Kingdom is a prime example, where money from smokers
is used to treat lung cancer and heart disease. However, some may argue that alcohol and tobacco are
addictive substances and fast food should not be treated in the same way. 

Increasing taxes would raise prices and lower consumption. Fast food companies would pass on these taxes to
consumers in the form of higher prices and this would lead to people not being able to afford junk food. For
instance, the cost of organic food has proven prohibitively expensive for most people. Despite this, people in
many developed countries, where the problem is most acute, can afford price hikes and will continue to eat
high fat meals.

In conclusion, junk food should be taxed at a higher rate because of the good precedent set by alcohol and
tobacco and the fact that the increased cost should reduce the amount of fast food people buy. Finally, it is
predicted that with the ever increasing health problems associated with obesity, governments are sure to
introduce some kind of ‘fat tax’ in the near future.
 

320 words (band score 9)

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karar nusrat says


March 11, 2015 at 7:16 am

Most high-level positions in companies are lled by males even though the workforce in many developed
countries is made up of more than 50 percent women. Companies should allocate a certain percentage of
these positions to females.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that companies should distribute a certain proportion of summit level positions to women
because more than 50 percent female contribute their energy to work force in many developed countries.
It is agreed that women should deserve this high level. Finally, this essay will illustrate the fact why
companies are prefer to lled higher level between males and why companies should take steps to
allocate higher position into responsible female workers and followed by a reasoned conclusion.

Firstly, female workers lled half of the employe in companies and they are terri c with their work as well
as responsibility. They are very sincere about their meeting and presentation. Now a days female gets
summit position day by day because of their amazing quality. Angela Dorothea Merkel is a prime example,
she is the rst woman and the rst former citizen of the German Democratic Republic to hold either
of ce. She hold a different position such politician, research scientist, chancellor of German, leader of the
Christian Democratic Union. Furthermore, companies should allocate higher position between females
employee this is the great decision.
However, many companies believe that males are more suitable for higher position then females. Because
of males are more intelligent then females and they are organized their company very effectively. Our
society is a male dominating society. they can’t realize women contribution in companies and society. This
is why most of the renowned companies select males to hold higher level.

In conclusion, female have right to hold higher position due to their signi cant existence in many
companies. Companies should distribute summit level of position between males and females according
to their nature.

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christopherpell444 says
March 17, 2015 at 8:37 am

It is argued that corporations should be compelled to give a certain proportion of their executive level role
to females given that that over half of the workforce is female in the West. It is agreed that businesses
should be obliged to assign a signi cant percentage of top-level posts to women. This essay will discuss
rstly, that women should be paid an equal amount of money for doing the same job as a man, and
secondly, the fact that girls are currently outperforming boys on many university courses; followed by a
reasoned conclusion.

Despite years of so called ‘equal rights’ for women in the work place they continue to be underpaid. Many
women who do exactly the same job as their male colleagues earn less money and this is unfair. For
example, a recent survey of accountancy and legal rms in the United Kingdom found that women earn on
average 17% less than men with identical roles. However, this may be due to women taking maternity
leave and falling behind their male counterparts.

This unfairness is compounded by the fact that females are currently getting higher grades in most
university courses. Even previously male dominated elds, such as law and medicine, now see women in
the ascendency and they should therefore be rewarded with top roles. For example, females recently
outperformed males for the rst time in law in U.K. universities. Despite this, employers should bear in
mind that roles should be handed out on merit, not gender alone.

In conclusion, women do deserve an equal share of the good jobs available, namely because they are
capable of doing an equally good job as men and are achieving higher academic standards than men at
university. It is recommended that companies heed the advice in this essay and make their hiring practices
fairer.
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May 18, 2015 at 1:04 pm

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abdullahalrahat says
May 26, 2015 at 5:28 pm

trying

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Ransom says
May 31, 2015 at 10:47 pm

Dear sir,

I want to try as below, can you have a review pls?

Although the ratio of men to women in many corporations in wealthy countries these days are roughly the
same, most executive positions are often occupied by males. It is agreed that there should be equality of
opportunities for women in management boards. Firstly, the essay will discuss the expertise and
knowledge of skilled female workforce, followed by leadership that women may have before coming to a
reasoned conclusion.

To begin with, there is no doubt that there are many women with high expertise and specialized
knowledge in the workplace. According to a recent global statistics, the number of female students in
universities which outperform their male classmates are increasing in many subjects, especially with
those required industrious characteristics and patient. Thus, if multinational companies exclude their
choices for women in higher positions, it will not only be biased against their soft-gender workers, but also
may cause a detrimental effect on their business. For example, Ms Thuy Duong is currently appointed as
deputy general director for Ernst and Young Vietnam, one of the “Big four” companies in accounting and
auditing industries, for her strongly specialized knowledge and many years’ experience in the banking
industry.

Moreover, women often are very tactful and clever in relationships. It is especially true when it comes to
business rapport in which women leadership can be shown brightly. As a result, female executives are
playing an important role in the workplace in terms of neutralizing any con icts internally and promoting
their business externally. However, there are some situations in which male executives are by far better
choices for companies in terms of their physical strong power and decisive traits, for example in heavy
industries.

In conclusion, as female workers often surpass males in many elds, there is no grounds for companies to
exclude them from higher opportunities of their career. It is therefore recommended that companies
should not discriminate their candidates in regard to their gender, but consider their skills and talents for
fully discharging their responsibilities.

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christopherpell444 says
June 1, 2015 at 10:12 am

Well done Ransom. Make sure you skip a line between paragraphs to make it easier for the examiner
to read.

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Ransom says
June 1, 2015 at 1:05 pm

Thank you very much sir!

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Ransom says
June 1, 2015 at 9:03 am

Dear sir,

Pls help to have quick comments on my essay below

Although the ratio of men to women in many corporations in wealthy countries these days are roughly the
same, most executive positions are often occupied by males. It is agreed that there should be equality of
opportunities for women in management boards. Firstly, the essay will discuss the expertise and
knowledge of skilled female workforce, followed by leadership that women may have before coming to a
reasoned conclusion.

To begin with, there is no doubt that there are many women with high expertise and specialized
knowledge in the workplace. According to a recent global statistics, the number of female students in
universities which outperform their male classmates are increasing in many subjects, especially with
those required industrious characteristics and patient. Thus, if multinational companies exclude their
choices for women in higher positions, it will not only be biased against their soft-gender workers, but also
may cause a detrimental effect on their business. For example, Ms Thuy Duong is currently appointed as
deputy general director for Ernst and Young Vietnam, one of the “Big four” companies in accounting and
auditing industries, for her strongly specialized knowledge and many years’ experience in the banking
industry.

Moreover, women often are very tactful and clever in relationships. It is especially true when it comes to
business rapport in which women leadership can be shown brightly. As a result, female executives are
playing an important role in the workplace in terms of neutralizing any con icts internally and promoting
their business externally. However, there are some situations in which male executives are by far better
choices for companies in terms of their physical strong power and decisive traits, for example in heavy
industries.

In conclusion, as female workers often surpass males in many elds, there is no grounds for companies to
exclude them from higher opportunities of their career. It is therefore recommended that companies
should not discriminate their candidates in regard to their gender, but consider their skills and talents for
fully discharging their responsibilities.

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Lucas says
June 9, 2015 at 9:11 pm

Dear sir,

I have a very dif cult essay topic and wrote below. can you have a quick look?

A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-
fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many people advocate that society’s judgment these days are often based on each person’s reputation
and wealth, and therefore, there is no place for traditional values such as reliability, self-esteem and
kindness. It is agreed that wealthy and high status people are shown more respect than others. Firstly, the
essay will discuss the power of money, followed by the discussion on ways of modern society’s judgement.

To begin with, there is no doubt that money can bring a signi cant number of bene ts to its owners.
Better-off people can afford expensive things and material possessions which can not only to meet their
needs but also to create a new pattern of consumption. As a result, their physical appearance and wealth
are often more acknowledged and worthy from the view of the public. For example, in Hongkong, the
majority of famous actresses have been invited to promote for new fashion trends such as clothes and
home furniture. However, being more recognized by the public does also mean there are more
judgements on one’s characteristics and personal traits. If they cannot prove to deserve public awareness
in terms of trust and high self-esteem, they may fail to prolong their positions.

Moreover, in today’s world, there seems to be a change of modern society’s judgement. Businesses and
universities often overvalue people with high social status or reputation in terms of recruitment and
offering considerate remuneration package, especially if they already acquired higher education degrees
or for management levels. For instance, according to a global survey conducted by AC Nielsen in Vietnam
in 2015, average distance between management levels and junior employees in typical companies are
over 20 times, and interestingly, this gap enlarges as the size of researched company increases. However,
that is not to say companies will ignore one’s reliability and personal honor, and in fact, reputable people
often suffer more pressure in order to maintain their current status.

In conclusion, as richness and reputation are the easiest method of judging one’s ability, there are by far
more people applying this method than in the past. However, as inherent traits of a person are not
something that can be shown clearly on the surface, it is predicted that in the long run, society will return
to acknowledge more on traditional values in each person.

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christopherpell444 says
June 10, 2015 at 5:19 pm

Hi Lucas, I’m sorry you don’t have time to give you more detailed feedback, but overall it is a very
good essay.

You have answered the question well and your structure is clear. You have varied your vocab. well
and there are plenty of complex sentences. Well done.

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Lucas says
June 11, 2015 at 9:18 am

Many thanks for your positive feedback sir


It urges me a lot!

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Mint says
June 28, 2015 at 8:22 pm

Hi Sir,

It’s a struggle for me to complete the essay, could you help to take a look and review, I am afraid there is
lots of mistakes because I am quiet new to it.

Many thanks,

Although half of the labor quantity of most of Western countries is females, the excecutive positions
always belong to males. It is totally agreed that the organizations should consider more about females’
contribution. The essay will discuss the fact that females can work as hard as males and the consideration
should be made base on the employee’s quali cation, not gender.
Firstly, women attend in every elds of work and contribute a massive labor. They could be as skillful and
as tough as men. In history, if Henry could be a king, Elizabeth could be a queen too, they both went down
in successfully leading Britain. In universal science, if Amstrong could be the rst U.S man went to the
moon, Lisa Ride was also the rst U.S woman into space. So, there is nothing men can do but women can’t.

Secondly, it is not fair that a woman is declined or less paid because employers pay attention on her
gender more than her pro le and quali cations. It can be easily seen in Hollywood. Actress Charlie
Theron said that she felt she wasn’t treated fairly and didn’t get the expected reward – it would be
different if that’s an actor. Obviously, the movie couldn’t be succeed without the women’s roles. That’s
discrimination.

Finally, both genders are equal and worthy. A person’s quali cation and value determine how she is, not
her sex.

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Anonymous says
July 6, 2015 at 3:23 am

Hello Christopher,

This article is really helpful. You are doing a great job!

I do have a question:

The task above asks “To what EXTENT do you agree or disagree?”. I wonder if I need to explicitly write to
what extent my answer is. For instance: “It is totally agreed that” or “It is completely agreed that”. The
reason why I’m asking is because I read in a book and the author mentions something about this.

I’m afraid to write “It is totally agreed that” when I have a concession in the body paragraphs. It sounds like
I’m saying that I totally agree in the introduction but I partially agree in the body. Do you think it is ne if I
don’t write the extent even if the question is asking for that?

Thank you.

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Christopher Pell says
July 6, 2015 at 10:42 am

Very good question. I always advise my students to either completely agree or completely disagree.
This makes your essay very clear and you can use the rest of your essay to say why you completely
agree or disagree.

Concession statements won’t really dilute your argument because there are always going to be
counter arguments and you are actually strengthening your argument by showing the other side.

That might sound confusing, but it is a trick I learned when I was a lawyer

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Anonymous says
July 7, 2015 at 1:50 am

Thanks for replying. It is really tricky.

I’m still a bit confused. I just would like to con rm if I understood properly.
You mean if I write “totally agree”, I can write the concession at the end of each body paragraphs (because
will not dilute my argument), or I cannot?

May I ask one more question. In your example above you did not write the extent. The thesis only says: “It
is agreed that”. How can the examiner know to what extent do you agree/disagree (since it was not
speci ed)?

Cheers.

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Christopher Pell says


July 7, 2015 at 11:04 am

Don’t worry about it too much. It is great that you are thinking about it, but you might be
overthinking it a little.

You can write that you totally agree or disagree and write a concession statement and this will only
improve your argument, but someone could also leave out the concession and get a 9. There are
many different ways you could answer this question and get a 9.

The key is to answer the questions in a clear way and you should be ne.

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Mariana says
July 11, 2015 at 8:53 am

Hello!

I tried to write the essay you suggested. I would be glad if you could give some comments about it!

It is known that it is more common to nd men occupping the best positions in enterprises than women,
despite women constituing more than a half of the workforce in most countries. For this reason, soome
people believe that employers shold give part of these positions to females. Personally I feel this is not the
best solution for this issue and I will explain why in this essay.

Firstly, men and women have differents interests and maybe there are not enough women interested in
this type of employment to ful ll a half of this position, even though females being more than 50 percent
of the workforce in the country. In the same way, there are some job positions that are predominantly
occupied by women and there is no worry about leaving part of the vancancy for men to work.
Secondly, the main objective of a company is to give a job opportunity to the person best quali ed and
more ef cient. If they were obliged to give these high positions to females, probably they would have to
nd someone with less experience, because if women had the quali cation, they would have the job.
Furthermore, if someone not quali ed get a high position, it could bring severe consequences to the
company, as decreased ef ciency and low producion.

It is true that looking at a big picture of gender equality, leaving half of the high level positions of a
company to women looks like a good solution. But thinking straigh this may not be the best idea because
women may not be so well prepared or even interested in occuping such jobs.

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Christopher Pell says


July 12, 2015 at 10:25 am

Thanks for your essay. Well done. One area you could really improve in is being more speci c. All of
your points are very general. 2nd para- what interest? what positions? Can you give a speci c
example? 3rd para- can you give a speci c example?

Hope this helps.

Thanks again for comments.

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Mariana says
July 13, 2015 at 9:11 pm

Thanks a lot! =)

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Claudia says
July 29, 2015 at 7:12 pm

Dear Sir,

I have written the sample essay as a response. Please would you kindly suggest any improvements
needed. I have my IELTS exams in two days! Thank you.

Over the past few years, as countries undergo development, labor force becomes vital in expanding
companies. Although approximately half of the workforce in businesses are occupied by women, and only
a few are fortunate enough to sit in a high-level positions; I personally believe that keeping males at a
higher position in businesses are more bene cial. Firstly, discussion of the fact that women have other
responsibilities that they need to take care of will be obtained, as well as, explaining how males’ gure
have effects that are favorable as part of being in these higher areas.

Higher level positions in businesses are known for its great responsibilities, which are incomparable to
other types of workforce. Women, especially those with children, has to sacri ce a signi cant amount of
time, may not be able to commit fully on these superior positions. Undertaking this duty may add on to
their stress as a mother. In contrast, some may argue that these two jobs as a women should not correlate
with one another, and as a result, it is believed that one job should not weaken another.

Take a high position role requires a dominant, powerful impression. A large , authoritative gure can be
found in males. These features have a great impact towards prestigious positions; for instance, managers
will gain high respects from employees if these characteristics are visible. Studies have shown that
physical expressions can bring about how the person is treated. Yet, others argue that mental ability is
more crucial than physical appearances.

Men should remain positioned in the more prominent states in businesses due to these main reasons of
characteristics and their small amount of other stressful responsibilities. Companies should hire workers
accordingly with gender for an effective and pro table outcome.

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Christopher Pell says


July 29, 2015 at 7:16 pm

Hi Claudia

Thanks for your comment.


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Hana says
August 22, 2015 at 12:19 am

Thanks a lot
But i have not got what the “concession” is?
If you can explained to me

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April says
August 31, 2015 at 5:53 pm

Hi Chris:

A quick question:

“In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of
eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of
food.

Paraphrased: It is argued that governments should levy a tariff on junk food because the number of health
risks associated with consuming this kind of food is on the rise.”

In terms of paraphrasing questions, should we paraphrase the Topic Words sentence or the whole
question? From the example you provided here, I can see that we should paraphrase the whole question;
however it just does not make sense to me… Would you mind explaining it to me?

Thanks a heap,
April

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Christopher Pell says


September 1, 2015 at 12:03 pm

Every question is different. Some you will change all the words and the structure and some you will
just change some keywords. Do whatever you fell comforatbale and are capable of doing i.e. you can
change without making mistakes.

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Vince says
September 1, 2015 at 4:41 pm

Hi Chris,

Is it compulsory to include a concession sentence at the end of each body paragraph. I nd this is very
confusing when writing a supporting argument.

Thanks

Vu

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Christopher Pell says
September 2, 2015 at 12:25 pm

No, it is not at all compulsory. Feel free to leave it out.

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Heidi says
September 4, 2015 at 2:25 pm

I also struggle with writing “what extent do you agree/disagree” type of essay because I could only nd
one convincing point each for both views. So in this case, if my thesis is “i partly agree”, it would seem to be
more sensible and easier to write the following two body paragraphs.

Here I write an essay for the below topics with my answer to be “partly agree”. Kindly comment if I fall to
the trap of dilution with my “yo-yo” stand.

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that it is not important because life will be easier
if there are fewer languages in the world.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people nd that the dying out of several languages eases their lives. In my opinion, I partly agree
that our lives would be easier because learning a language is hard; however I also believe that it is
unrealistic to just leave a few languages to remain in use in the world. This essay will discuss both views
before coming to a reasoned conclusion.

Most people nd it dif cult to learn a language. To achieve competent level of practicing a foreign
language, it takes great amount of effort and time to learn. From my personal experience, I was raised in
Hong Kong where every local speaks Cantonese. I have spent 20 years time learning both Chinese and
English and I still found it challenging because the two language systems are completely different in
mechanisms.

Despite its dif culty in learning languages, it is unrealistic to leave just a few languages being used in the
world. A language is more than reading, writing, listening and speaking, there are historic relics and
cultural value hindered in it and that is important to us as a part of a community. For example, Maori only
accounts for 10% of population in New Zealand, it is compulsory for every student to learn Maori
language in school in respect to preserving the Maori culture and its ethnicity. Thus a language is
preserved and to be passed on to generations because people value their own culture.

In conclusion, it may appear to be simpler in our world with fewer languages as learning a language is, in
practice, very dif cult; however it is less likely to be happened because people will pass on their valued
languages to generations.

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Bella says
September 27, 2015 at 3:07 pm

Hi Chris, is main topic here “health problems” and micro keywords are “eating too much fast food” and
“necessary for government to levy on fast food”? So we need to discuss “eating too much fast food” and
“levy tax on fast food” in body paragraph 1 and 2, is that correct?

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Christopher Pell says


September 28, 2015 at 12:08 am

Correct.

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shaila says
October 6, 2015 at 8:24 pm

Dear Chris,
I also struggle with writing “what extent do you agree/disagree” type of essay because I don’t understand
should i agree or disagree.. I found a topic of writing task 2 is on ”In a public funded healthcare system ,
people who are willing to pay for the best and fastest treatment should be able to do so”.but i didn’t
understand what should i write about this topic….. please help me….
thanks.

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Christopher Pell says


October 7, 2015 at 3:27 pm

Just pick one side. Your personal feelings about the issue do not matter. Just pick the side you know
most about.

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N89spirit says
October 7, 2015 at 7:00 am

In the question below, I agree with the statment ! Should I talk about why alternative medicines are
ineffecive in the rst body paragraph, and why thet are dangerous in the second ?
QUESTION:
Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these
methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous.

To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Christopher Pell says


October 7, 2015 at 3:22 pm

You can do that.

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Sara Angeleska says
October 8, 2015 at 9:14 pm

Do we need to have a concession statement?

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Christopher Pell says


October 8, 2015 at 9:16 pm

No, they are optional.

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Shaekh says
November 4, 2015 at 1:19 am

Should I recommend/predict anything about the future in the concluding paragraph?

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Christopher Pell says


November 5, 2015 at 7:49 pm

You don’t have to. It’s optional.

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quark909 says
December 4, 2015 at 5:33 pm

hi chris,

Is it okay if on the second paragraph I completely write the counterarguments? or it should always be
another “agreed” sentences that supports the argument.

thanks

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Christopher Pell says


December 6, 2015 at 1:04 pm

You can do both, but I like to just stick with one side in an agree or disagree essay.

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Neeraj says
January 29, 2016 at 12:18 pm

Dear Chris , This is an excellent site for english improvement & IELTS . Great Job & Service to all the
learners.Thanks

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krishna shahi says


January 29, 2016 at 11:48 pm

Dear Chris,
I recently came across this question

Nowadays supermarkets are growing at a tremendous pace and this is causing several local markets to
disappear . Do you think supermarkets are more advantageous or more disadvantageous to people.

in this question is it ok to write only about advantages of supermarkets over local markets … and support
that supermarkets are better than local markets .

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Alexandr says
March 11, 2016 at 1:35 am

Dear Christopher,
Thank you very much for the article.

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