R.A 2.

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by Elleni Rioja

Submission date: 15-Oct-2018 02:03PM (UT C-0700)

Submission ID: 1020497917
File name: R.A_2.docx
Word count: 1797
Character count: 9544
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

93
Elleni,

T his is, f or the most part, a very strong analysis. I

think that you def initely understood the rhetorical
task here, and that you took the time to draw out

/100
your discussion. You did a particularly strong job of
this when you analyzed your f irst source. T here
were, however, times in the second half of your
analysis that you needed to also draw the
connection between your observations and the
audience more clearly. Overall though, very well
done, and I look f orward to your next essay.

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Sp. T his word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proof read your work.

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word. Consider using the article the

Possessive

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

Possessive Review the rules f or possessive nouns.

Comment 1 | Rhet Focus

Good observation.

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QM New Paragraph | Organizat ion

Start a New Paragraph Here

 S/V T his subject and verb may not agree. Proof read the sentence to make sure the subject agrees
with the verb.

Comment 2 | Rhet Focus

Good discussion here.

S/V T his subject and verb may not agree. Proof read the sentence to make sure the subject agrees
with the verb.

Possessive Review the rules f or possessive nouns.

Comment 3 | Rhet Focus

Good.

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Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Missing "," Review the rules f or using punctuation marks.

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

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P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. You may want to revise it using the active
voice.

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word. Consider using the article the

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

QM Concluding transition. | Organizat ion

Don't transition when you conclude a paragraph.

Additional Comment

While you do this above, this particular transition is abrupt and takes the place of a discussion
of the signif icance of the journal's ethos.
 Wrong Article You may have used the wrong article or pronoun. Proof read the sentence to
make sure that the article or pronoun agrees with the word it describes.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

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Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Prep. You may be using the wrong preposition.

Prep. You may be using the wrong preposition.

Comment 4 | Rhet Focus

Ok good, but connect this to the audience.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Possessive Review the rules f or possessive nouns.

P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. You may want to revise it using the active
voice.

Missing "," Review the rules f or using punctuation marks.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Conf used You have used either an imprecise word or an incorrect word.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

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Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

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RUBRIC: 30 1 DEFINITION RUBRIC

RHET FOCUS Prof icient

Rhetorical Focus: Write f ormally and inf ormally, in-class and out-of -class, f or a variety of audiences and
purposes.

ABSENT

BELOW BASIC

DEVELOPING

PROFICIENT

ADVANCED

ORGANIZ AT ION Prof icient

Organize, f ocus, and communicate one’s thoughts clearly and ef f ectively to address a rhetorical situation.

ABSENT

BELOW BASIC

DEVELOPING

PROFICIENT

ADVANCED

LANG & DESIGN Advanced

Academic Language and Design: Recognize, evaluate, and employ the f eatures and contexts of language
and design that express and inf luence meaning and that demonstrate sensitivity to gender and cultural
dif f erences.

ABSENT

BELOW BASIC

DEVELOPING

PROFICIENT

ADVANCED

CIT AT ION Advanced

Use your major’s customary citation style to ethically cite and communicate inf o f rom a variety of
appropriate sources

ABSENT

BELOW BASIC
DEVELOPING

PROFICIENT

ADVANCED